Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No/ Sometimes), then give one or two specific supporting details with correct grammar and logical order. Avoid redundancy (listing weekends twice) and correct basic grammar (verb tenses, articles, word order). Use linking words such as "usually" or "often" to make it coherent.

例: Sometimes. I usually walk in my local park on weekends after finishing my schoolwork, and I often take my younger sister with me for a short walk to relax and get some fresh air.

提案: Give a direct and grammatically correct response about your childhood habits. Use simple past tense and specific details (age, who, activities). Avoid confusing phrases and unclear references. Use a linking phrase to add a reason or an example.

例: Yes, I did. When I was about five or six years old I often walked outside with my best friend. We would play and walk around the neighborhood because our parents wanted us to get exercise and fresh air.

提案: Answer directly and use clear vocabulary. Start with a topic sentence explaining the main reason, then give two specific supporting reasons with linking words (for example, because, and, such as). Use accurate nouns (parks, space) and correct verb forms.

例: People like walking in parks because parks offer open, pleasant spaces. For example, parks are comfortable for outdoor activities and people can jog, play sports like basketball or badminton, or simply stroll and enjoy nature.

提案: Be concise and use the conditional structure correctly (If I had the chance / I would...). Provide one clear place and a brief reason or activity. Use linking words to combine ideas and avoid repetition.

例: If I had the chance, I would go for a long walk around West Lake with my friends and maybe ride bikes too, because the scenery is beautiful and it is a relaxing way to spend a summer holiday.

提案: Use correct past or present tense depending on what you mean (lately = recently → present perfect/ simple past). Give a clear, concise reply with one or two specific times or activities. Fix grammar (articles, word order) and avoid vague phrases like "jumps."

例: Lately I have been walking in my garden and yard. I usually walk there in the early morning or late afternoon to stay healthy, and I sometimes do light exercises like stretching and short jogging intervals.

× Sometimes when I have spare time such as on weekend like Friday, Sunday or Saturday, I will have the job at school and I always take my younger sister to walk around in my local park.

✓ Sometimes when I have spare time, such as on weekends like Friday, Saturday, or Sunday, I do my school work and I always take my younger sister for a walk in my local park.

The sentence had incorrect prepositions and word order. Use 'on weekends' for general weekends and list days in a normal order; 'have the job at school' is unnatural — use 'do my school work' or 'work at school' depending on meaning. Use 'take someone for a walk' rather than 'take my younger sister to walk around'. Also commas improve clarity. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Yes of course when you got try around 5-6 years old and all I together with my best friend, she's on a season and I together with her always walk around and go outside to keep our health.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was around 5–6 years old, my best friend and I always walked around and went outside to keep healthy.

The original mixed tenses and had incorrect pronouns and expressions. Use past tense ('was', 'walked', 'went') for childhood. 'You got try' is incorrect; use 'I was around'. 'All I together with my best friend' should be 'my best friend and I'. 'Keep our health' is better as 'keep healthy' or 'maintain our health'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× ...and all I together with my best friend, she's on a season and I together with her always walk around and go outside to keep our health.

✓ ...my best friend and I always walked around and went outside to keep healthy.

Pronoun order and form were incorrect. Use 'my best friend and I' (not 'I together with my best friend') and avoid 'she's on a season' which is meaningless here. Maintain consistent subject form and remove redundant phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Because pals has a spacious space so it's quite comfortable for them to have some outdoor activities and they such as play sports, playing basketball, playing badminton or even they can walk around.

✓ Because parks have spacious areas, it's comfortable for people to do outdoor activities, such as playing sports, basketball, badminton, or simply walking around.

Multiple issues: 'pals' is incorrect word choice (should be 'parks'); 'has a spacious space' is redundant — use 'have spacious areas'. Use plural agreement with 'parks have'. Use correct verb forms: 'do outdoor activities' and parallel structure for examples ('playing sports, basketball, badminton, or walking'). Grammar problem type ID:1

× When I have an opportunity to work, I want to go to Westlake and walk and even ride a bike with my friends.

✓ If I have the opportunity, I would like to go to West Lake to walk and even ride a bike with my friends.

The conditional is more natural for a hypothetical future opportunity: use 'If I have the opportunity' and 'would like' to express desire politely. 'When I have an opportunity to work' was unclear; remove 'to work' unless intended. Also 'Westlake' should be 'West Lake' if that's the place name. Grammar problem type ID:7

× For example, on summer holiday I have a lot of spare time. I will decide to take my younger sister or my relatives to walk around W Lake with me.

✓ For example, during the summer holidays I have a lot of spare time. I would decide to take my younger sister or relatives to walk around West Lake with me.

Use 'during the summer holidays' or 'in summer' rather than 'on summer holiday'. 'Relatives' does not need 'my' in this context. Use consistent place name 'West Lake'. Use conditional 'would decide' to match hypothetical intent. Articles and prepositions adjusted for natural English. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I just walk around my garden and my yard because there are there is a special space in my garden.

✓ I usually just walk around my garden and yard because there is a special space in my garden.

Maintain present simple tense for habitual action: 'I usually walk'. Remove duplicate 'there are there is'. Use singular 'there is a special space' if referring to one space. Also choose either 'garden' or 'yard' if they are the same; if both, keep both without article. Grammar problem type ID:6

× So every day in the afternoon or in the morning early, I always walk around to keep my health and do exercise such as jumps.

✓ So every day, in the early morning or in the afternoon, I always walk to stay healthy and do exercises such as jumping.

Use natural adverb order 'in the early morning or in the afternoon'. 'Walk around to keep my health' is better as 'walk to stay healthy'. 'Do exercise such as jumps' is unnatural; use 'do exercises such as jumping' or 'jumping jacks'. Use gerund 'jumping' for the activity. Grammar problem type ID:8}]} (Note: The JSON string uses single quotes for embedded explanations and contains no newlines.)