Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more accurate: state a concise topic sentence, correct grammar (singular/plural, article use), replace fillers ("umm") and explain why you enjoy fan fiction with a specific reason. Keep answer under 5 sentences and use linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, I really enjoy reading, especially fan fiction, because the plots are imaginative and often continue stories I love. For example, fanfic authors sometimes explore characters’ backstories in more depth, which makes reading more engaging in my free time.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and completeness: give a clear preference then explain a contrasting reason using linking words (however, but). Avoid sentence fragments and complete thoughts. Mention a specific habit or example.

例: I prefer reading on paper because it is easier on my eyes and helps me concentrate. However, because e-books are more convenient and I can carry many books on my phone, I usually read on a screen when I travel or commute.

提案: Make sentences concise and grammatically correct: state the situations directly, then give a brief reason and use linking words like "because" or "whereas." Replace fillers and fix verb forms.

例: I read carefully when I study for exams or handle work documents because accuracy matters and mistakes can have consequences. In contrast, I skim casual social media posts because they are informal and not important.

提案: Combine clarity and range: begin with a direct topic sentence, then give two clear contrasting examples with linking words (for example, whereas). Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and remove fillers.

例: It depends on the purpose: if the material is important, such as for exams or work, I read in detail to understand fully. Whereas for light content like humorous social media posts, I usually scan quickly to get the gist.

× Yes, I really like reading, especially fanfic type because their storyline and temple is great.

✓ Yes, I really like reading, especially fanfiction, because its storyline and tempo are great.

The student used 'fanfic type' (awkward noun phrase) and 'their' referring to a singular noun; 'fanfiction' is the proper noun, and 'its' agrees with the singular noun (subject-verb agreement/possessive). 'Temple' was likely a misspelling of 'tempo' or 'temple' is incorrect; 'tempo' (pace) fits context. Also use 'are' for plural 'storyline and tempo' contrasts with singular verb. Suggestion: use precise nouns and ensure possessive pronoun matches the noun in number.

× UMM make me feel enjoyable in my leisure time.

✓ It makes me feel happy in my leisure time.

The original lacks a clear subject and uses 'enjoyable' (an adjective) where a verb phrase or adjective describing the person is needed. Use 'It makes me feel happy' or 'I enjoy it in my leisure time.' Also add subject 'It' and conjugate the verb to third person singular 'makes.' Suggestion: include a subject and choose correct adjective/adverb to describe feelings.

× Actually, I prefer to read on paper rather than on screen because I'm aware of damage to my eyes.

✓ Actually, I prefer to read on paper rather than on a screen because I'm aware of the damage to my eyes.

Missing article before 'screen' and before 'damage'—use 'a screen' and 'the damage' for specific concept. This is an article error that affects noun phrase clarity. Suggestion: include appropriate articles: 'on a screen' and 'the damage.'

× But due to technology advancement now I'm usually read it on screen because it.

✓ But due to technological advancement, I usually read on a screen now because it is more convenient.

Multiple issues: adjective form 'technological' needed rather than noun 'technology' modifying 'advancement'; wrong word order 'I'm usually read it' (auxiliary misuse) should be 'I usually read'; unnecessary 'it' after read; sentence fragment 'because it' lacks completion — add 'is more convenient.' Suggestion: use correct adjective forms, correct verb phrase order (subject + usually + base verb), and complete conjunction clauses.

× I usually read carefully when I'm taking an examination and working uh something that's serious.

✓ I usually read carefully when I'm taking an examination or working on something serious.

Use 'or' instead of 'and' to list alternative situations; include preposition 'on' before 'something'; remove filler 'uh' and unnecessary 'that's.' Suggestion: use correct conjunctions and prepositions and remove fillers in formal speech.

× But if it just some playful comment on social network I will not read carefully as.

✓ But if it's just a playful comment on social media, I will not read it carefully.

Missing auxiliary 'is' in 'it's'; missing article 'a' before 'playful comment'; 'social network' should be 'social media'; need object 'it' after 'read'; trailing 'as' is extraneous. Suggestion: include auxiliary verbs and articles, and ensure full object and correct noun choice.

× As I mentioned before, it depend on how serious information I want to read it.

✓ As I mentioned before, it depends on how serious the information I want to read is.

Subject-verb agreement: 'depend' should be 'depends' to agree with singular subject 'it.' Also word order for 'how serious the information I want to read is' places 'is' at the end; alternative: 'how serious the information I want to read is' or 'how serious the information is that I want to read.' Suggestion: ensure verbs agree with subjects and form complete relative clauses.

× If uh it's for examination and working or serious thing I will detail reading.

✓ If it's for an examination, work, or something serious, I will read in detail.

Missing articles: 'an examination' and 'something serious.' 'working' as a noun is awkward — use 'work.' 'detail reading' is incorrect word order; use 'read in detail' or 'do detailed reading.' Suggestion: use correct noun forms and prepositional phrase 'in detail.'

× But if it's just funny comment on social network, I prefer scanning.

✓ But if it's just a funny comment on social media, I prefer scanning.

Missing article 'a' before 'funny comment' and use 'social media' rather than 'social network.' Suggestion: include articles and use standard collocations.