Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two specific supporting details (types of books, reasons) using linking words. Avoid vague or redundant phrases and incorrect collocations like “kill my time” or “enhances my IQ level” — instead say “improves my knowledge” or “helps me learn.”

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I mainly read fiction because I like the plots and characters, and I also read non-fiction occasionally to learn about history and self-improvement. For example, last month I finished a novel that inspired me to try creative writing.

提案: Good clear opinion and reasons. Improve coherence by using a smoother topic sentence and linking words, and correct informal phrase "Talking Turkey." Be specific about the benefits (e.g. better retention, ease of making notes). Keep it to 2–3 sentences max.

例: I prefer reading on paper because I find it easier to concentrate and retain information. Also, with a paper book I can underline important points and make margin notes, which helps when I review material later.

提案: Answer is relevant but needs clearer structure and correction of errors (e.g. “revise” not “revive,” “novel” not “noble”). Use linking words like “however” or “whereas” and give a concise example of skimming versus careful reading.

例: I read carefully when preparing for exams because I need to understand details and revise thoroughly to avoid mistakes. However, when I read a novel for pleasure I usually skim some sections and focus only on parts that interest me.

提案: Clear preference but repetitive and contains grammar errors (e.g. subject-verb agreement, repeated words). Start with a concise topic sentence, use one linking phrase to add a reason, and provide a brief example. Avoid repeating the same idea.

例: I usually prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand and analyse a topic. For instance, when studying for a course I read each chapter carefully and take notes so I can explain the concepts later.

× Well, I'm quite fond of reading books because it enhances my IQ level and intelligence.

✓ Well, I'm quite fond of reading books because it enhances my knowledge and intelligence.

Using 'IQ level' is awkward and redundant with 'intelligence'. Replace with 'knowledge' which fits reading benefits. Also avoid redundant nouns; 'IQ' alone or 'intelligence' are fine, but pairing 'IQ level and intelligence' is repetitive. ID:13

× I mostly prefer to read story books which all which is also a fascinating and hard work enthusiastic positive vibes.

✓ I mostly prefer to read story books because they are fascinating and give me positive energy.

Original sentence contains several issues: redundant words ('which all which'), mismatched descriptors ('hard work enthusiastic'), and awkward noun phrase 'positive vibes'. Correct by using a clear conjunction 'because' and simple adjectives 'fascinating' and 'positive'. Keep parallel structure. ID:13

× I also read books to kill my time.

✓ I also read books to pass the time.

Phrase 'kill my time' is nonstandard. Use the idiomatic expression 'pass the time'. This improves naturalness and clarity. ID:26

× Talking Turkey, I mostly prefer to read on paper rather than screen reading because there are a lot of distractions while reading on screen and reading on paper gives us many benefits such as we can underline the important topics and we can revise it in future also.

✓ To be honest, I mostly prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because there are many distractions when reading on a screen, and reading on paper has benefits: we can underline important points and review them in the future.

Replace informal 'Talking Turkey' with 'To be honest'. Use correct prepositions 'on paper' and 'on a screen'. Use 'many' instead of 'a lot of' for formality, and 'when' for time reference. 'Revise it in future also' is ungrammatical; use 'review them in the future'. Also maintain plural agreement ('important points' and 'them'). ID:11

× Well, I read carefully when I have an exam or test because I need to understand details and revive so I don't mistake, don't make mistakes.

✓ Well, I read carefully when I have an exam or test because I need to understand the details and review them so I don't make mistakes.

Replace 'revive' with 'review' (correct verb). Remove duplicated negatives and fix word order: 'so I don't make mistakes'. Add definite article 'the details' and plural 'them' to refer back to details. ID:12

× By contrast, when I am I reading a noble or a non fiction book just for fun, I don't pay as much attention and I often skim sections.

✓ By contrast, when I am reading a novel or a non-fiction book just for fun, I don't pay as much attention and I often skim sections.

Remove extra 'I' after 'am'. Correct 'noble' to 'novel' and hyphenate 'non-fiction'. The rest of the sentence is fine after these fixes. ID:26

× Candidly speaking, I mostly prefer detailed reading because it enhance my knowledge about the topic and I clearly analyse the reading when when I have a detailed reading.

✓ Candidly speaking, I mostly prefer detailed reading because it enhances my knowledge about the topic and I can clearly analyze the text when I do detailed reading.

Subject-verb agreement: 'it enhance' should be 'it enhances'. Remove duplicate 'when'. Use 'analyze' (American) or 'analyse' (British) consistently; added modal 'can' clarifies ability. Replace repeated phrase 'detailed reading' with 'do detailed reading' or 'detail reading' for fluency. ID:27

× And it is also beneficial for me to have a detailed reading because it gives a clear clarification of every topic.

✓ It is also beneficial for me to read in detail because it provides a clear explanation of each topic.

Avoid starting with conjunction 'And'. 'Have a detailed reading' is awkward; use 'read in detail'. 'Clear clarification' is redundant; use 'clear explanation'. Use 'each' instead of 'every' with 'topic' for naturalness. ID:26