Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap net bir konu cümlesiyle başlamalı ve dil bilgisi ile kelime seçimlerindeki hatalar düzeltilmelidir. Kısa ve tutarlı cümleler kullanın; gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın. Örneğin zaman ifadelerini doğru kullanın ("since last month I went" yerine "last month I went" veya "since last month I have been working"). Bağlaçlarla nedeni kısaca açıklayın ve maksimum 4-5 cümlede kalın.

例: It depends where I am. Last month I was in London and I walked a lot while working there, but in my hometown I usually drive, so I don't walk much in my daily life.

提案: Cümle yapısı ve zaman kullanımı hatalı; tekrar ve anlamsal belirsizlik var ("going apart" muhtemelen "going out" ya da "going to parties" demek istediniz). Geçmiş zaman kullanırken tutarlı olun ve nedenleri açık bir şekilde bağlaçla bağlayın. Daha spesifik aktiviteler verin.

例: No, I didn't walk much as a child because I preferred going out with my friends and playing games, so I usually felt too tired to go for walks at the end of the day.

提案: Cümleler karışık ve birçok tekrar var; kelime seçimi yanlış ("we solve trees"). Açık ve mantıklı bir neden sunun, bağlaçlarla cümleleri düzenleyin ve somut özellikler verin (manzara, temiz hava, huzur vb.).

例: I think people enjoy walking in parks because of the scenery and fresh air; the trees and green spaces make them feel relaxed and safe, which is a nice break from city noise.

提案: İfadeniz karışık ve çelişkili; aynı fikri tekrar ederken dilbilgisi hataları var ("I don't wanna walking"). Öncelikle net bir tercih belirtin, ardından nedenini kısaca açıklayın. Doğru yapı: "I would like to... because..."

例: I'd like to take a long walk along the seaside, but not on the sand; I prefer walking on the coastal promenade because it's peaceful and offers lovely sea views.

提案: Geçmiş zaman kullanımı hatalı ("I want park" ve "in this morning"). Net ve doğru zaman kullanın: "I went to a park near my house this morning at 7 a.m." Ayrıca kısa bir duygu veya detay ekleyin (kimle gittiğiniz ve ne hissettiğiniz gibi).

例: I went to a park near my house this morning at 7 a.m. with my friends, and it was really pleasant because the park was quiet and the air was fresh.

× Actually, it depends on where I am. Uh, since last month I went to London and I work a lot in there, but in my hometown I usually prefer driving a car, so in my daily life I'm not working a lot.

✓ Actually, it depends on where I am. Since last month I went to London and I worked a lot there, but in my hometown I usually prefer driving a car, so in my daily life I don't work a lot.

The speaker mixes present tense with past events incorrectly. 'Since last month' suggests a period continuing to the present and usually uses present perfect (or simple past if finished). If referring to past activity during the trip, use past simple: 'I went ... and I worked a lot there.' Also 'in there' is incorrect preposition use; use 'there'. Finally 'I'm not working a lot' is an inappropriate progressive for habitual activity; use simple present 'I don't work a lot'. Suggestion: Use consistent tenses and correct prepositions: 'Since last month I have been in London and I worked a lot there' or 'I went to London last month and worked a lot there; at home I don't work much.'

× No, because when I was a child I I was prefer going apart with my friends or playing games with my friends. So that's why in the end of the day I can't find any energy for walking.

✓ No, because when I was a child I preferred going out with my friends or playing games with them. So that's why at the end of the day I couldn't find any energy for walking.

Errors: 'I I was prefer' mixes auxiliary and wrong tense; 'prefer' should be past simple 'preferred' for a habitual past action. 'going apart' is incorrect collocation; use 'going out'. Repetition 'with my friends' is redundant; 'them' is better. 'in the end of the day' should be 'at the end of the day'. 'can't find' should be past 'couldn't find' to match past context. Suggestion: Use past simple for habits in childhood and correct idiomatic expressions: 'I preferred going out with my friends... at the end of the day I couldn't find any energy.'

× Uh, to me, I think the, The thing is the view, like in the parks usually, uh, we solve trees and trees makes people, uh, peaceful, makes people, people feel safe. So, uh, I think that's the why people.

✓ To me, I think the main thing is the view. In parks there are usually trees, and trees make people feel peaceful and safe. So, I think that's why people come.

Multiple issues: 'we solve trees' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'see' or 'have'—correct is 'there are usually trees'. Subject-verb agreement: 'trees makes' should be 'trees make'. Redundant phrases 'makes people, people' must be simplified. 'that's the why people' is ungrammatical; use 'that's why people come' or 'that's why people like parks'. Suggestion: Use correct vocabulary and subject-verb agreement: 'trees make people feel peaceful and safe. That's why people like to walk in parks.'

× Umm, I would prefer seasides maybe, but I don't wanna walking at the beach. I want to walk in umm in the roads maybe. So I want to walking in seaside.

✓ I would prefer the seaside maybe, but I don't want to walk on the beach. I want to walk on the roads by the sea. So I want to walk by the seaside.

Errors: 'wanna walking' mixes colloquial contraction with wrong verb form; after 'want' use the infinitive 'to walk'. 'seasides' is nonstandard plural; use 'the seaside' or 'the seafront'. Prepositions: 'walking at the beach' should be 'walk on the beach' or 'walk by the beach'; 'in the roads' should be 'on the roads'. Repetition and inconsistent forms 'I want to walking' should be 'I want to walk'. Suggestion: Use correct infinitive after 'want' and proper prepositions: 'I don't want to walk on the beach; I want to walk on the roads by the seaside.'

× I want park, which is nearby to my house, uh, in this morning like in 7:00 AM with my friends and it was really good.

✓ I went to a park which is near my house this morning at 7:00 AM with my friends and it was really good.

Errors: 'I want park' is incorrect verb; should be past 'I went to a park' because the question asks about a past action. 'nearby to my house' is incorrect preposition; use 'near my house' or 'nearby'. 'in this morning' is incorrect; use 'this morning' or 'at 7:00 AM'. The time expression order should be 'this morning at 7:00 AM'. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past events and correct prepositions/time phrases: 'I went to a park near my house this morning at 7:00 AM with my friends.'