Walking— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and simplify your response. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid redundancy and long, unclear phrases. Also correct verb forms and time expressions (e.g., 'I don't have to walk' and 'for about 15 to 50 minutes').

例: I don't walk much as part of my job, but I usually walk after work for exercise. For example, I walk on varied slopes for about 15 to 50 minutes most evenings to stay fit.

提案: Keep the direct answer and add concise specific details with correct tense and linking words. Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Mention a specific example or reason briefly.

例: Yes, I often walked when I was a child because I grew up in a rural area with little transport. For instance, I usually walked or rode my bike to school and to friends' houses.

提案: Be more precise and use clear linking words. Start with a direct opinion, then give two specific reasons or benefits with examples. Fix verb forms and phrasing (e.g., 'working' → 'walking').

例: I think people walk in parks mainly to relax and clear their minds. In addition, walking in a park is good exercise and a chance to enjoy nature, which reduces stress.

提案: Avoid informal or unclear phrasing and give a direct, natural answer. Use neutral language and provide reasons why you chose that place. Keep it concise and correct grammar (e.g., 'as a girl', 'I would choose').

例: If I had the chance, I would take a long walk in a large shopping mall because it is sheltered and has many shops and food options. I can easily spend two or three hours walking and browsing there.

提案: Answer directly and use past tense correctly. Be specific about when and what you did, and avoid fragmented sentences. Include a brief reason or detail about the walk.

例: Recently I went to the shopping mall and spent about three hours window shopping. I didn't buy anything; I just walked around and had some food at the food court.

× For my routines working, I don't have to walks, but after work I usually go some little bit workout by decline by inclined walking about 15 minute 50 minutes a day.

✓ For my routine work, I don't have to walk, but after work I usually do a little workout by walking on inclines and declines for about 15 to 50 minutes a day.

Original sentence has multiple issues: 'routines working' is incorrect noun order and should be 'routine work'; 'have to walks' mixes modal/auxiliary with incorrect verb form — after 'have to' the base verb 'walk' should be used (Grammar Problem Type 8/10/27 relevant, but corrected as present participle/verb form). 'some little bit workout' is ungrammatical word order and article usage — use 'a little workout'. 'by decline by inclined walking' is incorrect preposition and word choice; 'walking on inclines and declines' is clearer. '15 minute 50 minutes' needs a range with 'to' and plural 'minutes'. Suggestion: simplify structure, use correct verb forms and clear phrases for duration and manner of walking.

× Yes, when I was a child I really like walking because I live in the rural area so don't have much transportation there, so if I want to go any place I have to walk or ride a bike.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I really liked walking because I lived in a rural area and didn't have much transportation there, so if I wanted to go anywhere I had to walk or ride a bike.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. When referring to past habits, use past tense: 'liked', 'lived', 'didn't have', 'wanted', 'had to'. Also use 'a rural area' (article) and 'anywhere' rather than 'any place'. Suggestion: keep time reference consistent by using past tense throughout when speaking about childhood.

× I think they just wanted to clear their mind. Sometimes working is helpful to clear their minds and sometimes relax and get times to like a little bit work out.

✓ I think they just want to clear their minds. Sometimes walking is helpful to clear the mind, relax, and get some time to do a little workout.

The examiner asked about a general reason (present state), so use present simple 'want' rather than past 'wanted'. 'Clear their mind' should be plural 'minds' to match 'they'. 'working' likely intended 'walking' — correct word needed (word choice/preposition error). 'get times to like a little bit work out' is ungrammatical; use 'get some time to do a little workout'. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths and correct noun/verb collocations.

× For me as a girly, I think if I got the chance to take a long walk, I think it would be shopping mall for sure. Girl can walk in shopping mall like two or three hours a day, yeah.

✓ As a girl, if I got the chance to take a long walk, I would go to a shopping mall for sure. Girls can walk in a shopping mall for two or three hours a day.

'For me as a girly' uses incorrect form 'girly'; use 'as a girl'. Conditional phrasing should use 'would' for hypothetical result. 'It would be shopping mall' lacks article and correct verb; change to 'I would go to a shopping mall'. 'Girl can' should be plural 'Girls can' or 'A girl can', and use 'a shopping mall' and 'for two or three hours' for duration. Suggestion: use correct noun forms and conditional structure.

× Lately I think I remember I went to shopping mall. I spend times there like 3 hours for window shopping. I didn't buy anything just. Get some food and.

✓ Recently I think I went to the shopping mall. I spent about three hours there window shopping. I didn't buy anything, just got some food.

Time adverb 'lately' is acceptable but 'recently' is more natural. Use past tense consistently for past events: 'went' (ok), but 'I spend times' should be 'I spent time' or 'I spent about three hours'. Use 'the shopping mall' with article. 'I didn't buy anything just. Get some food and.' is fragmentary; combine into one past-tense sentence: 'I didn't buy anything, just got some food.' Suggestion: maintain past tense and correct articles, combine fragments into complete sentences.