Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, fluency and clarity. Give a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and fix articles and word choice (e.g. "different genres such as fiction and history"). Combine ideas into one concise answer (max 4-5 sentences) and include a specific example of a book or topic to enrich content. Use linking words like "because" correctly to connect reason.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy reading books in different genres, especially historical fiction and biographies, because they broaden my knowledge and offer new perspectives. For example, I recently read a biography of Nelson Mandela that taught me a lot about leadership and resilience.

提案: Make the answer more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons linked with connectors like "because" and "so". Avoid filler and repeated words. Mention a brief example of when you use paper books.

例: I prefer reading printed books because they help me concentrate and I can jot notes in the margins to highlight key points. For instance, when studying for exams I always use paper textbooks so I can underline important passages and write reminders.

提案: Correct grammar and sentence structure. Give a clear topic sentence that answers both parts (when careful vs when not) and use linking words ("for example", "however"). Provide specific examples and one brief reason for each case. Avoid vague phrases and filler.

例: I need to read carefully when I'm preparing for exams or studying textbooks because I must remember details and understand concepts. However, I don't read carefully when browsing news headlines or social media, since I only want a quick overview of current events.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and grammar ("detailed reading" instead of "detailed routing"). Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give concise reasons and an example. Avoid absolute claims like remembering "every single word"; be realistic and precise. Use linking words like "especially" appropriately.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand and remember important information, especially when preparing for exams or studying textbooks. For example, when I read a chapter carefully I take notes and summarise key points, which helps me recall them during tests.

× I really enjoy reading books in different genres such as the same fiction and and history.

✓ I really enjoy reading books in different genres such as fiction and history.

Duplicate word 'and' and the word 'same' is incorrect here. Remove the extra 'and' and 'same' because 'such as fiction and history' correctly lists examples. Suggestion: list genres directly and avoid filler words.

× I really like a printed books because they help me concentrate better and I can write some notes on in the in the margin to highlight the key points and it makes easier to read.

✓ I really like printed books because they help me concentrate better, and I can write notes in the margin to highlight the key points, which makes them easier to read.

Errors: incorrect article 'a' before plural 'books'; awkward phrase 'some notes' is acceptable but 'write notes' is more natural; repeated 'in the'; missing subject for 'makes easier' and wrong structure. Use no article with plural nouns, remove duplicate words, place 'in the margin' correctly, and use a relative clause 'which makes them easier to read.' Suggestion: check plurality and sentence connectors to avoid run-on sentences.

× When I'm studying for an exam, I need read em carefully.

✓ When I'm studying for an exam, I need to read them carefully.

Missing infinitive marker 'to' after 'need' when meaning requirement with verb: 'need to read'. Also 'em' is informal/slang for 'them'. Use 'them' in formal speech. Suggestion: use 'need to + verb' and standard pronouns.

× Also when I'm studying some textbooks I need to remember every detail so I read more carefully, but in some situation like reading some news.

✓ Also, when I'm studying textbooks I need to remember every detail, so I read more carefully, but in some situations, such as when reading the news, I do not.

Several issues: 'some textbooks' -> 'textbooks' (article/count); 'in some situation' should be plural 'in some situations'; 'reading some news' is unnatural; final clause lacks verb and is incomplete. Correct by making parallel structure and completing the idea: 'I do not' (read carefully). Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and complete sentences with verbs; use 'the news' for news items.

× I prefer detailed routing because it helps me to remember every single word later.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because it helps me remember every single word later.

Word 'routing' is incorrect; should be 'reading'. Also 'helps me to remember' is acceptable but 'helps me remember' is more natural. Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary and simplify infinitive usage.

× Especially when I'm preparing for an exam or I'm studying textbooks, it's really more useful method to read.

✓ Especially when I'm preparing for an exam or studying textbooks, it's a much more useful method of reading.

Missing article before 'method' ('a method'); awkward phrase 'really more useful' -> 'much more useful'; 'method to read' is awkward; use 'method of reading'. Suggestion: include appropriate articles and use idiomatic noun phrases like 'method of reading' or 'reading method.'

× Because books expand my knowledge and help me.

✓ Because books expand my knowledge and help me learn.

Sentence ends abruptly with 'help me' lacking an object or verb phrase; make it complete by adding 'learn' or similar. Suggestion: ensure clauses have complete verb complements.

× it makes easier to read.

✓ it makes them easier to read.

Missing object 'them' after 'makes' and comparative structure 'easier to read' needs an object; also referent must be clear. Suggestion: specify the object that becomes easier (the books/pages) and include it in the sentence.