Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa lỗi phát âm/nhầm từ và ngữ pháp; trả lời trực tiếp rồi mở rộng ngắn gọn. Cần dùng từ đúng (walk, workout), câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu), và thêm liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc (e.g., but, so, because). Ví dụ cụ thể về tần suất và động cơ sẽ làm câu tự nhiên hơn.

例: No, I don't walk very often. I usually walk two or three times a week because I am not very active most days. However, I try to walk for my health, and in the future I would like to make it a regular habit to improve my fitness.

提案: Giữ câu ngắn, sửa trật tự từ và thì; tránh lặp từ (often, like). Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể. Dùng liên từ như 'so' hoặc 'for example' đúng nơi.

例: Yes, I did. I was very active and loved being outdoors as a child, so I walked a lot. For example, I often walked to my friend's house, to school and to the local playground.

提案: Cần rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và dùng từ chính xác (walk, reason, atmosphere). Tránh cấu trúc rườm rà và lỗi về số nhiều/đại từ. Nêu 2 lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ (because, and) để kết nối ý.

例: I think people like walking in parks because the atmosphere is pleasant and relaxing. Also, seeing other people exercising can be motivating, and parks often have nice scenery, such as trees and open sky.

提案: Sửa tên địa danh nếu sai (Mount Fuji), dùng cấu trúc điều kiện ngắn gọn và tránh lặp từ. Nêu lý do cụ thể (challenge, scenery, company) trong tối đa 4 câu, dùng linking words (because, so).

例: If I had the chance, I would like to walk on Mount Fuji in Japan because it is very scenic and challenging. I want to improve my fitness and enjoy the spectacular views, so I would probably go with a friend for motivation.

提案: Sửa thì và động từ (go for a walk, not go for work), tên địa điểm rõ ràng, tránh các cụm từ mơ hồ. Bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề (‘Recently I went to...’), rồi nêu 1–2 chi tiết (who, what you did, how you felt) dùng liên từ (and, which) để mạch lạc.

例: Recently I went for a walk in a park in Ho Chi Minh City called Living Time. I walked there with my cousins, we talked about family stories and spent quality time together, which helped me feel relaxed.

× No, I don't work alarm.

✓ No, I don't walk regularly.

The student used 'work alarm' which is incorrect vocabulary and verb choice. Likely intended 'walk' or 'work out'. Replace with 'walk regularly' to match the question context. Use correct verb and adverb placement. Grammar types involved: verb choice/structure and sentence structure (IDs 26 and 6).

× I usually work two or three times a week because I'm not very active most day.

✓ I usually walk two or three times a week because I'm not very active most days.

Use the verb 'walk' instead of 'work' to match meaning. 'Most day' is incorrect; use plural 'most days'. Maintain simple present for habitual action. Grammar type ID:6.

× But I try to work for my health and in the future I would like to increase this routine and work more regularly to improve my fitness.

✓ But I try to walk for my health, and in the future I would like to increase this routine and walk more regularly to improve my fitness.

Replace 'work' with 'walk' for intended meaning. Keep parallel structure: 'increase this routine and walk more regularly'. Use commas for clarity. Present tense and modal 'would like' are appropriate. Grammar type IDs:8 and 6.

× Yes, of course I often did uh, when I was a child.

✓ Yes, of course I often did when I was a child.

Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. 'I often did' is acceptable but better: 'I did often' or 'I often went outside to walk when I was a child.' Keep past tense consistent. Grammar type ID:5.

× I often like very active and I like being outdoors.

✓ I was often very active and I liked being outdoors.

When speaking about childhood, use past tense 'was' and 'liked'. 'Like' as an adjective is incorrect; use 'was active'. Grammar type ID:13.

× So I usually, uh, walk a lot. Take example for I usually walk to my friend house, my school and as well as the playground too.

✓ So I usually walked a lot. For example, I usually walked to my friend's house, to school, and to the playground.

Use past tense 'walked' for childhood. 'Take example for' is incorrect; use 'For example'. Use possessive 'friend's house'. Remove redundant 'too' and 'as well as'. Use correct prepositions 'to'. Grammar type IDs:26 and 11.

× I think the most reason why people like to work in the parks is the atmosphere is very nice because the parks have a lot of another people so they will have the determination to work more and I think the park is also have like the beautiful sky to look at when walking.

✓ I think the main reason why people like to walk in parks is that the atmosphere is very nice. Parks have many other people, which motivates them to walk more, and the park often has a beautiful sky to look at while walking.

Multiple issues: use 'main reason' not 'most reason'. 'Work in the parks' should be 'walk in parks'. 'The parks have a lot of another people' should be 'parks have many other people'. Use 'which' or 'that' to connect clauses. 'Have like the beautiful sky' is awkward; use 'often has a beautiful sky'. Correct articles and pluralization. Grammar type IDs:11 and 22.

× If I had the chance I would choose Fuji Fuzzy Mountain because it is a very scenic but challenging mountain in Japan and as well as I want to improve my fitness and health and also I will like enjoy the views at there.

✓ If I had the chance, I would choose Mount Fuji because it is very scenic but also challenging, and I want to improve my fitness and health. I would also enjoy the views there.

Use correct name 'Mount Fuji'. Place commas in conditional sentences. 'As well as' is unnecessary. 'I will like enjoy' is ungrammatical; use 'I would also enjoy'. 'At there' should be 'there'. Maintain conditional mood throughout (would + base verb). Grammar type IDs:7 and 22.

× So I would probably go with a friend to encourage.

✓ So I would probably go with a friend for encouragement.

'Go with a friend to encourage' is incomplete—encourage whom? Use noun 'encouragement' or clarify: 'to encourage each other'. Keep conditional 'would'. Grammar type ID:26.

× So and recently I have already go for work in the park, which is called living time at least three in Ho Chi Minh City.

✓ Recently I have already gone for a walk in a park called Living Time at least three times in Ho Chi Minh City.

Use present perfect 'have gone' (past participle 'gone'). 'Go for work' should be 'go for a walk'. Include 'times' after 'three'. Capitalize proper name 'Living Time'. Grammar type IDs:9 and 6.

× I work there with my cousins and we have a lot of love there and we talk about a lot of the story in our family and it's helped me feel relaxed.

✓ I go there with my cousins, and we enjoy ourselves and talk about many family stories, which helps me feel relaxed.

Use 'go' rather than 'work' for walking. 'Have a lot of love there' is unnatural; use 'enjoy ourselves'. 'A lot of the story' should be 'many family stories'. Use present tense or present perfect depending on meaning; 'which helps me feel relaxed' is clear. Fix pronouns and collocations. Grammar type IDs:11 and 12.