Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatically accurate. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific reasons with correct verb forms and plurality. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' and 'and'). Keep the answer to no more than 4–5 sentences.

例: I enjoy reading because it helps me relax and concentrate. For example, after a busy day I often read short stories to unwind, and I also like non-fiction to learn new things. Reading offers many interesting books on different topics, so I rarely get bored.

提案: Organize the response: state your preference clearly, give two specific reasons, and use correct expressions (e.g., 'on paper' not 'in a paper', 'turning to the next page'). Avoid absolute claims unless you qualify them. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'also'.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the feel of a physical book and the experience of turning to the next page. Also, I find paper books easier on my eyes than screens, especially for long reading sessions. For these reasons, I usually choose printed books when I can.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence that answers both parts. Use correct tense and agreement ('have' -> 'has', 'sometimes' once). Give a specific example of 'serious news' and one example of casual browsing. Use a linking contrast like 'however' or 'whereas'.

例: I read carefully when the information is important or detailed, for example when I read financial news or official announcements because I need to understand the facts. However, when I'm browsing social media or casual websites, I often skim and scroll past most content.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition. Use correct grammar ('It depends', 'serious things' -> 'serious topics', 'I am a detailed reader'). Provide a brief reason for each preference and use linking words like 'if' and 'but'. Keep to 2–4 concise sentences.

例: It depends on the material. If it is a serious topic like academic articles or news, I read in detail to understand every point. But for social media or light content, I usually scan quickly to get the main idea.

× I like reading because it let me relax and come and can focus with the books and it also have a lot of very interesting book.

✓ I like reading because it lets me relax and helps me focus on the books, and there are also a lot of very interesting books.

Multiple errors: 'let' should be 'lets' for third person singular subject 'it' (ID 2: Third person singular issue). 'come and can focus' is ungrammatical and likely intended meaning is 'helps me focus' which uses correct verb and object (ID 26: Sentence structure errors). 'focus with the books' should be 'focus on the books' using correct preposition (ID 11). 'it also have' should be 'there are also' to use correct existential construction and match plural 'books' (ID 3: There be issue and ID 1: Singular and plural issue). 'a lot of very interesting book' needs plural 'books' (ID 1). Suggested fixes: use 'lets' for habitual effect, replace the phrase sequence with 'helps me focus on the books', use 'there are' + plural 'books'.

× I still prefer reading a book in a paper because it's quite original and I love the texture of the book when you turn onto the another page.

✓ I still prefer reading a book on paper because it's quite traditional and I love the texture of the pages when you turn to the next page.

Errors: 'in a paper' is incorrect — use 'on paper' or 'in a paper' only for 'in a newspaper' (ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). 'quite original' is a word-choice issue; 'traditional' or 'original' depends on meaning but 'traditional' fits preference for physical books (ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). 'the texture of the book when you turn onto the another page' has multiple problems: 'turn onto' should be 'turn to' (ID 11), 'the another page' should be 'the next page' or just 'another page' without 'the' (ID 22: Article errors and ID 18: Incorrect order of adjectives not applicable but article error applies). Also 'pages' plural is more natural. Suggested fixes: use 'on paper', 'pages', 'turn to the next page'.

× Moreover, I think reading in the computer or ebook is also damaging your eyes.

✓ Moreover, I think reading on a computer or on an e-book can damage your eyes.

Errors: 'in the computer' should be 'on a computer' (ID 11: Incorrect use of prepositions). 'ebook' as noun should be 'an e-book' or 'e-books' and take article (ID 22: Article errors). 'is also damaging your eyes' is odd; use modal 'can damage your eyes' for general possibility (ID 4: Modal verb usage and ID 6: Present tense issue). Suggested fix: 'can damage your eyes' and consistent prepositions 'on a computer' and 'on an e-book'.

× I will read carefully when it is some serious news that have a lot of details that I need to concentrate, but sometime if I read something on the Internet I just scroll scroll past it.

✓ I read carefully when it is serious news that has a lot of details I need to concentrate on, but sometimes if I read something on the Internet I just scroll past it.

Errors: 'I will read carefully' is okay but habitual action fits simple present 'I read carefully' (ID 6: Present tense issue). 'it is some serious news' — 'news' is uncountable and 'some' is awkward; use 'serious news' (ID 22: Article errors/word choice). 'that have' should be 'that has' because 'news' is singular/uncountable (ID 27: Subject-verb agreement errors / ID 1). 'I need to concentrate' needs preposition 'concentrate on' (ID 11). 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (ID 13: Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs). Duplicate 'scroll scroll' remove repetition (ID 26). Suggested fixes: use simple present for habitual, 'has', 'concentrate on', 'sometimes', and single 'scroll'.

× It is depends on what I read. If it's quite a serious things, I'm very detailed reader reader but it but if it's just only something on the social media, I just scanning it.

✓ It depends on what I read. If it's something quite serious, I'm a very detailed reader, but if it's just something on social media, I just scan it.

Errors: 'It is depends' should be 'It depends' — remove auxiliary 'is' (ID 26: Sentence structure errors and ID 6: Present tense issue). 'a serious things' mixes singular and plural; use 'something quite serious' or 'serious things' (ID 1). 'I'm very detailed reader reader' needs article 'a' and remove duplicate 'reader' (ID 22 and ID 26). 'but it but if' contains repetition and extra 'it' (ID 26). 'just only' is redundant; use 'just' or 'only' (ID 13). 'on the social media' should be 'on social media' (ID 11/22). 'I just scanning it' should be 'I just scan it' (simple present for habitual) or 'I just skim it' for better collocation (ID 8: Verb + -ing form and ID 6). Suggested fixes: 'It depends', 'a very detailed reader', 'just scan it' or 'just skim it', 'on social media'.