Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, concise, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question (e.g., Yes/No), then add one or two brief supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases like “It's work a lot” and unnecessary timeline comments. Specific improvements: say “Yes, I walk (or run) regularly,” correct tense and articles, and keep to 1–2 short supporting sentences. Use linking words if adding detail (e.g., “because,” “so”).

例: Yes, I walk quite often and also run about one kilometer most days because it helps me stay fit. For example, I usually go for a short run after work to clear my mind.

提案: Answer directly then add two specific supporting details using clear linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetitions. Use past tense consistently and give concrete examples (where you walked, what you did). Specific improvements: Begin with “Yes” and follow with a concise clause in past tense, then add two brief details linked with “for example” or “we used to.” Replace filler words with pauses in thought or rephrase mentally beforehand.

例: Yes, I often went outside to walk as a child. For example, my father and I used to walk to the nearby park every weekend, where we spent quality time and bought ice cream afterward.

提案: Start with a clear opinion and give two concrete reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and vague endings. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., scenery, scent, relaxing) and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct tense. Specific improvements: Say “because” then list reasons separated by commas or “and,” and finish with a short concluding phrase. Remove filler “I don't know.”

例: People like walking in parks because the green scenery and fresh air help them relax, and the scent of flowers and trees feels refreshing. Also, parks offer quiet spaces away from traffic, which makes walks more enjoyable.

提案: Give a direct answer followed by one or two specific reasons or details. Use the correct conditional structure (“If I had the chance, I would…”) and avoid hesitations or unclear abbreviations. Specific improvements: Use past unreal conditional for hypothetical situations and explain why you chose the place (scenery, facilities, memories).

例: If I had the chance to take a long walk, I would go to Central Park because it has wide paths, beautiful trees, and several lakes. I could walk for hours there while enjoying nature and watching people rowing boats.

提案: Answer the question directly with a specific recent example or, if you don't remember, say so then give a plausible recent activity. Avoid one-word answers; expand with one supporting detail or time reference. Specific improvements: Use a clear past tense sentence like “Last weekend I walked to…,” or if unsure say “I can't remember exactly, but recently I walked to…” then add where and why.

例: I can't remember the exact day, but recently I walked to the local riverbank last Saturday to enjoy the sunset and get some exercise.

× It's work a lot, in fact I run almost 1 kilometer.

✓ I work a lot; in fact I ran almost one kilometer.

The original mixes present and past without clarity and uses 'It's work' which is ungrammatical. This is a sentence structure and tense issue. Use 'I work a lot' for habitual present, but since the student then refers to a specific recent activity, use past tense 'I ran almost one kilometer.' Use a semicolon or conjunction to join related clauses and spell out numbers under ten in formal speech.

× Few minutes ago I came to my house and started to give speaking test.

✓ A few minutes ago I came home and started to take the speaking test.

Missing article 'A' and incorrect verb choice 'give' for 'take a test'. Use 'came home' instead of 'came to my house' for natural speech. 'Started to take' correctly expresses beginning an action in the past. Ensure 'a few minutes ago' uses the article 'a.'

× Yes, walking outside is like a very, uh, reflex relaxing to me.

✓ Yes, walking outside is very relaxing to me.

Unnecessary filler words and 'reflex relaxing' is incorrect collocation. Use simple present 'is very relaxing' to describe a general truth. Remove 'like' and 'reflex' which are incorrect here.

× Umm, I, when I was a child, I walked, I walked out.

✓ When I was a child, I used to walk outside.

Repetition and awkward 'walked out' phrasing. Use 'used to' to indicate habitual past actions and 'outside' instead of 'out' for clarity. Remove hesitations.

× I go for a walk with my dad.

✓ I went for walks with my dad.

The question asks about childhood habitual actions, so past habitual form is needed. Change present 'go' to past habitual 'went' and pluralize to 'walks' to show repeated actions.

× Uh, we spend a, we spend, umm, quality time and uh, my, we had ice cream.

✓ We spent quality time and had ice cream.

Use past tense 'spent' for a completed action in the past, not present 'spend'. Remove hesitations and redundant fragments for clarity.

× I think people like to walk in perks because the the green scenario, the grass and the smell of flowers gave them a very refreshing, refreshing vibe and I don't know the.

✓ I think people like to walk in parks because the greenery, the grass, and the smell of flowers give them a very refreshing feeling.

Multiple errors: 'perks' should be 'parks'; 'green scenario' is unnatural — use 'greenery'; verb agreement: plural subjects 'greenery, grass, and smell' take 'give' not 'gave' when speaking generally; avoid repeating 'refreshing' and use 'feeling' or 'vibe' once. Remove trailing unfinished phrase.

× I think if I have a chance to take a long walk, I will go to UH. Central Park.

✓ I think if I have the chance to take a long walk, I will go to Central Park.

Remove unnecessary 'UH.' filler and fix article usage: 'the chance' is more natural than 'a chance' in this context. Ensure 'Central Park' is one continuous phrase without a period.

× I have no idea.

✓ I don't know.

Context: 'Where did you go for a walk lately?' asks about recent past, so the best answers are past tense ('I don't remember' or 'I'm not sure'). However 'I have no idea' is acceptable but less natural; 'I don't know' is a more conversational response. If referring to recent past, better: 'I don't remember where I went.'