Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 supporting details with correct tense and linking words. Avoid choppy sentences and small hesitations (e.g., "Actually"). Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., "I always went to the library" or "I always go to the library") and refine the final statement (e.g., "I dream of becoming a novelist").

例: Yes, I love reading. When I was a child I used to spend hours in the local library, reading all kinds of books, and that habit continues today. Because of this, I even dream of becoming a novelist one day.

提案: Make the answer clearer and more concise. Use one or two reasons linked smoothly with connectors (because / so) and correct subject-verb agreement and phrasing (e.g., "my eyes don't get blurry" not "doesn't"). Avoid filler phrases like "like" and "tend to" where unnecessary.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is more comfortable for long periods; my eyes don't become blurry or sore as they often do when I read on a screen.

提案: Structure the answer with a clear contrast and use specific examples. Replace vague phrases like "and whatnot" with precise explanations (e.g., "to avoid missing important clauses"). Use linking words ("however", "on the other hand") to show contrast.

例: I need to read carefully when reviewing legal documents or contracts because missing a clause could cause serious problems. However, I do not read carefully for light material, such as gossip stories or celebrity news, where accuracy is less important.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and two clear reasons with linking words. Avoid listing with many "or" and refine phrasing (e.g., "educational" → "educational material"). Keep it within 2–3 sentences for natural flow.

例: I prefer detailed reading for novels and educational material because it helps me understand ideas and remember facts. However, I usually scan short, light items like gossip or showbiz news when I just want a quick update.

× When I was a child, I used to read a lot of books.

✓ When I was a child, I read a lot of books.

'Used to' indicates a past habit and is acceptable, but in this context 'used to read a lot of books' is grammatically correct as well. However some learners overuse 'used to' with simple past narrative; using simple past 'I read a lot of books' is clearer and more natural in spoken answers about childhood habits.

× I always go to the library and read any kind of books.

✓ I always went to the library and read all kinds of books.

The student mixes present tense 'go' with past context 'When I was a child'. Change 'go' to past 'went' for consistent past narration (problem type: verb in the present participle/present form). Also 'any kind of books' is awkward; 'all kinds of books' or 'books of any kind' is more natural.

× I love reading books and I also dream to be a novel writer.

✓ I love reading books and I also dream of becoming a novelist.

'Dream to be' is nonstandard; the correct pattern is 'dream of doing' or 'dream of becoming'. Also 'novel writer' is awkward; 'novelist' is the correct noun. This falls under incorrect verb/infinitive usage and adjective choice.

× I personally prefer to read on paper because it's easier for me and my eyes don't get really blurry or doesn't get hurt when I tend to read for like few hours or more and like in screens that it made my eyes sore.

✓ I personally prefer to read on paper because it's easier for me, and my eyes don't get really blurry or hurt when I read for a few hours or more; screens make my eyes sore.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement 'my eyes don't... or doesn't' should be 'don't... or hurt' (plural subject 'eyes' takes 'don't'). 'Doesn't' is incorrect. 'Tend to read' is unnecessary; use simple 'read'. Use article 'a few hours'. 'In screens that it made my eyes sore' is ungrammatical; rewrite as 'screens make my eyes sore'. These corrections address pronoun/verb agreement, article use, and sentence structure.

× I need to be really cautious about it and be well detailed and whatnot.

✓ I need to be really cautious with them and pay close attention to the details.

The original is vague and ungrammatical: 'be well detailed' is incorrect; use 'pay close attention to the details' or 'be thorough'. 'About it' is vague for plural 'documents' so use 'with them' or 'with legal documents'. This falls under sentence structure and incorrect adjective/adverb usage.

× Maybe just reading some gossip stories.

✓ Maybe I'll just read some gossip stories.

The original is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb. Adding 'I'll' (I will) or 'I just read' completes the sentence. This matches the 'sentence without a verb' / structure error.

× I prefer detailed reading, especially when it comes to novels or general information or anything about really educational, but scanning will do when it comes to gossip stories or showbiz news.

✓ I prefer detailed reading, especially for novels or general information or anything that is educational, but scanning is fine for gossip stories or showbiz news.

'Detailed reading' is acceptable but 'anything about really educational' is ungrammatical; use 'anything that is educational'. 'Scanning will do' is informal; 'scanning is fine' is clearer. This addresses incorrect adjective/adverb use and sentence clarity.