Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and coherent supporting details. Avoid repetition, fix word order and pronoun references, and keep to 2–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to show reasons.

例: Yes, I walk a lot, especially after meals because it helps me get fresh air and digest food. It is part of my daily routine and keeps me fit, so I can take part in other sports more easily.

提案: Use past tense consistently and give specific details. Replace vague phrases with concrete examples and correct grammar. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word to add detail.

例: Yes, I often walked with my family when I was a child. We used to stroll along the market street and I remember seeing street performers and colorful shops, which made a big impression on me.

提案: Answer the question directly about parks rather than historic transport. Use present tense and give clear reasons with linking words (for example, because, so). Provide 2–3 specific reasons why people enjoy park walks.

例: People like to walk in parks because the green space is peaceful and offers cleaner air. Also, parks provide pleasant scenery and places to relax, so walking there is both healthy and enjoyable.

提案: Use conditional form correctly and be specific about location and reasons. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (for example, because, so) to explain why you would choose that time and place.

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long coastal walk during summer holiday because I have more free time then and I enjoy warm weather and sea views. Walking along the shore would be relaxing and good exercise.

提案: Use past tense consistently and correct article and preposition use. Be specific about timing and location, and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a brief reason with linking words (for example, because, so).

例: A few days ago I went hiking in the mountains near Macau with some friends. We chose that spot because the air is fresher and the trails are great for exercise, so it felt good for our health.

× I love to walk when when I after my meal I love to go out to get more fresh air and work to do more exercise.

✓ I love to walk after my meal; I like to go out to get more fresh air and do more exercise.

The original sentence has redundant words ('when when', 'work to do') and incorrect verb forms. 'Work to do more exercise' is ungrammatical; the intended meaning uses the base verb 'do' rather than 'work to do'. Also splitting into two coordinated clauses with correct punctuation improves clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicate words, use 'do' for the action, and use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses.

× Work is my one of my daily routine and you can help me build a stronger body which can help me to participate more in other exercise.

✓ Walking is one of my daily routines and it helps me build a stronger body, which allows me to participate more in other exercises.

Errors include article and determiner misuse ('Work is my one of my daily routine' should be 'one of my daily routines') and unclear pronoun reference ('you can help me' is inappropriate in context). Use singular/plural consistency: 'one of my daily routines' (plural 'routines'). 'Exercise' as countable here should be plural 'exercises'. Use appropriate pronoun 'it' to refer to walking.

× Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

✓ Did you often go outside to have a walk when you were a child?

This examiner sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included to show no error found.

× Certainly when I was a child, I loved to walk with my family. We will go to a street and we will walk there and we can see a lot of something news that we that impacted us.

✓ Certainly, when I was a child I loved to walk with my family. We would go to the street and walk there, and we could see a lot of things that impacted us.

The student mixed past narrative with future tense 'will'. For past habitual actions, use 'would' or 'used to' rather than 'will'. 'A street' should be 'the street' if referring to a specific place, and 'a lot of something news' is ungrammatical — use 'a lot of things' or 'news' (uncountable). Also remove repeated words and choose correct verb 'could see' for past ability.

× In the past, people do not have any cars or bus that can help them to go on a specific place. Therefore they will choose to walk to the location that they want to instead of other transport link.

✓ In the past, people did not have cars or buses to take them to a specific place. Therefore they chose to walk to the locations they wanted instead of using other forms of transport.

Tense and article errors: past narrative requires past tense 'did not have' not 'do not have'. Use plural 'cars or buses'. 'A specific place' is awkward; 'a specific place' can remain but 'take them to a specific place' is better. 'Will choose' should be past 'chose' to match context. 'Transport link' is incorrect collocation; use 'forms of transport' or 'other transport'.

× If I have a chance, I would prefer to walk on the summer holiday. It is a quite free for my time and I can walk a long time to A to a location that I want.

✓ If I had the chance, I would prefer to walk during the summer holidays. I am quite free then and I can walk for a long time to a location I want.

Mixed conditional: use 'If I had the chance' with 'I would' for unreal or hypothetical situations. 'On the summer holiday' is incorrect preposition and number; use 'during the summer holidays'. 'It is a quite free for my time' is ungrammatical — better 'I am quite free then'. 'Walk a long time to A to a location' has unnecessary 'A' and wrong preposition; use 'walk for a long time to a location I want.'

× Where did you go for a walk lately?

✓ Where did you go for a walk recently?

'Lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more common with past simple questions. No strong grammatical error; suggested wording improves naturalness.

× Last days I go to the mountain in the Macau and I walk with my friends to get more fresh air and to do more exercise.

✓ A few days ago I went to the mountains in Macau and walked with my friends to get more fresh air and do more exercise.

Tense errors: 'Last days I go' should be past simple 'A few days ago I went' to describe a completed past action. Use 'the mountains' or 'the mountain range' depending on meaning; 'in the Macau' should be 'in Macau' (no definite article). Parallel verb forms: 'to get more fresh air and to do more exercise' can be 'to get more fresh air and do more exercise.'

× I prefer there because they have much more fresh air to to help us to build a healthy body.

✓ I prefer that place because it has much fresher air to help us build a healthy body.

Problems: 'prefer there' is unnatural; use 'prefer that place' or 'I prefer it there'. 'They have much more fresh air' is odd — places don't use 'they'; use 'it has'. 'Much more fresh air' can be 'much fresher air' or 'more fresh air'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Also use 'help us build' instead of 'help us to build' for conciseness.