Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is inappropriate in tone and contains offensive language; it also lacks a clear topic sentence and relevant details. Begin with a direct response, avoid slang or insults, and add one or two specific reasons or examples. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences) and natural.

例: Yes, I enjoy reading. I especially like non-fiction books because they help me learn new things and understand the world better. For example, I recently read a book about psychology that taught me practical techniques for improving concentration.

提案: Good direct response and clear preference. To improve, add a brief reason and a specific example using a linking word (e.g., 'because', 'for example'). This will make your answer more complete and natural.

例: I definitely prefer to read on paper because it's easier on my eyes and I can annotate pages by hand. For example, when I study, I highlight important passages and write notes in the margins.

提案: The answer is vague, hesitates, and doesn't address both parts of the question. Start with a clear topic sentence that contrasts the two situations, use linking words to organize your ideas, and give specific examples of when careful reading is needed and when skimming is acceptable.

例: I need to read carefully when I study for exams or when I read technical instructions because accuracy is important. However, I don't read carefully when I'm browsing news headlines or social media, since I just want a quick overview.

提案: You stated a preference but repeated yourself and gave no supporting detail. Provide a concise topic sentence, then give one or two reasons and an example, using linking words to connect ideas. Avoid repetition and keep it under five sentences.

例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand nuances and retain information. For instance, when I read academic articles I take my time to analyze arguments and make notes, which helps me remember key points.

× I like reading that nerd ****. Let me say, I like learning new things.

✓ I like reading. Let me say I enjoy learning new things.

The original sentence contains an inappropriate phrase and unclear pronoun/reference. The phrase 'that nerd ****' is not grammatical and is inappropriate; removing it clarifies meaning. Also 'I like reading that nerd ****.' mixes object reference incorrectly. Suggest using a simple, direct statement: 'I like reading.' and connect to the next idea with 'Let me say I enjoy learning new things.' This fixes pronoun/reference and improves clarity.

× I definitely prefer to read on paper, it's much easier for me.

✓ I definitely prefer to read on paper because it's much easier for me.

The original contains a comma splice (two independent clauses joined only by a comma). This is a sentence structure error (list ID 26) and can be fixed by using a conjunction such as 'because' to show reason, or replacing the comma with a semicolon or period. Using 'because' makes the relationship explicit and maintains correct grammar.

× I mean, so whenever I try to read I I I can focus on reading it anyway, so.

✓ I mean, whenever I try to read I can focus on it anyway.

The original has repeated filler words ('I I I') and an extraneous trailing 'so', making it ungrammatical and awkward. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Removing repetitions and the extra 'so' yields a clear sentence. Also replacing 'reading it' with 'it' avoids redundancy.

× I prefer to read carefully all the time. Yeah, I prefer.

✓ I prefer to read carefully all the time.

The short second part 'Yeah, I prefer.' is redundant and incomplete. This is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Removing the redundant fragment keeps the sentence concise and grammatically correct. If emphasis is needed, use 'Yes, I do.' which is a complete response.