Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve fluency and clarity by reducing hesitation, correcting word choice, and using a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Say the genres correctly and explain briefly why you enjoy them using linking words.

例: Yes, I do. I especially enjoy fantasy and science fiction novels because they expand my imagination and make me think about future possibilities.

提案: Make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two clear reasons using linking words (for example, because / moreover). Correct phrasing such as 'the feeling of paper' and 'reading on a screen for too long'.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I enjoy the tactile feeling of the pages, and reading on a screen for too long strains my eyes.

提案: This answer is clear but can be tightened and made more fluent. Use a topic sentence, then give specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid filler sounds and repeat structures.

例: I need to read carefully when I look at medical instructions or legal documents because mistakes could be harmful. For casual things like social media posts, I usually skim instead.

提案: Clarify your stance and reasons. Use correct collocations (save time, not money), and explain advantages and disadvantages with linking words. Avoid self-contradiction and filler repetition.

例: I usually prefer scanning because it saves time and helps me find key information quickly; however, this can be a drawback when deep understanding is required, so I do detailed reading for important texts.

× I, I do, I like reading, especially levels, uh, fantas, fantasy level and the science level.

✓ I like reading, especially fantasy and science fiction.

The original sentence uses incorrect noun phrases ('fantas, fantasy level', 'science level') and redundant words. Use the adjectives or genre nouns 'fantasy' and 'science fiction' to name book genres. Remove filler repetitions ('I, I do') and extra words for clarity. Suggestion: Practice naming genres directly and avoid repeating pronouns or verbs unnecessarily.

× It can make me open mind and uh umm, think about the future.

✓ They can open my mind and make me think about the future.

Subject-verb and adjective usage: 'It' is incorrect for plural 'books' or 'they'; 'open mind' should be 'open my mind'; word order requires 'make me think' rather than 'think about the future' after 'make'. Use plural subject 'they' if referring to books or 'reading' as a gerund. Suggestion: Ensure pronoun number matches the noun and use correct collocations ('open my mind', 'make me think').

× I prefer to read on paper instead of on a screen because I like to touch the feeling about the paper and I think which screen too long will hurt your eyes, so I prefer read on paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper instead of on a screen because I like the feel of paper, and I think looking at a screen for too long will hurt your eyes, so I prefer to read on paper.

Multiple preposition and phrasing errors: 'touch the feeling about the paper' is incorrect — use 'the feel of paper'; 'which screen too long' is ungrammatical — use 'looking at a screen for too long'. Also missing 'to' in 'prefer to read on paper'. Suggestion: Use common collocations ('the feel of', 'look at a screen for too long') and keep infinitive 'prefer to read'. Note: Corrections adhere to present preference context.

× When I read some medical instructions, uh, or some important papers, I need to read carefully.

✓ When I read medical instructions or other important papers, I need to read carefully.

The sentence is mostly correct but contains unnecessary fillers and slightly awkward word order ('When I read some medical instructions, uh, or some important papers'). Remove 'some' and fillers for clarity. The present-tense modal 'need to' is appropriate. Suggestion: Omit fillers and combine similar objects for concise speech.

× Sometimes I read again and again and uh, umm, highlight the important words.

✓ Sometimes I read them again and again and highlight the important words.

Pronoun reference missing: 'read again and again' needs an object (them) referring to the papers or instructions. Also remove fillers. The structure 'read again and again and highlight' is fine; adding 'them' clarifies the object. Suggestion: Always include the object when the verb requires it and avoid hesitation words.

× I prefer scanning rather than detailed reading because scanning will save money a save save times.

✓ I prefer scanning rather than detailed reading because scanning saves time and effort.

The original uses incorrect quantifiers and repetitions ('save money a save save times') which are unclear. Likely intended meaning is saving time (and possibly effort or money). Use correct singular noun 'time' uncountable and the present simple 'saves'. Suggestion: Use precise quantifiers and avoid repetition. Note: Tense kept in present to match general preference.

× And yes I I think this is shortcoming because I can focus on reading.

✓ However, I think this is a shortcoming because I cannot focus on reading as well.

Sentence structure and meaning: 'this is shortcoming' needs an article 'a shortcoming'; also the intended contrast is that scanning is a shortcoming because it reduces ability to focus, so use 'cannot focus' or 'cannot focus as well'. Remove repeated 'I I' and replace 'And yes' with a suitable connector like 'However'. Suggestion: Use articles with countable nouns and ensure logical coherence between clauses.