Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases (e.g. 'work a lot', 'indulging with the weather conditions'). Use correct collocations (e.g. 'prefer walking' not 'prefer walk').

例: Yes, I walk most mornings. I usually get up early and walk for 20–30 minutes to relax and get some fresh air, and I prefer walking to driving because it keeps me active.

提案: Be direct and correct tense usage when talking about the past. Begin with a past-tense topic sentence, then give one specific memory. Avoid filler words like 'I guess' and repeated words. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly.

例: Yes, I often walked with my grandparents in the evenings when I was a child. We usually visited our farmhouse, where we would help with chores and enjoy the fresh air.

提案: Clarify your idea and use logical linking. Give a clear reason and a specific example. Avoid unclear metaphors ('different type of puzzles') and vague words. Keep it to 1–2 supporting sentences connected with 'because' or 'for example'.

例: People like to walk in parks because they offer open, peaceful spaces and greenery. For example, parks have wide paths and benches, so walkers can enjoy fresh air and relax without traffic.

提案: Use a clear conditional sentence and avoid repetition. State the location and give a brief reason. Use correct prepositions ('to work' not 'at my work') and fix tense consistency.

例: If I had the chance, I would walk to my workplace because it is about a 40–45 minute walk from my home, and I enjoy the scenery along the route.

提案: Answer in past simple and be specific about what happened. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, then give the reason succinctly. Remove confusing phrases and maintain logical order.

例: Recently, I walked from my house to my college because I missed the bus. I arrived late, but the walk took about 30 minutes and helped me calm down.

× Yes, definitely, I do work a lot 'cause I usually get up early in the morning and always go for a walk for 20 to 30 minutes to feel relaxed and get my body comfortable indulging with the weather conditions.

✓ Yes, definitely, I do work a lot because I usually get up early in the morning and go for a 20 to 30 minute walk to relax and get my body comfortable with the weather.

The original sentence had redundant and awkward present-tense constructions and word choices. 'Do work a lot' is unnatural for habitual activities; use 'work a lot' or 'I am very busy'. 'Cause' should be written as 'because' in formal speech. 'Always go for a walk for 20 to 30 minutes' is repetitive: use 'go for a 20 to 30 minute walk'. 'To feel relaxed and get my body comfortable indulging with the weather conditions' is ungrammatical; use 'to relax and get my body comfortable with the weather'. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× Moreover, I also prefer walk as compared to using private vehicles.

✓ Moreover, I also prefer walking compared to using private vehicles.

The verb 'prefer' should be followed by the gerund 'walking' when referring to an activity. 'Prefer walk' is incorrect. 'As compared to' is wordy; 'compared to' or 'rather than' is better. Using gerund maintains correct verb form after 'prefer'.

× I guess I usually often go outside to have a walk with my grandparents as we get free time at the evening, so we we always visited our farmhouse and do a lot of work over there.

✓ I guess I often used to go outside for walks with my grandparents when we were free in the evening, so we always visited our farmhouse and did a lot of work there.

This sentence refers to past habitual actions, so use past forms: 'used to' or simple past 'often went'. 'Usually often' is redundant; choose one. 'At the evening' should be 'in the evening'. 'We we' is a duplication. 'Visited' and 'do' must agree in past tense: use 'did'. Replace 'over there' with 'there' to sound natural.

× Well I think people prefer to walk in the larger outer spaces so they can easily walk inside of rather than different type of puzzles.

✓ Well, I think people prefer to walk in large open spaces because it is easier to walk there than in more crowded or complicated areas.

The original has unclear and incorrect phrases: 'larger outer spaces' should be 'large open spaces'. 'Walk inside of' is ungrammatical. 'Different type of puzzles' makes no sense in context; likely meant 'crowded or complicated areas'. Recast the sentence for clarity and correct comparative structure.

× Uh, if I get a chance for a long walk, I will definitely go at my work 'cause my work is work is for 40 to 45 minutes walk from my home.

✓ If I get a chance for a long walk, I will definitely walk to my workplace because it is a 40 to 45 minute walk from my home.

Use future tense 'will' for conditional plans. 'Go at my work' is incorrect; use 'walk to my workplace' or 'walk to work'. Remove duplication 'my work is work is'. Use 'it is a 40 to 45 minute walk' for natural expression.

× So I am planning to go at my work for a long walk.

✓ So I am planning to walk to my workplace for a long walk.

'Go at my work' is incorrect preposition choice; use 'walk to my workplace'. Present continuous 'am planning' is fine. Keep verb form 'walk' as the action planned.

× Well I think last time I did go for a walk at from my house to my college as I was late due to I missed my bus and then the rest of the option will was that I have to work for my college.

✓ Well, I think last time I walked from my house to my college because I missed my bus and was late, so I had to go to college on foot.

The sentence mixes tenses and has extra words. For a past event, use past simple: 'walked'. Remove incorrect 'did go' unless emphasizing; here simple past is fine. 'At from' is invalid; use 'from'. 'Due to I missed my bus' should be 'because I missed my bus'. 'The rest of the option will was that I have to work for my college' is unclear; likely meant 'so I had to go to college on foot' or 'so I had no option but to walk to college'. Use past tense 'had to' to match the past context.