Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and give 1–2 specific examples or reasons using linking words (e.g., because, for example). Avoid redundancy and limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading, especially motivational books and romantic novels because they help me understand people's emotions and ambitions. For example, I recently read a biography that inspired me to set clearer goals. In my free time I usually read for relaxation and self-improvement.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason with one concise supporting detail. Correct grammar (e.g., ‘prefer reading on paper’, ‘affects my eyes’) and avoid repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences and include a linking word (because, so).

例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because long screen time strains my eyes. Also, physical books are convenient to keep by my bedside, so I can read before sleep without digital distractions.

提案: Make the contrast clearer with a concise topic sentence and linking words (for example, when…; however…). Correct sentence structure and word choice (e.g., ‘when I’m free’ not ‘when I have a leisure time’). Give specific situations when you read carefully and when you don’t.

例: I read carefully when I have free time or need to learn new words because I want to improve my vocabulary. However, if I am distracted by noise or interruptions, I skim the text or stop reading altogether.

提案: Remove filler words (uh) and state a clear topic sentence with a reason. Use linking words (because, so) and give a short specific example of when you use detailed reading. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me improve pronunciation and expand my vocabulary. For instance, when studying a novel or a news article, I read carefully to understand word usage and sentence structure.

× Yes, I fond of reading specially the motivational books and the love stories.

✓ Yes, I am fond of reading, especially motivational books and love stories.

Missing verb 'am' for the adjective 'fond' and 'specially' should be 'especially' (correct adverb). Also drop 'the' before plural categories. Suggestion: always include appropriate form of 'be' with adjectives and use 'especially' for emphasis.

× Those are related to the person.

✓ Those relate to people.

Awkward phrasing and incorrect reference 'the person'. Use plural 'people' to match 'those' and the verb 'relate to' for clarity. Suggestion: match noun number and use natural collocations like 'relate to people'.

× On my leisure time, I read novels and the biography.

✓ In my leisure time, I read novels and biographies.

Use preposition 'in' with 'leisure time' (preposition error) and 'biography' should be plural 'biographies' to match 'novels' (article/number error). Remove 'the' before 'biography'. Suggestion: use 'in my free time' and keep list items in same number form.

× Moreover, it motivates me personally to live life in a smooth way.

✓ Moreover, they personally motivate me to live a smoother life.

Pronoun 'it' is unclear; use 'they' to refer to books. 'Live life in a smooth way' is awkward; 'live a smoother life' is more natural. Also place 'personally' before the verb. Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees with antecedent and prefer natural collocations.

× I prefer to read on a paper rather than a screen because I personally believe that more screen time effects my eyes.

✓ I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because I believe that too much screen time affects my eyes.

Do not use 'a' before 'paper' when referring to the medium; use 'on paper'. Add 'on' before 'a screen'. 'More screen time' is vague; use 'too much screen time'. 'Effects' is the wrong word; use the verb 'affects'. Suggestion: choose correct articles and verbs and use 'too much' for excessive amounts.

× So reading on books that also easily available nearby your nearby your bedside and.

✓ So reading books is also convenient because they are easily available on your bedside.

Fragmented and repetitive ('nearby your nearby your'); incorrect prepositions and missing verb. 'Reading on books' is wrong; use 'reading books'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, include a verb, and use 'on your bedside' or better 'beside your bed'.

× I often read carefully when I have a leisure time and utilize some precious time on reading so that I can improve my vocabulary whenever.

✓ I often read carefully when I have leisure time and use that time to read so that I can improve my vocabulary.

Use 'have leisure time' (no article) and 'use' rather than 'utilize' for clarity. 'On reading' is awkward; 'to read' is correct. Remove 'whenever' at the end because it's unnecessary. Suggestion: prefer simple verbs and correct prepositions/word order.

× On the other hand, when I distract, if I distract by something or someone so I have less interest.

✓ On the other hand, when I am distracted by something or someone, I lose interest.

Incorrect verb form 'distract' should be passive 'am distracted'. Redundant and incorrect conjunctions ('when...if...so'). 'Have less interest' is unnatural; use 'lose interest'. Suggestion: use passive for being distracted and simplify conjunctions.

× I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning, uh, because, uh, I believe that reading makes a person's pronunciation and vocabulary more, uh, more interesting.

✓ I prefer detailed reading rather than scanning because I believe that detailed reading improves a person's pronunciation and vocabulary.

'Makes...more interesting' is vague; 'improves' is a stronger verb. Repetition and fillers removed. Keep gerund 'detailed reading' consistent. Suggestion: choose precise verbs to describe effects.

× And scanning is not my my kind of thing, so detail reading is more appropriate.

✓ Scanning is not my kind of thing, so detailed reading is more appropriate.

Duplicate word 'my my'. 'Detail reading' should be 'detailed reading' (adjective form). Suggestion: proofread to remove duplicates and use correct adjective form.