Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and fluency. Give a clear topic sentence, correct tense/word choice, and avoid hesitation. Use one or two supporting details with linking words. Focus on natural phrasing (e.g., "I’ve loved reading since I was about eight") and avoid filler words.

例: Yes, I love reading. I’ve enjoyed books since I was about eight, when I started with simple children’s stories, and now I read many genres. For example, I especially enjoy thrillers and romances because they create vivid scenes and strong emotions.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and fix grammar. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give contrasting reasons using linking words (e.g., "however", "on the other hand"). Replace unclear phrases ("you readers", "forced reader") with correct terms like "e-reader" and "I have to bring many books."

例: It depends on the situation. At home I prefer paper books because I enjoy the physical feel and turning the pages. However, when I travel I use an e-reader since it’s more convenient and lets me carry many books at once.

提案: Make sentences grammatically correct and use precise vocabulary. Give a clear contrast with linking words ("when... but"). Replace unclear words ("read false") with correct expressions like "read more quickly" or "skim". Provide a brief reason why careful reading is needed.

例: When I read academic texts for university, such as science or business articles, I read slowly and carefully because I need to understand complex ideas. In contrast, when I read for pleasure, like thrillers, I often read more quickly or skim if the plot is straightforward.

提案: Correct repetitions and unclear words. Start with a direct answer and use linking words to explain choices. Fix phrasing (e.g., remove repeated 'UMM', use 'university' correctly) and give specific examples of when scanning is appropriate.

例: It depends on the material. For university texts I prefer detailed reading because I need to understand complex concepts. However, for casual reading in my free time I sometimes scan sections that are boring or repetitive to get the main points quickly.

× Yes, I love reading in particularly.

✓ Yes, I love reading, particularly.

The phrase 'in particularly' is incorrect. 'Particularly' is an adverb and should stand alone after a comma: 'particularly' or 'especially'. Remove 'in' and add a comma for natural speech rhythm.

× I started when I was around.

✓ I started when I was around eight.

The sentence is incomplete because the age is missing. Add the number 'eight' to complete the time expression 'when I was around eight'.

× I don't maybe 8 years old with easy children books and nowadays I read kind of every genre and it doesn't matter.

✓ Maybe I was eight years old when I started with easy children's books, and nowadays I read nearly every genre and it doesn't matter.

Multiple issues: tense and word order ('don't maybe 8 years old' is ungrammatical). Use past tense 'was' for age at start. Use possessive noun 'children's books'. 'Kind of' is informal; 'nearly' or 'almost' is clearer. Reorder to 'Maybe I was eight years old when I started with easy children's books.'

× I love thriller or romance books as well.

✓ I love thrillers and romance books as well.

Use plural 'thrillers' for the genre and 'and' instead of 'or' fits better when listing preferences. 'Thriller' as noun singular is less natural in this context.

× And then you can imagine the scenes.

✓ Then you can imagine the scenes.

Beginning a sentence with 'And' is informal but acceptable; remove 'And' for a cleaner sentence. The structure is fine otherwise.

× If I'm at home, I definitely prefer to read a book because I like the feeling of a book of the paper when you can turn the page.

✓ If I'm at home, I definitely prefer to read a book because I like the feeling of paper when you can turn the page.

'The feeling of a book of the paper' is ungrammatical. Use 'the feeling of paper' or 'the feeling of a physical book' to be clear. Keep present tense 'prefer' and 'like' consistent.

× But if I'm traveling, I like you readers because I'm a forced reader and otherwise I have to take many books and with the e-reader it's more convenient and practice.

✓ But if I'm traveling, I like e-readers because I'm a frequent traveler and otherwise I would have to take many books; with an e-reader it's more convenient and practical.

Several errors: 'you readers' should be 'e-readers'; 'forced reader' unclear—likely 'frequent traveler' or 'forced reader' replaced; verb tense and modality fixed: 'would have to' for hypothetical; 'practice' should be 'practical'. Split long sentence for clarity.

× When I read stuff for university, for example science or business related topics, then I definitely need to read slowly and think about the words and understand it better.

✓ When I read material for university, for example science or business-related topics, I definitely need to read slowly, think about the words, and understand them better.

Use 'material' or 'materials' instead of 'stuff'. 'Business-related' needs a hyphen. Keep subject-verb harmony: 'understand them better' refers to 'words/materials' plural. Remove redundant 'then' and streamline commas.

× And if I read in my free time, thrillers, whatever, then I can read false.

✓ If I read in my free time, for example thrillers, I can read quickly.

'Read false' is incorrect; likely intended 'read fast' or 'read quickly' (adverb needed). Remove 'then' and 'whatever' for clarity and place adverb after verb: 'read quickly'.

× It depends what I'm reading.

✓ It depends on what I'm reading.

Missing preposition 'on' after 'depends'. Use present continuous 'I'm reading' correctly.

× If I'm reading UMM university materials then I definitely need to read UMM in detail and slowly to comprehend everything and understand the complex and concepts.

✓ If I'm reading university materials, then I definitely need to read in detail and slowly to comprehend everything and understand the complex concepts.

Remove duplicate 'UMM' and unnecessary repetition. 'Complex and concepts' is incorrect; use 'complex concepts' or 'the complex ideas'. Keep present continuous for 'I'm reading' and parallel infinitives 'to comprehend' and 'to understand'.

× But if I'm reading for my own pleasure in my free time then sometimes I prefer scanning if it's a bit boring or UMM always the same.

✓ But if I'm reading for pleasure in my free time, sometimes I prefer scanning if it's a bit boring or always the same.

Remove stray 'UMM' and reorder: place adverb 'sometimes' before 'prefer'. 'Always the same' completes the idea without 'UMM'. Ensure commas for clarity.