Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (e.g., 'things are simple', 'I don't carry many keys'). Add one specific detail using a linking word to support your answer. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don't usually carry many keys. I prefer to keep things simple, so I only carry the keys I need for home and work. For example, I keep one house key and one office key on a small keyring to avoid bulk.

提案: Correct grammar and be specific about timing and frequency. Use linking words like 'however' or 'since' to show contrast. Avoid awkward phrasing ('I responsibly use myself'). Provide one concrete example of a change in behaviour.

例: Yes, I lost my keys several times when I was younger, which upset my mother. However, since I moved to France for my studies, I have become more careful and I haven't lost any keys because I always put them in the same pocket as soon as I get home.

提案: Be concise and eliminate repetitions. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then give a brief specific example and a result using a linking word like 'so' or 'therefore'. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: It happened once or twice when I was a teenager. For example, I was locked outside my apartment and had to wait for my mother, so now I always check for my keys before leaving the house.

提案: Clarify vocabulary (neighbour vs neighbourhood) and structure the response: state your opinion, give a condition, and offer an alternative. Use linking words such as 'if' and 'otherwise'. Avoid awkward phrasing ('you are a lockout').

例: Yes, it can be a good idea if you trust your neighbour. If you don't know your neighbours well, however, it's safer to hide a spare key in a discreet spot at home or use a coded lockbox outside the house.

× The short answer is no, I don't always bring a lot of keys with me because, uh, I like when the things is simple and I won't pick up a key just for the main reason.

✓ The short answer is no, I don't always bring a lot of keys with me because I like things to be simple and I won't pick up a key unless I have a good reason.

Original uses incorrect pronoun/phrase 'the things is simple' and awkward 'for the main reason'. 'Things' is plural so use 'things to be simple' and use 'unless I have a good reason' to express conditional purpose. Also remove filler words for clarity. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× So I don't have a lot of keys in my umm, wallet umm.

✓ So I don't have a lot of keys in my wallet.

The sentence is acceptable but has unnecessary fillers. Keep 'wallet' singular. The main issue was extraneous hesitation words; no plural change needed. Clean sentence improves grammatical correctness and fluency. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× Definitely when I was younger I lost my key a lot of times and my mom was upset of that.

✓ Definitely when I was younger I lost my keys a lot of times and my mom was upset about that.

Use plural 'keys' because multiple occasions imply multiple keys or repeated loss; also preposition should be 'about' not 'of'. This addresses both plural and preposition but primary is plural. Grammar Problem Type ID: 1

× But when I moved to France for my studies, I responsibly use myself and I never lost again one key because I can count only on myself.

✓ But when I moved to France for my studies, I learned to be responsible and I never lost a key again because I could only count on myself.

Phrase 'responsibly use myself' is incorrect; use 'learned to be responsible'. 'Never lost again one key' has wrong word order: use 'never lost a key again'. Tense consistency: past context uses 'learned' and 'could'. Pronoun 'myself' is fine at end to emphasize relying on oneself. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× I think it happened to me once or twice when I was a teenager.

✓ I think it happened to me once or twice when I was a teenager.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no change. It correctly uses past simple 'happened' for a past event. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× I was locked outside my apartment and I I had to wait my mom.

✓ I was locked outside my apartment and I had to wait for my mom.

Duplicate 'I' is an error and the verb 'wait' requires the preposition 'for' when indicating the person being waited for. Fixing these yields correct sentence structure. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× It was a good experience for me because now I'm more careful about my keys.

✓ It was a good experience for me because now I'm more careful with my keys.

Use 'careful with' (common collocation) rather than 'careful about' when referring to handling objects. Tenses are consistent: past cause, present result. Grammar Problem Type ID: 6

× Definitely. I think it's a good idea if you have a good relationship with your neighborhoods.

✓ Definitely. I think it's a good idea if you have a good relationship with your neighbours.

'Neighborhoods' is plural and means multiple areas; the intended word is 'neighbour' or 'neighbourhood' singular. Here 'neighbour' (or 'neighbouring person') is contextually 'neighbour' (British spelling 'neighbour'). Also avoid repeating 'good'. Grammar Problem Type ID: 13

× Of course, if you don't have this kind of relationship with your neighborhood, you can leave your key in a secret place in your home or your garden to avoid that kind of situation or you are a lockout.

✓ Of course, if you don't have this kind of relationship with your neighbour, you can leave a key in a secret place in your home or garden to avoid being locked out.

Replace 'your neighborhood' with 'your neighbour' to refer to a person. Use 'a key' rather than 'your key' for general advice. The phrase 'or you are a lockout' is incorrect; use passive 'being locked out'. This fixes pronoun reference and corrects idiomatic expression. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12