Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition, correct small grammar errors, and make the answer more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with proper linking words. Check subject-verb agreement and remove filler words (e.g., repeated 'I').

例: Yes, I walk a lot because I don't own a car at the moment. For example, I usually walk 10–15 minutes to the grocery store and then another 10–15 minutes back, which also gives me a bit of daily exercise.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid mixing tenses. Give a concise topic sentence in past tense, then briefly explain with a specific reason. Replace vague phrasing with clearer language.

例: Not really. When I did go for walks as a child, I usually asked my cousins to come with me because my parents didn’t let me walk far on my own.

提案: Good content and natural vocabulary; tighten the response and use linking words to improve coherence. Avoid redundant phrases like 'I think the reason why.' Use one linking word and a concise second detail or example.

例: People like walking in parks because they can enjoy pleasant scenery while getting exercise. Moreover, the greenery and fresh air often lift their mood and reduce stress.

提案: Good specific detail (trail name and length). Make the answer more natural by using conditional phrasing correctly and varying sentence structure. Add one brief reason why you chose it to enrich the answer.

例: If I had the chance, I would walk the Yellow Trail in Gum Chiang Hai Bagi City, a 10-kilometre route. I chose it because it combines city views with many pine trees, which I find refreshing.

提案: Good past-tense answer with clear specifics. Make it slightly more natural by linking the sentences and avoiding abrupt shifts in perspective (avoid 'it gives you'); use 'it gave me' or 'it offers.' Optionally add a short personal impression to enrich the response.

例: Yesterday I walked the York Line Belt Trail, a three-kilometre path lined with pine trees. It offered nice views of the bustling city and I enjoyed the contrast between nature and urban life.

× Yes, I do walk a lot since I I don't have a car right now.

✓ Yes, I walk a lot since I don't have a car right now.

Issues: unnecessary auxiliary 'do' for emphasis and repeated word 'I'. This is a Subject-Verb Agreement/Verb form and sentence structure problem. Remove the extra 'do' and the duplicated 'I' to form a natural present simple statement: 'I walk a lot since I don't have a car right now.' Use present simple for habitual action.

× Whenever I want to do grocery store or buy or go to the drugstore, I usually walk for about 10 to 15 minutes to reach that certain place and another 15 minutes when I when I have.

✓ Whenever I need to go to the grocery store or the drugstore, I usually walk about 10 to 15 minutes to get there, and another 15 minutes when I return.

Present tense and sentence structure errors: 'want to do grocery store or buy or go to' is ungrammatical. Use 'need to go to the grocery store or the drugstore.' Replace 'walk for about 10 to 15 minutes to reach that certain place' with 'walk about 10 to 15 minutes to get there.' Remove duplicate 'when I'. Clarify return phrase as 'when I return.' Use present simple for habitual actions.

× Not really, but when I go for a walk when I was a child, I always call my cousins to accompany me because I am not allowed to go outside and take a long walk alone.

✓ Not really, but when I went for a walk as a child, I always called my cousins to accompany me because I was not allowed to go outside and take a long walk alone.

Past tense issue: mixing present tense verbs ('go', 'call', 'am') with past time reference 'when I was a child.' Use past simple consistently: 'went,' 'called,' and 'was not allowed.' This ensures tense agreement in a past time context.

× I think the reason why people like to walk in parks is because they're enjoying the view and at the same time it is a good exercise for them.

✓ I think the reason people like to walk in parks is that they enjoy the view, and at the same time it is good exercise for them.

Present tense and word choice: 'they're enjoying the view' is present continuous which is unnecessary for a general statement. Use simple present 'they enjoy.' Also 'is a good exercise' should be 'is good exercise' (article unnecessary). This fixes tense and article usage.

× The luscious green trees give them a boost of happiness.

✓ The lush green trees give them a boost of happiness.

Word choice/article/style: 'luscious' commonly describes taste or texture; 'lush' is the correct adjective for abundant vegetation. No article change needed. This is an adjective choice issue (treated under article/word usage).

× If I am given the chance to take a long walk, I would definitely go to the Yellow Trail located at Gum Chiang Hai Bagi City.

✓ If I were given the chance to take a long walk, I would definitely go to the Yellow Trail at Gum Chiang Hai Bagi City.

Present tense/mood issue: This is a hypothetical counterfactual conditional referring to an unreal present/future situation; use subjunctive 'If I were given' rather than 'If I am given.' Also 'located at' can be shortened to 'at.' Use conditional 'would' in the result clause, which is already correct.

× It is a 10 kilometer walk with the view of the city and a lot of pine trees.

✓ It is a 10-kilometer walk with views of the city and many pine trees.

Quantifier and noun-number usage: use hyphen '10-kilometer' as a compound adjective, pluralize 'views' and use 'many' for countable 'pine trees' instead of 'a lot of.' This fixes adjective formation and quantifier choice.

× Yesterday I went for a walk at the York Line Belt Trail.

✓ Yesterday I went for a walk on the York Line Belt Trail.

Preposition issue: Use 'on' with names of trails or paths, not 'at.' This is a preposition correction to fit common collocation.

× It is a 3 kilometer walk lined with pine trees and it gives you the view of the bustling city.

✓ It is a 3-kilometer walk lined with pine trees and it gives you views of the bustling city.

Quantifier and noun-number usage: use hyphen '3-kilometer' for compound adjective and plural 'views' to match idiomatic expression. Also 'gives you the view' is better as 'gives you views' for general scenery.