Keys— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and use a clear topic sentence. Correct tense and word choice (use present simple), avoid repetition, and give one or two concise reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' appropriately.

例: No, I usually only take the keys I will need. For example, I carry my house key and office key because I don’t want to lose extra keys, and it’s easier to keep track of just a few.

提案: Answer directly and use correct past tense when talking about past events. Provide a brief specific example and connect it to your habit using linking words like 'so' or 'because'.

例: Yes, I have lost my keys a few times. For instance, once I left them on a bus, so now I only carry the keys I need to avoid losing them.

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct. Use simple past for past events and avoid confusing explanations. Describe the incident clearly and state the frequency (e.g., 'rarely' or 'once').

例: I rarely forget my keys, but once I did and I was locked out of my flat. I felt embarrassed because I had to climb up to the balcony to get in, which was unsafe.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then explain conditions using linking phrases like 'if' and 'because'. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., 'neighbor', 'spare key') and avoid irrelevant words.

例: Yes, I think it can be a good idea if you trust your neighbor. For example, I would leave a spare key with a close neighbor because they could let my family in if we were locked out.

× No, no, I didn't.

✓ No, no, I don't.

The student is answering a present habitual question (Do you always bring...). Using 'didn't' incorrectly shifts to past simple. Use present simple 'don't' for habitual actions. Suggestion: use 'I don't' for current habits.

× Usually I only bring the keys that I really know that I will use this case because it's very easy to lose the case, uh, to go to work and I forgot where I put the key.

✓ Usually I only bring the keys that I know I will use because it's very easy to lose them when I go to work and forget where I put the keys.

Multiple issues: redundant 'that' and awkward 'this case'. Pronoun reference and tense are unclear. Rephrase to clarify purpose and maintain present simple for habits. Use plural pronoun 'them' to refer to keys and 'forget' in present for habitual action.

× So I know bring like a lot of keys.

✓ So I don't bring a lot of keys.

Missing auxiliary verb and incorrect word order. The intended meaning is negative habitual action. Use 'do not' + base verb: 'I don't bring a lot of keys.' Avoid filler 'like' in formal responses.

× Yes, I do. I lost keys for a couple of times.

✓ Yes, I have. I have lost my keys a couple of times.

Question asks about life experience, which in English requires present perfect ('have lost') rather than simple past. Also include possessive 'my' and correct quantifier 'a couple of times.'

× It's more than one times.

✓ It's happened more than once.

'One times' is ungrammatical. Use 'more than once' or 'several times.' Match singular/plural and use proper adverbial phrase.

× That's the reason I not bring a lot of keys with me.

✓ That's the reason I don't bring a lot of keys with me.

Negative sentence missing auxiliary 'do' and contracted form. Use 'I don't' for correct negative present simple.

× I only, uh, bring the key that I know that I will use on that space that travel or whatever with me.

✓ I only bring the keys that I know I will use when I travel or go out.

Awkward phrasing and unnecessary 'that' clauses. 'On that space that travel' is incorrect. Simplify to 'when I travel or go out' and plural 'keys' if more than one.

× I'm not sure to say of often I forget the keys but yes I did once and when I lost my key it's so shamed for me because I haven't tried to get into my apartment jumping the top of my car on the balcony so it's not good.

✓ I'm not sure how often I forget my keys, but I did once. When I lost my key it was so embarrassing because I tried to get into my apartment by climbing from the top of my car to the balcony, which was not a good idea.

Multiple issues: incorrect phrase 'to say of often' should be 'how often'; 'forget the keys' → 'forget my keys'; tense mix-ups and wrong adjective 'shamed' should be 'embarrassing.' 'Haven't tried' is wrong tense and meaning; use past 'tried.' Clarify sequence and use gerund/infinitive correctly.

× Yes, I think it's depends of who is my neighbor, if I really know who is him, if I'm confident and that rush my neighbor.

✓ Yes, I think it depends on who my neighbor is, if I really know him and if I'm confident and trust my neighbor.

Incorrect verb 'it's depends' (should be 'it depends'), wrong preposition 'of' → 'on,' wrong pronoun order 'who is my neighbor' → 'who my neighbor is,' and 'who is him' → 'him.' 'That rush my neighbor' is ungrammatical; likely meant 'trust my neighbor.'

× Yes I think it's a good idea to leave Mikey with my neighbor because maybe this day one of my family can bring to home and they don't have another spare key.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good idea to leave my keys with my neighbor because perhaps one day a family member can bring me home and they won't have another spare key.

'Mikey' is likely a typo for 'my key' or 'my keys.' Use 'my keys.' 'This day' → 'one day' or 'perhaps one day.' 'One of my family' → 'a family member.' 'Bring to home' → 'bring me home.' Use appropriate future possibility with 'might' or 'can' and correct negation 'won't.'

× So if I approach my neighbor I can leave my key with him.

✓ So if I can reach my neighbor, I can leave my key with him.

'Approach' is awkward here; use 'reach' or 'ask' depending on meaning. Conditional structure improved: 'If I can reach/ask my neighbor, I can leave my key with him.' Ensures clarity and natural phrasing.