Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with brief supporting details. Avoid repetition ("because" twice) and unnatural phrasing. Use linking words like "because" or "so" only once and give an example or context.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading because it helps me learn about new ideas and develop my skills. For example, I often read non-fiction books on history and science, which give me useful facts for my studies and conversations.

提案: Give a clear preference with one or two specific reasons and a short example. Correct grammar ("most books" → "most books are") and avoid redundant phrases. Use a linking phrase like "because" and a clear final comment.

例: I prefer reading on paper because physical books are easier on my eyes and I find them more comfortable. For instance, if I read on a phone for an hour I often get eye strain, but printed books don’t cause that problem.

提案: Give a direct, natural topic sentence, then contrast two situations using linking words such as "when" and "but". Use correct expressions ("read carefully when I study/prepare" and "I skim when relaxing") and provide a brief example for clarity.

例: I read carefully when I’m studying or preparing for exams because I need to understand details and remember facts. But when I’m relaxing, I usually skim magazines or light fiction for enjoyment, not for deep understanding.

提案: Answer directly and give one or two specific reasons and a brief example. Improve grammar ("detailed reading" not "detail reading", "remember it easily"). Use a linking word like "because" and a short example of when you use detailed reading.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand topics deeply and remember important points. For example, when I study for exams I read textbooks carefully and take notes so I can recall facts later.

× Yes, I like reading because I need to have more knowledge because in this world knowledge is very important to me.

✓ Yes, I like reading because I need to gain more knowledge; knowledge is very important in this world.

The sentence uses present tense but is wordy and awkward. 'Need to have more knowledge' is unnatural; use 'need to gain more knowledge'. Repeated 'because' creates redundancy; combine clauses and use a semicolon or conjunction. Also place 'in this world' after 'important' for natural word order.

× I prefer to read on paper because the most book are using paper and when I use screen to read the screen most make my eyes be tired.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because most books are printed on paper, and when I read on a screen my eyes often get tired.

Errors: 'the most book' should be plural 'most books' (singular/plural). 'are using paper' is incorrect passive; use 'are printed on paper'. 'use screen to read' needs article: 'read on a screen'. 'make my eyes be tired' is unnatural; use 'my eyes often get tired'.

× When I need to be text I will need to read carefully and when at the free time I am not read carefully because that is really chill.

✓ When I need to study a text I have to read carefully, but in my free time I do not read carefully because I am just relaxing.

Multiple issues: 'need to be text' is incorrect — use 'need to study a text' (verb + noun). 'I will need to read carefully' is unnecessary future; use present 'I have to read carefully' to match general truth. 'at the free time' should be 'in my free time'. 'I am not read carefully' mixes forms; use 'I do not read carefully'. 'that is really chill' is informal; use 'I am just relaxing' for clarity.

× I prefer detail reading because detail reading can make me have more knowledge and I can remember it very easy.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because detailed reading helps me gain more knowledge, and I can remember it very easily.

Use adjective 'detailed' instead of noun 'detail' to modify 'reading'. 'Make me have more knowledge' is awkward; use 'helps me gain more knowledge'. 'Remember it very easy' uses adjective 'easy' where adverb 'easily' is required. Ensure consistent tense/aspect.