Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense consistency and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Use past tense for childhood habits (e.g., 'I always dreamed') and present tense for current habits. Keep it within 3–4 sentences to sound natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading a lot. When I was a child, I always dreamed of having my own library, and that passion has stayed with me. However, nowadays I only read occasionally because I am very busy with work and family commitments.

提案: Good clear opinion and reason. Improve fluency by removing repetition and tightening phrasing; use linking words to connect ideas. Say 'on paper' rather than 'on a paper.' Limit to 2–3 sentences and include a brief example or consequence.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it gives me a more authentic experience; feeling the pages and seeing the physical book makes reading more immersive. For example, I find it easier to concentrate on long novels when I hold a paper book.

提案: Answer is short and a bit unclear. Give a clear topic sentence, then add specific examples and use linking words. Replace vague phrase 'if somebody else is listening' with concrete situations (e.g., reading instructions, work emails). Use correct grammar: 'when I am taking an exam' not 'if I am answering an exam.'

例: I need to read carefully when I am taking an exam or when reading instructions or official documents, because small details matter. On the other hand, I don’t read carefully when I’m skimming news headlines or browsing social media for fun.

提案: Good structure but reduce fillers ('like', 'of course'). Be concise: state the preference rule, then provide specific examples and linking words. Use consistent vocabulary: 'detailed reading' vs 'scanning'.

例: It depends on my purpose: if I’m reading for pleasure, I prefer detailed reading so I can enjoy the story and notice nuances. However, if I’m researching quickly or browsing news, I usually scan the text to find relevant points.

× In fact, when I was a child, I have always dreamed of owning a library.

✓ In fact, when I was a child, I always dreamed of owning a library.

Incorrect tense combination: 'when I was a child' sets a past time, so the present perfect 'have always dreamed' is inappropriate. Use past simple 'always dreamed' to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past simple for completed or habitual actions in the past (e.g., 'I always dreamed').

× I prefer reading on a paper because it gives me an authentic reading experience and it really feels good to actually feel the pages flipping instead of just reading it on a screen.

✓ I prefer reading on paper because it gives me an authentic reading experience, and it really feels good to actually feel the pages flipping instead of just reading on a screen.

Unnecessary article 'a' before 'paper' — 'on paper' is the correct idiom. Also avoid repeating 'it' unnecessarily and remove 'it' before 'on a screen'. Suggestion: use set expressions ('on paper', 'on a screen') and avoid redundant pronouns.

× Now that I am an adult, I still read books, but on an occasional level only because I am very busy with my life.

✓ Now that I am an adult, I still read books, but only occasionally because I am very busy with my life.

Awkward phrase 'on an occasional level' — use 'occasionally' (an adverb) to modify 'read'. Also 'only' is better placed before 'occasionally' for natural word order. Suggestion: use adverbs for frequency (e.g., 'occasionally') and place 'only' before the adverb.

× I think I need to read carefully if I am answering an exam or like if somebody else is listening.

✓ I think I need to read carefully if I am answering an exam or if somebody else is listening.

Unnecessary filler 'like' is informal and ungrammatical here. Use 'or if' to join the two conditional clauses. Suggestion: avoid fillers like 'like' in formal answers and use proper conjunctions to connect clauses.

× It really depends on the reason why I am reading. If I am reading out of leisure or for entertainment, of course it should be a detailed one.

✓ It really depends on the reason I am reading. If I am reading for leisure or entertainment, of course it should be detailed.

Unnecessary 'why' after 'reason' — say 'the reason I am reading' or 'the reason for reading'. 'Out of leisure' is unnatural; use 'for leisure'. 'A detailed one' is awkward because 'reading' is uncountable here; use 'detailed' to describe the reading. Suggestion: use 'for leisure' and avoid turning uncountable nouns into countable phrases.

× But if like I'm just browsing, of course I would just do scanning.

✓ But if I'm just browsing, of course I would just scan.

Remove filler 'like'. Use base verb 'scan' rather than noun phrase 'do scanning'. Also contraction placement is fine but avoid redundant 'just'. Suggestion: use verb 'scan' for the action and avoid filler words.