Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two brief specific details with linking words. Reduce hesitations and filler words, and avoid repetition (e.g., 'I like' repeated).

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I often read fashion magazines for styling and home décor because they inspire my personal style, and as a medical student I also read medical textbooks to keep up with my coursework.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then briefly explain with a supporting reason using linking words. Remove filler sounds and repetition. Mention one contrasting situation for clarity.

例: I prefer reading on paper. For example, I find physical books easier for studying medical textbooks because I can annotate and concentrate better, though I sometimes use a screen for quick articles.

提案: Answer directly with a clear contrast and use linking words like 'whereas' or 'but'. Be specific about what careful reading involves and give a concise example. Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors.

例: I need to read carefully when studying for exams because I must understand concepts and remember details, whereas I only skim social media or magazines for general ideas and entertainment.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating both preferences, then give one specific example for each. Use linking words like 'for instance' and avoid trailing off. Correct grammar (e.g., 'prefer' not 'preferring').

例: I prefer detailed reading for study purposes because I need to understand and remember facts; however, I usually scan articles or casual reading when I’m relaxing to get the main ideas quickly.

× I like reading, especially I like fashion reading, uh, fashion magazine about the styling or home decor.

✓ I like reading, especially fashion magazines about styling or home decor.

The original is awkward and uses noun phrases incorrectly. Use the plural 'magazines' for general preference and remove the redundant 'I like' to make the sentence concise. 'Fashion magazines' is the correct noun phrase and 'about styling or home decor' properly modifies it. Suggestion: Use concise noun phrases and plural form for general likes (see also plural rules).

× And but also I'm, as a medical student, I uh, read a lot of uh, medical books.

✓ As a medical student, I also read a lot of medical books.

The original contains redundant conjunctions 'And but' and duplicate subjects ('I'm' and 'I'). Move the introductory phrase 'As a medical student' to the front and use 'also' to link ideas. Remove filler words. This fixes pronoun/subject redundancy and improves sentence flow. Suggestion: Start with the modifying phrase and avoid repeating the subject.

× I prefer to read on uh, paper, but uh, it depends on the uh, situation, umm, if I uh, have to read the medical, uh, related, uh, textbooks, I would prefer the uh, physical, uh, paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper, but it depends on the situation; if I have to read medical textbooks, I prefer physical paper.

Remove unnecessary 'the' before uncountable 'paper' and before 'medical textbooks.' 'Physical paper' is preferable to 'the physical paper' in this context. Also streamline phrasing and punctuation. Articles were used incorrectly and redundantly. Suggestion: Use no article with uncountable 'paper' when speaking generally and use plural 'textbooks' without 'the' for general category.

× Umm, when I prefer, I'm preferring my, uh, exams I need to take carefully and near more uh, concentrated while, uh, reading.

✓ When I prepare for exams, I need to read carefully and be more concentrated.

'I'm preferring' is incorrect because 'prefer' is a stative verb not normally used in continuous form. The phrase 'prepare for exams' fits the intended meaning. 'Need to take carefully' is wrong collocation; use 'read carefully.' 'Near more concentrated' is ungrammatical; use 'be more concentrated' or better 'concentrate more.' Suggestion: Use simple present for habits and stative verbs; use correct collocations like 'prepare for exams' and 'read carefully' or 'concentrate more.'

× And when I'm just uh, browsing the social media or the reading magazines, scanning magazines, I need not to be.

✓ When I'm just browsing social media or scanning magazines, I don't need to concentrate.

'The social media' and 'the reading magazines' misuse the definite article; use 'social media' and 'magazines' generally. 'I need not to be' is incorrect; in modern English use 'I don't need to' or 'I don't need to concentrate.' Also replace 'the reading magazines' with simpler 'scanning magazines.' Suggestion: Drop unnecessary articles with general nouns and use correct auxiliary negation 'do not/don't' plus infinitive.

× Uh, it depends on the situation. For example, if I'm, uh, preferring for exams, I need to be, uh, concentrated and understand the concepts clearly and remember the facts are and uh, if I'm uh, just spending my time.

✓ It depends on the situation. For example, if I'm preparing for exams, I need to concentrate, understand the concepts clearly, and remember the facts; but if I'm just spending my time, I scan casually.

Again, 'I'm preferring for exams' is incorrect for a stative verb; 'preparing for exams' expresses the intended meaning. Use 'concentrate' rather than 'be concentrated.' 'Remember the facts are' is ungrammatical; use 'remember the facts.' The sentence was incomplete; add a concluding clause such as 'I scan casually' to finish the thought. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms ('prepare for,' 'concentrate') and ensure sentences are complete with a main clause.