Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, grammatically correct topic sentence, then add one clear supporting reason with linking words. Avoid run-on sentences and correct basic grammar (verb forms, articles, word order). Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: No, I don't walk much because my job requires me to sit for about 12 hours a day. As a result, my back often hurts, so I prefer short breaks rather than long walks.

提案: Answer directly in the past tense with a clear reason. Remove irrelevant or confusing remarks. Use one or two sentences and link them if needed.

例: No, I didn't go out for walks very often as a child because my parents thought it was risky. Therefore, I usually played at home or in the family garden instead.

提案: Start with a clear positive statement (people do like to walk in parks), then give two specific reasons using linking words. Watch for grammar and word choice (e.g., 'enjoy the scenery').

例: People often like walking in parks because it helps them stay fit and healthy. In addition, parks offer pleasant scenery, such as trees and views of the sunrise or sunset, which makes the walk enjoyable.

提案: Use a clear conditional sentence to state a specific place you would choose, then give a reason. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: If I had the chance, I would like to take a long walk along a quiet seaside promenade because the cool breeze and open views would make walking pleasant rather than tiring.

提案: Answer in the recent past or present perfect and be specific about timing and place. Use linking words to explain reasons succinctly and correct tense usage.

例: I haven't been on a walk recently because my current job involves long hours of sitting. As a result, I rarely have time or opportunity to walk during the day.

× I do not walk a lot because I'm working at the environment where only sitting for 12 hours I my back is hurting.

✓ I do not walk a lot because I work in an environment where I sit for 12 hours and my back hurts.

Errors: incorrect progressive use ('I'm working' suggests temporary ongoing action but speaker describes regular job), word order and missing subjects, incorrect phrase 'only sitting for 12 hours', and wrong verb form 'is hurting'. Suggestion: use simple present 'I work' for habitual situations, reorder clauses for clarity, include subject 'I' before 'sit', and use 'my back hurts' for present simple state. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I do not go often outside to walk as a child because my parents didn't let me do it was kinda risky, you know? Ah, you suddenly wondered. Ah, later I couldn't kidnap.

✓ I did not often go outside to walk as a child because my parents didn't let me; it was kind of risky.

Errors: wrong tense 'do not go' should be past 'did not go' for childhood; run-on sentence and unclear fragment 'Ah, you suddenly wondered' and 'Ah, later I couldn't kidnap' which is inappropriate and ungrammatical. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits, split into clear clauses, remove irrelevant or incorrect fragments. Grammar problem type ID:5

× People don't like walk in park because they want to stay fit and healthy. Plus they can enjoy a scenery scenery at the park with the beautiful sunrise and sunset.

✓ People like to walk in parks because they want to stay fit and healthy. They can also enjoy the scenery in the park, such as the beautiful sunrise and sunset.

Errors: missing infinitive 'to' after 'like', incorrect negative 'don't' contradicts reason, singular/plural issues 'park' vs 'parks' and duplicate word 'scenery scenery'. Suggestion: use 'like to walk' for habitual preference, pluralize 'parks' for general statements, and use 'the scenery'; avoid repetition. Grammar problem type ID:1

× If I I may not have AI may not to take a long walk because I'm so lazy. Plus relationship weather is so high it it makes me sweat a lot so I don't like it.

✓ I might not take a long walk because I'm so lazy. Also, the weather is often very hot and makes me sweat a lot, so I don't like walking long distances.

Errors: incorrect and repeated words, misuse of modal verbs 'may not to', unclear phrase 'relationship weather', redundant 'it it'. Suggestion: use 'might not' for hypothetical reluctance, do not follow modal with 'to' when not needed, and use clear noun 'weather' with adjective 'hot' or 'very hot'. Grammar problem type ID:4

× Currently I'm not going to walk because I have a job that requires me to work five hours. Plus it's a sitting environment so I cannot move around freely as I wanted.

✓ At present I'm not going for walks because I have a job that requires me to work five hours a day. Also, it's a sedentary job, so I cannot move around as freely as I would like.

Errors: 'I'm not going to walk' is awkward for habitual action; missing 'a day' after 'five hours' for clarity; 'sitting environment' is unnatural; incorrect tense in 'as I wanted' should be 'as I would like' to express desire. Suggestion: use 'go for walks' for activities, add time phrases for clarity, use 'sedentary job' or 'sitting environment' rephrased, and use conditional phrasing 'as I would like'. Grammar problem type ID:6}]}{