Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意図は伝わるが、文法ミス・表現の不自然さ・冗長さがある。まず「by walk」は不自然で「walk to school/on foot」を使う。文は簡潔に1〜2文にまとめ、主語と動詞の一致・時制を正すこと。つなぎには because / so / which を使って論理を明確に。語彙は simple を保ちつつ正確な表現（exercise, relax）を使う練習をする。

例: Yes, I walk a lot. I usually walk to and from school because it gives me light exercise and helps me relax.

提案: 意味は通じるが語順と語彙の誤用が多い。「there was not where developed the footpath」は不自然。代わりに there weren't many sidewalks / footpaths を使う。理由説明は because を使って一文で簡潔にまとめ、過去の習慣は used to を検討。文法（was/were、use/used）に注意する。

例: No, I didn't. There weren't many sidewalks in my town, so it was too dangerous to walk alone, and I usually rode my bicycle instead.

提案: 答えは一般的だが文法・語彙の選択が改善できる。不可算名詞や複数形（nature → natural scenery / trees / greenery）が適切。『work with watching landscapes』は不明瞭なので、recreationやrelaxationの表現に置き換える。接続詞（so / which）を使って論理をつなぐこと。

例: People like walking in parks because of the greenery and flowers, which create a peaceful atmosphere and help them relax.

提案: 意図は伝わるが表現が不自然。'go for work to the mountain'や'relax/work'の混同に注意。仮定法の文脈では would like to take a long walk in/around the mountains などが自然。理由は簡潔に and / because を使って繋げる。

例: If I had the chance, I'd take a long walk in the mountains because I enjoy the peaceful atmosphere and quiet surroundings.

提案: 過去の出来事を述べる際の時制や名詞の単複形、語彙選択（landscapes → the scenery / flowers、forwards → flowers?）が誤っている。句読点で文を分け、過去形を一貫して使う。'enjoyed being there'や'enjoyed walking there'など自然な表現に直す。具体的な描写（what you saw, how you felt）を一つ二つ加えると良い。

例: I went to the park near my house last week; it only takes about ten minutes to get there. The scenery and the pretty flowers were lovely, so I really enjoyed walking there.

× It helps me to do some exercise without doing any sports and lead up to makes me feel relaxed.

✓ It helps me get some exercise without doing any sports and makes me feel relaxed.

The phrase 'lead up to makes me feel relaxed' is ungrammatical. Use parallel verb forms: 'helps me get' (base verb after 'help' + object) and 'makes me feel' (correct verb + object). Remove redundant 'to' and 'lead up to'.

× I basically go to the school by walk and come back to home by walk.

✓ I basically walk to school and walk back home.

Use pluralization and idiomatic expressions: 'by walk' is incorrect; use the verb 'walk'. Omit 'the' before 'school' in general statements and use 'home' without 'to'.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside for a walk when you were a child?

The original is understandable but 'go outside for a walk' is the natural collocation in past questions. Question auxiliary 'Did' requires base verb 'go', which is already correct; change preposition for idiomatic use.

× No, I didn't, because in my town there was not where developed the footpath, so it was a quite dangerous to walk by myself.

✓ No, I didn't, because in my town there were no developed footpaths, so it was quite dangerous to walk by myself.

Use plural 'footpaths' and correct 'there was not' to 'there were no' for plural. 'A quite dangerous' is incorrect; use 'quite dangerous' without 'a'. Word order: 'developed footpaths' not 'where developed the footpath'.

× So I always use bicycle to go outside.

✓ So I always used a bicycle to go outside.

The sentence refers to habitual past action, so use past tense 'used' not present 'use'. Also use article 'a' before 'bicycle'.

× Because there is many natures and some flowers, so people can work with watching landscapes and helps people to make calm and relax.

✓ Because there is a lot of nature and some flowers, people can relax while looking at the scenery, which helps them feel calm.

'Many natures' is incorrect; use 'a lot of nature' or 'much nature'. Remove redundant 'so' after 'because'. 'Work with watching landscapes' is ungrammatical; use 'relax while looking at the scenery'. Match subjects and verbs: 'helps people' -> 'which helps them'.

× Because there is many natures and some flowers, so people can work with watching landscapes and helps people to make calm and relax.

✓ Because there is a lot of nature and some flowers, people can relax while looking at the scenery, which helps them feel calm.

Replace awkward 'can work with watching' with 'can relax while looking at'; ensure modal 'can' is followed by base verb. Also correct subject-verb agreement.

× I'd like to go for work to the mountain because I like to work in the peaceful atmosphere and I also like to spend time in quiet place, so I think the mountain is the best place to go for.

✓ I'd like to go to the mountains for work because I like working in a peaceful atmosphere and I also like to spend time in quiet places, so I think the mountains are the best place to go.

Use 'go to the mountains' (plural or 'the mountain' with article and singular consistency). 'Go for work to the mountain' is awkward; use 'go to the mountains for work'. Use gerund 'working' after 'like'. Use plural 'places' or 'a quiet place'. Final 'to go for' is redundant.

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable, but 'recently' is the more natural adverb in this question. No tense change needed; auxiliary 'did' with base verb 'go' is correct.

× I went to the park, it is located nearby my house so it takes me about 10 minutes but it was so good because I could see a landscapes and there is many pretty forwards so I really enjoyed to working in there.

✓ I went to the park; it is located near my house so it takes me about 10 minutes. It was great because I could see the landscape and there were many pretty flowers, so I really enjoyed working there.

Use 'near' not 'nearby my house' (or 'near my house'). Split into sentences or use a semicolon. 'A landscapes' incorrect; use 'the landscape'. 'There is many' -> 'there were many' for past. 'Forwards' is wrong; use 'flowers'. 'Enjoyed to working' incorrect; say 'enjoyed working'. Remove 'in' before 'there'.