Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise; use correct verb forms and a clear topic sentence. Limit to up to 5 sentences and avoid repeating phrases. Mention routine and reasons briefly with linking words.

例: Yes, I walk a lot around my apartment because there are several parks nearby. I usually go for an evening walk after dinner with my girlfriend and our dog, which helps us relax and get some exercise.

提案: Use past tense consistently and be specific about activities. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add brief supporting details using linking words like "because" or "so".

例: Yes, I often went outside to walk when I was a child. My family and I would go for walks and play sports together because we wanted to stay healthy and build our strength.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar (use 'walking' not 'working'); give one or two clear reasons with examples. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to connect ideas.

例: People like walking in parks because the fresh air and green space are relaxing and good for health. For example, after dinner many people walk there to exercise and parents bring children to play safely.

提案: Be specific and fluent: choose one place and explain reasons clearly. Fix grammar (people, communicate) and avoid unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to structure answer.

例: I would like to take a long walk along the city streets because I could enjoy the skyline and urban scenery. Also, walking in the city centre would let me meet many people and have casual conversations or discover interesting cafés.

提案: Use correct past tense and simplify structure. Give specific details (name of park, what you saw) and use linking words like 'there' and 'where' correctly.

例: I went to a nearby park recently that has a lovely lake and a small forest. There were many plants and some birds, so it felt peaceful and was perfect for a relaxing walk.

× Yes, I always walk a lot near my apartment.

✓ Yes, I always walk a lot near my apartment.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but 'walk a lot' is stylistically awkward. No tense error; present simple is correct to describe habitual action. Consider: 'I often walk near my apartment' for natural phrasing.

× There are a lot of parks near my apartment.

✓ There are a lot of parks near my apartment.

Sentence is correct: plural 'parks' matches 'are'. No change needed. For conciseness, you could say 'There are many parks near my apartment.'

× I always have worked there after dinner with my girlfriend and my dog.

✓ I have always worked there after dinner with my girlfriend and my dog.

The present perfect 'have worked' is acceptable if indicating experience up to now, but adverb placement is incorrect. Place 'always' between 'have' and past participle: 'have always worked'. If the intended meaning is habitual past, use simple past: 'I always worked there after dinner.'

× Well, yes, I often go outside to have work when I was a child.

✓ Well, yes, I often went outside to have a walk when I was a child.

The time phrase 'when I was a child' requires past tense 'went', not present 'go'. Also 'have work' is incorrect collocation; use 'have a walk' or 'go for a walk'. 'Often' fits before the past verb: 'I often went outside to have a walk.'

× At that time I often have work with my family members.

✓ At that time I often went out with my family members.

Mixing present 'have' with past time reference is incorrect. Use past tense 'went out'. 'Have work' is wrong here; likely intended 'went out' or 'had outings'. 'With my family members' is fine but 'with my family' is more natural.

× We always do exercise and sports because it can enhance our body strength and can enhance our health.

✓ We always did exercise and played sports because it enhanced our strength and improved our health.

The context is childhood, so past tense should be used: 'did' and 'played' instead of present 'do'. Also use simple verbs for clarity: 'enhanced' and 'improved'. Avoid repeating 'can enhance'; choose one suitable past verb.

× Actually, in my opinion, working in parks is beneficial to our health and park is a good way to do exercise after dinner.

✓ Actually, in my opinion, walking in parks is beneficial to our health and a park is a good place to exercise after dinner.

'Working in parks' is incorrect word choice; context requires 'walking'. 'Park is' needs an article: 'a park' or 'the park'. 'A park is a good place to exercise' is more natural than 'a good way to do exercise.'

× That's a good space to still students play with each other.

✓ That's a good space for students to socialize and play with each other.

Original sentence has incorrect word order and word choice: 'still students' is ungrammatical. Use 'for students to' followed by verbs: 'socialize and play'. This corrects structure and meaning.

× Actually I would like to take a long walk in city street because I can see beautiful scenery and skyline in the city street and in the center of the city I can face a lot of peoples and I can have a communication with the.

✓ Actually, I would like to take a long walk on a city street because I can see beautiful scenery and the skyline. In the city center I can meet a lot of people and communicate with them.

Use 'on a city street' (preposition and article). 'Skyline' needs 'the'. 'Face a lot of peoples' is incorrect plural and verb; use 'meet a lot of people'. 'Have a communication with the' is ungrammatical; use 'communicate with them'. Also add commas and split into two sentences for clarity.

× Actually I have gone to a beautiful park to have a walk recently which have beautiful lake to visit and have a beautiful forest which have a lot of plants and various animals there.

✓ Actually, I have gone for a walk in a beautiful park recently which has a beautiful lake and a forest with many plants and various animals.

Use 'gone for a walk in' rather than 'gone to ... to have a walk'. 'Which have' is wrong because 'which' refers to singular 'park' or 'park features'—use 'has' for singular. Use 'many plants' not 'a lot of plants' in the same clause; simplify word order: 'a forest with many plants and various animals.'