Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 응답은 자연스럽지만 문장이 약간 어색하고 불필요한 정보가 포함되어 있습니다. 첫 문장("Yes, I work regularly.")은 질문과 직접적인 관련성이 낮아 제거하거나 재구성하세요. 또한 장소 설명을 좀 더 구체적으로 하고, 연결어를 사용해 답변을 매끄럽게 만드세요. 예: 질문에 대한 직접적인 주제문 + 이유 + 빈도 또는 기간으로 구성하세요.

例: Yes, I walk every evening because I enjoy strolling along the riverside near my house. It helps me unwind after work and I usually walk for about 30 minutes.

提案: 전반적으로 내용은 적절하지만 몇 가지 문법 오류(예: "a walks")와 중복 표현("pleasant and happy")이 있습니다. 과거 습관을 나타내는 표현은 잘 사용했으므로, 연결어로 구체적인 예시나 빈도(얼마나 자주)를 덧붙이면 더 좋습니다.

例: Yes, I used to go for walks with my friends or family almost every weekend. We loved exploring insects and plants near my house, which always made me feel happy and curious.

提案: 아이디어는 좋지만 문법과 어휘 선택에 문제가 있습니다("a fresh air", "is quite"). 문장을 연결할 때 연결어를 사용하고 이유와 결과를 분명히 하세요. 구체적인 효과(예: 건강, 기분 개선)를 추가하면 설득력이 높아집니다.

例: People like to walk in parks because it helps reduce stress and relax the mind. For example, fresh air and peaceful surroundings can improve mood and even boost physical health.

提案: 질문은 가정형인데 학생의 답변은 현재 습관을 설명하고 있습니다. 또한 중복 표현("to near to a park near my house")과 동사 일치 오류("plants that makes")가 있습니다. 조건문 형태에 맞게 가정 의도를 먼저 말하고, 장소의 특징과 이유, 소요시간을 간결히 정리하세요.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in Tewagang Park, which is near my house. It has many colorful flowers and diverse plants, so walking there for about an hour helps me relax and reduce stress.

提案: 과거 시제 사용은 적절하지만 시제 중복("last day yesterday")과 어순/전치사 오류("I was in restaurants", "nature of there")가 있습니다. 시간 표현을 하나로 정리하고, 이유와 경험을 논리적으로 연결하세요. 장소 이름과 활동을 명확히 기술하고, 연결어(so, because, then)로 흐름을 매끄럽게 하세요.

例: Yesterday evening I went to Telecom Park with my parents after dinner. Because we had eaten a lot at the restaurant, we decided to walk for about an hour and enjoyed the natural scenery there.

× I go for a walk every evening because I love strolling along the Riverside near my house.

✓ I go for a walk every evening because I love strolling along the riverside near my house.

The noun 'Riverside' should be lowercased as 'riverside' because it is a common noun here, not a proper noun. This is not strictly a third-person singular verb issue; however, it fits the allowed list as a minor noun capitalization error. Suggestion: use lowercase for common nouns unless they are official place names.

× Yes, I used to go for a walks with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I used to go for walks with my friends or family.

The noun 'walks' should be plural without the article 'a'. 'Used to' already implies habitual past actions, so the correct form is 'go for walks'. Suggestion: remove the indefinite article when using a plural noun with 'go for'.

× It gives an opportunity to get out of stress and relax.

✓ It gives an opportunity to get away from stress and relax.

The phrase 'get out of stress' is unnatural in English. Use 'get away from stress' or 'relieve stress'. This is a present tense/comment; correct idiomatic expression improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'get away from' or 'relieve'.

× When people walk outside in the park, they can forget some worries and stress by experiencing a fresh air and is quite.

✓ When people walk in the park, they can forget some worries and stress by experiencing fresh air and quiet surroundings.

Errors: 'walk outside in the park' is redundant; use 'walk in the park'. 'a fresh air' should be 'fresh air' (no article). 'is quite' should be 'quiet' (adjective) and needs a noun like 'surroundings'. Suggestion: remove redundancy, drop the article before 'fresh air', and use 'quiet surroundings'.

× I usually go for a walk to near to a park near my house which is called Tewagang Park because there are a variety of colorful flowers and plants that makes me relax and relieve my stress.

✓ I usually go for a walk to a park near my house called Tewagang Park because there are a variety of colorful flowers and plants that make me relax and relieve my stress.

Problems: 'to near to a park' is incorrect; use 'to a park near my house' or simply 'to a park near my house'. Subject-verb agreement: 'plants that makes' should be 'plants that make' because 'plants' is plural. Suggestion: remove extra 'near to' and use plural verb form 'make'.

× I walked to the telecom Park last day yesterday with my parents after dinner.

✓ I walked to Telecom Park yesterday with my parents after dinner.

Redundant time expression 'last day yesterday' — use one time marker ('yesterday'). Capitalization: park name may be 'Telecom Park' as a proper noun. Suggestion: choose a single correct time expression and capitalize proper nouns.

× We were so full because we ate too much.

✓ We were very full because we had eaten too much.

Tense: when describing fullness after eating, past perfect 'had eaten' emphasizes the action that caused the state. 'So full' is acceptable but 'very full' is slightly more natural. Suggestion: use 'had eaten' to show the sequence of events.

× I was in restaurants so we walked for a long distance, about one hour and we enjoyed the nature of there.

✓ We left the restaurant and walked for a long time, about an hour, and we enjoyed the nature there.

Several issues: 'I was in restaurants' is awkward and inconsistent with plural; use 'we left the restaurant'. 'walked for a long distance, about one hour' should be 'walked for a long time, about an hour'. 'enjoyed the nature of there' should be 'enjoyed the nature there' or 'enjoyed the scenery'. Suggestion: combine actions clearly, use 'left the restaurant', 'walked for about an hour', and 'enjoyed the nature' or 'scenery'.