Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and grammar (e.g., “I was really into” and avoid fragments). Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. When I was a child I was really into Japanese manga such as Dragon Ball and Doraemon, which sparked my love of stories. Now I still read manga, but I’ve also started exploring novels to broaden my interests.

提案: Provide a clear comparison sentence and a specific reason with correct grammar. Use linking words like “because” to connect ideas, and avoid fragmented phrases. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because paper is easier on my eyes. For example, I tried reading PDFs on my phone and found that prolonged screen use gives me eye strain.

提案: Answer directly with a complete topic sentence and give a specific example and reason. Remove filler words (uh) and finish your explanation. Use linking words such as “for example” and “so” to make it coherent.

例: I need to read carefully when I am working, especially as an electrical engineer. For example, I always read instruction manuals and wiring diagrams thoroughly so I avoid mistakes and ensure safety.

提案: Give a direct preference sentence, then explain with specific reasons. Use correct comparative form (“prefer X to Y”) and finish the thought. Limit to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer detailed reading to scanning because my engineering work requires precise understanding. For instance, I carefully study technical specifications and calculations to make sure everything is correct.

× When I was a child I really into Japanese manga like Dragon Ball or Doraemon.

✓ When I was a child I was really into Japanese manga like Dragon Ball and Doraemon.

Missing auxiliary verb 'was' and conjunction 'and'; this is a sentence structure and verb form issue. Add 'was' to form the past continuous/state 'was into' and replace 'or' with 'and' for listing examples. Suggestion: use 'was really into' to express past preference and join items with 'and'.

× Now I still love Japanese manga but I also try some new books like. Novels.

✓ Now I still love Japanese manga, but I also try reading new types of books, such as novels.

Fragment and punctuation error: 'like. Novels.' is a sentence fragment. Also verb choice 'try' needs a verb form ('try reading') and 'such as' better introduces examples. Suggestion: combine into one sentence and use 'try reading' or 'try some' with 'such as'.

× I prefer reading on paper than on screen.

✓ I prefer reading on paper to reading on a screen.

Use 'prefer A to B' not 'prefer A than B'. Also add article 'a' before 'screen' for clarity. Suggestion: use the structure 'prefer X to Y' or 'prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen'.

× I have tried reading on the screen like a PDF file on my phone and it didn't work out.

✓ I have tried reading on a screen, for example PDF files on my phone, but it didn't work out for me.

Awkward phrasing and missing clarity: 'like a PDF file' should be 'for example, PDF files' and add 'for me' to clarify 'didn't work out'. Suggestion: rephrase to clarify the example and result.

× I just my eye isn't work well with.

✓ It's just that my eyes don't work well with it.

Missing subject and auxiliary verbs; 'eye' should be plural 'eyes' and 'isn't work' is ungrammatical. Also need a pronoun 'it' to refer to screens. Suggestion: use 'It's just that my eyes don't work well with screens' for clarity.

× I think I have to read carefully when I am working like uh, for example, I'm working as an electrical engineer and I have to, uh, read uh, instruction manual very carefully because.

✓ I think I have to read carefully when I am working. For example, I work as an electrical engineer and I have to read instruction manuals very carefully.

Run-on, filler words, and sentence ending with 'because' without a conclusion. Also 'instruction manual' should be plural for general statement. Suggestion: remove fillers, split into two sentences, use plural 'manuals' and complete the thought.

× I think I prefer detailed reading than scanning because what I am working now is like engineering work, so I have to really dig into the details and I have to careful to.

✓ I think I prefer detailed reading to scanning because the work I am doing now is engineering work, so I have to really dig into the details and be careful.

Use 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than Y'; 'what I am working now' is ungrammatical — use 'the work I am doing now'; 'have to careful to' is incorrect — use 'be careful' or 'be careful about it'. Suggestion: restructure sentence, remove filler words, and use correct verb forms.