Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct small grammar and word-choice errors; start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (e.g., however, because) for coherence.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, but recently I haven't had much time because of work. When I was younger I read a lot of novels, especially mystery stories. However, nowadays I mostly read short articles or listen to audiobooks during my commute.

提案: Correct word choice errors and improve fluency. Open with a clear preference, then give specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and fix vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'what kind of reading', 'circle' not 'silk').

例: It depends on what I'm reading, but for long texts I prefer paper. For example, when I study long reports or novels I like to highlight and circle important points, which helps my understanding. For short news or emails, I usually read on my phone because it is more convenient.

提案: Use a concise topic sentence and give two clear, specific examples with linking words. Avoid repeating phrases and use correct pronouns (I/you) consistently. Keep sentences varied but within the 5-sentence limit.

例: I need to read carefully when preparing for an important exam because I must remember facts and understand concepts accurately. I also read instructions carefully when assembling furniture or using new equipment to avoid mistakes and ensure safety. For casual texts like social media posts, I usually skim.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence stating your preference, then add concise reasons and an example. Fix modal/tense and phrasing (e.g., 'I can understand' not 'I could'). Avoid repeating the same idea twice.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand and remember important information. For instance, when studying for exams I read slowly and take notes, rather than scanning, so I can retain the details. I only scan when I need a quick overview.

× I like reading but I don't have time for it.

✓ I like reading, but I don't have time for it.

Missing comma before coordinating conjunction 'but' joining two independent clauses; add comma for correct sentence structure and clarity. Also no article error but punctuation improves readability.

× I used to read a lot of books, for example novels when I was younger, but right now I have a lot of work to do so I don't really have enough time to read novels like.

✓ I used to read a lot of books, for example novels, when I was younger, but right now I have a lot of work to do so I don't really have enough time to read novels.

Remove incorrect ending word 'like' and add comma after 'novels' to set off the example. The original mixed past habit with present situation correctly; the error was an unfinished colloquial ending. Suggestion: avoid trailing words like 'like' at the end of the sentence and use commas to separate examples.

× It depends what kind of wedding I am doing because if it is longer I prefer reading on paper because uh, I can understand the things better when I highlight or silk around them and it is hard to concentrate on a screen for a long time.

✓ It depends on what kind of reading I am doing, because if it is long I prefer reading on paper. I can understand things better when I highlight or circle them, and it is hard to concentrate on a screen for a long time.

Multiple errors: 'depends on' requires preposition 'on'; 'wedding' is incorrect word choice—should be 'reading'; use 'long' not 'longer' (comparison not needed); 'silk around' is wrong word—use 'circle'; run-on sentence should be split. Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('depends on'), choose correct nouns, and avoid run-on sentences.

× I will need to read carefully when I'm preparing for an important exam, so it is important to remember all the details correctly and also when you are assembling something it is important to read details for avoiding an issue.

✓ I need to read carefully when I'm preparing for an important exam, because it is important to remember all the details correctly. Also, when you are assembling something it is important to read the instructions to avoid problems.

Use present tense 'need' for habitual or planned actions rather than 'will need' to match context. 'Read details for avoiding an issue' is awkward; use 'read the instructions to avoid problems' and include article 'the'. Suggestions: use simple present for general facts/plans and use clear collocations like 'avoid problems'.

× I prefer detailed reading because I could understand better when I'm reading something important and I don't like to scan the readings because it is very hard for me to remember the details carefully.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because I can understand better when I'm reading something important, and I don't like to scan texts because it is very hard for me to remember the details.

Use 'can' (present ability) instead of 'could' to match preference in present tense. 'Readings' is odd—use 'texts' or 'material'; 'remember the details' is sufficient without 'carefully'. Suggestion: match tense consistently and choose appropriate nouns.