Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and avoid unnecessary capitalization. Add one brief specific example to support your point.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. My mother often gave me books instead of toys when I was a child, which sparked my interest. For example, I used to spend hours with fairy tales, imagining the scenes, which helped me escape into other worlds.

提案: Improve grammar and fluency by using correct tense and smoother linking phrases. Avoid filler words and minor errors (e.g., 'I when I wanted'). Give one concise reason per medium with a linking word.

例: I prefer both, depending on the genre. For example, I usually read Japanese comics on a screen because physical volumes are expensive. On the other hand, I prefer printed novels because I enjoy turning the pages and savouring the atmosphere.

提案: Make the answer more direct and structured. Begin with a clear topic sentence that answers both parts, then give specific times and a brief reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'however'.

例: I read carefully during my free or quiet time, such as evenings or weekends, because I can concentrate then. However, I usually don't read when I'm very busy with school on weekdays because I need to focus on assignments.

提案: Use clearer, more natural phrasing and avoid repetition. Provide one or two concise reasons with specific effects of detailed reading. Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand the text and connect emotionally with the characters. For instance, when I read novels slowly, I notice themes and details I would miss if I skimmed, which makes the experience more rewarding.

× I remember those times for my mom which gave me books instead of toys.

✓ I remember the times when my mom gave me books instead of toys.

The original sentence uses 'for my mom' and 'which' incorrectly. Use 'the times when' to refer to moments, and use 'my mom gave me' (not 'for my mom which gave me'). Also remove 'for' and replace 'which' with 'when' to correctly link the time to the action.

× That's where I started to like reading because it lets me Daydream and escape reality.

✓ That's where I started to like reading because it lets me daydream and escape reality.

Capitalization of 'Daydream' is incorrect; it should be lowercase 'daydream' as a verb. The rest is acceptable, with 'lets me daydream' correctly using the base verb after 'lets'.

× I prefer both, but it depends on the genre that I wanted to read.

✓ I prefer both, but it depends on the genre that I want to read.

The clause refers to a general present preference, so the present simple 'want' should be used rather than past 'wanted.' Use consistent present tense for habitual/preferences.

× For example, I when I wanted to read Japanese comics, I like reading it on screen as it is very expensive in printed copies.

✓ For example, when I want to read Japanese comics, I like reading them on a screen because printed copies are very expensive.

The original has misplaced 'I' and mixes tenses. Remove the extra 'I' before 'when,' keep present tense 'want,' use plural pronoun 'them' for 'comics,' use 'on a screen' and change 'it is very expensive in printed copies' to 'printed copies are very expensive' for correct word order and agreement.

× However, when it comes to novels, I like to read it in books because I like to turn and pages and explore it.

✓ However, when it comes to novels, I like to read them in books because I like to turn the pages and explore them.

'Novels' is plural, so use plural pronouns 'them.' Also 'turn and pages' is incorrect; use 'turn the pages.' Ensure pronoun agreement and correct article usage.

× I treat reading as a hobby, so I read when it is my alone time or when it is my relaxed time.

✓ I treat reading as a hobby, so I read during my alone time or when I'm relaxed.

Use 'during my alone time' (preposition and noun phrase) or 'when I'm relaxed' rather than 'when it is my alone time' which is awkward. Use contraction 'I'm' for natural speech; remove redundant 'my relaxed time.'

× When it is not, I do not read when I'm very busy with my school, especially on weekdays.

✓ When I'm very busy with school, especially on weekdays, I don't read.

Reorder for natural English; 'busy with my school' is better as 'busy with school.' Use present simple negative 'I don't read' for habitual situation. Remove redundant 'when it is not.'

× I prefer detailed reading because it makes you emerge with what you read, it makes you feel what you feel about that book, and it makes you also understand what you're reading and what makes reading so enjoyable.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it helps you engage with what you read, makes you feel connected to the book, and helps you understand the text and why reading is so enjoyable.

'Makes you emerge with' is incorrect; use 'helps you engage with' or 'immerse you in.' Combine ideas concisely: 'helps you engage,' 'makes you feel connected,' and 'helps you understand why reading is enjoyable.' This corrects awkward verb choices and improves clarity.