Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and natural: start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like reading, then give a specific reason and an example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'recent' not 'recently information') and avoid contradictions (don’t say you don’t like reading then say you enjoyed reading). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

例: I don’t enjoy reading novels very much, but I like reading newspapers because they give me recent information about current events. For example, I read the local paper every morning to stay updated on politics and community news.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference and provide a specific reason. Remove hesitations and repetitions. Explain what you mean by 'check the Mac'—if you mean making notes or reducing eye strain, say so. Use a linking word like 'because' and expand one specific supporting detail.

例: I prefer to read on paper because it’s easier on my eyes and I can make handwritten notes. For instance, when I study, I highlight and write comments in the margins, which helps me remember information better.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and correct grammar. State specific situations when careful reading is necessary and contrast with when it isn’t, using linking words like 'when' and 'but'. Avoid unclear words like 'Sir' unless explaining. Provide concrete examples (e.g., contracts, instructions vs. casual messages).

例: I need to read carefully when I receive important documents from my school or my parents, such as permission slips or exam instructions, because mistakes can cause problems. However, I don’t read carefully when it’s just casual texts or social media posts.

提案: State your preference clearly and give concise, specific reasons. Remove filler words and unclear phrases like 'the lyrics are leading'. Explain how detailed reading helps you (e.g., better understanding, retention) and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the ideas more deeply and remember them better. For example, when I study for exams I read the textbook carefully and take notes so I can review key points later.

× I don't like reading the book, but I enjoyed reading the newspaper because they gave me some recently information and the current event.

✓ I don't like reading books, but I enjoyed reading the newspaper because it gave me some recent information about current events.

Errors: 'the book' uses definite article incorrectly and singular/plural mismatch; 'recently information' mixes adverb with noun and is wrong form; 'the current event' is too specific and wrong article/number. Corrections: change 'the book' to plural 'books' to match general meaning (Grammar Problem Type ID 14 and 1), change 'they gave me' to 'it gave me' because 'newspaper' is singular (Grammar Problem Type ID 12/27), use adjective 'recent' not adverb 'recently' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13), and make 'current events' plural and remove definite article. Suggestion: use 'books' for general statements, use 'recent' before a noun, and match singular/plural and pronoun agreement with the noun referenced. Grammar problem type ID:14,1,12,13,27

× I prefer to read on paper paper because I can check the Mac and uh.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because I can check my Mac.

Errors: duplicated word 'paper paper' is a repetition (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 sentence structure), 'check the Mac' uses wrong article; should be 'my Mac' to indicate possession (Grammar Problem Type ID 11/12/22). Corrections: remove duplicate word, use possessive pronoun 'my' for personal device. Suggestion: avoid repetition and use possessive pronouns for personal belongings. Grammar problem type ID:11,12,26,22

× I need to read Sir carefully from from sending send from my school and parents.

✓ I need to read messages from my school and my parents carefully.

Errors: repetition 'from from' and 'sending send' are incorrect and cause sentence structure problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26), word order is wrong and 'Sir' is misplaced/unnecessary. Corrections: identify intended meaning as 'read messages from my school and my parents' and place adverb 'carefully' after the verb phrase. Suggestion: remove repetitions, use correct nouns ('messages') and place adverbs appropriately. Grammar problem type ID:26

× I prefer detailed, the lyrics are leading, the uh, text is more uh, give me more leading skills and uh, I can remain more efficient effectively.

✓ I prefer detailed reading; the text teaches me more and helps me stay more efficient and effective.

Errors: 'I prefer detailed' omits the noun 'reading' (Grammar Problem Type ID 23 sentence without a verb/noun), 'the lyrics are leading' is unclear and uses wrong word 'lyrics' and 'leading' (Grammar Problem Type ID 13), 'give me more leading skills' is ungrammatical and unclear, and 'remain more efficient effectively' redundantly uses adverbs. Corrections: add noun 'reading', replace 'lyrics' with 'text' or 'content', use 'teaches' or 'helps' instead of 'gives leading skills', and choose either 'efficient' or 'effective' or both in clear order. Suggestion: use clear verbs like 'helps' or 'teaches', avoid redundancy (efficiently/effective), and ensure noun phrases are complete. Grammar problem type ID:13,23,26