Reading— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like reading. Avoid fillers and unclear fragments; use one or two supporting reasons with linking words. Keep answers under five sentences and ensure grammar is correct (e.g., "I don't read much" rather than "I don't like writing reading").

例: I don't read very much. However, I enjoy reading sometimes because it gives me new ideas and helps me relax. For example, I like short stories before bed because they help me fall asleep. Overall, reading is useful but not my main hobby.

提案: Answer clearly and provide specific, coherent reasons with correct grammar. Use linking words (because, therefore, for example) and avoid repetition. Mention one or two concrete examples of when screen reading is better.

例: I prefer reading on a screen because I have some eyesight problems and can enlarge the text. For example, I read messages and articles on my phone where I can zoom in easily. Therefore, screens are more comfortable and convenient for me.

提案: Be concise and structured: give a clear topic sentence, then two contrasting examples with linking words (for example, however). Correct grammar (e.g., "when my friend messages me I don't read carefully"), and use specific details about what makes something important.

例: It depends on the situation. For example, I read carefully when I receive emails from my teacher or official messages because they contain important instructions. However, when a friend texts me casually, I usually skim because the content is informal and less critical.

提案: Provide a clear statement and specific reasons with examples. Eliminate filler words, use linking phrases (because, for example) and correct grammar (e.g., "detailed reading" not "detail reading"). Explain what you do during detailed reading vs scanning.

例: It depends on the material. I prefer detailed reading when the content is important, for example for a project, because I need to understand concepts and instructions clearly. However, for news headlines or casual posts I usually scan to get the main idea quickly.

× To be honest, not uh that much.

✓ To be honest, not that much.

Remove the filler 'uh' which interrupts the sentence structure. The phrase 'not that much' is sufficient. Suggestion: pause briefly instead of saying 'uh'.

× I like reading because when I read so I have thoughts I and also more and however, I was like a sleepover so and writing board for me.

✓ I like reading because it makes me think and sometimes I imagine scenes; however, I prefer sleepovers and whiteboards to writing.

Original is fragmented and contains unclear connectors like 'so' and 'and' used incorrectly. Reorganize into clear clauses: state reason, add contrast with 'however', and use parallel structure. Suggestion: plan the sentence before speaking: reason + example + contrast.

× So I don't like writing reading.

✓ So I don't like reading aloud or writing very much.

Ambiguity and missing words create confusion. Clarify whether they mean 'reading aloud' or 'writing'. Use parallel nouns or gerunds. Suggestion: choose precise verbs and include objects.

× I prefer to read on screen because in paper it could be challenging for me and also I have some eyesight issue.

✓ I prefer to read on a screen because reading on paper can be challenging for me and I have some eyesight issues.

Use correct prepositions: 'on a screen' and 'on paper' (or 'reading on paper'). Use plural 'issues' for general condition. Also replace 'could' with 'can' for habitual truth. Suggestion: use 'on a screen' and 'reading on paper' and pluralize medical conditions.

× However, reading on screen give me a satisfaction and I so I can see close like I prefer close something for example on messages.

✓ However, reading on a screen gives me satisfaction because I can zoom in; for example, I prefer to read messages closely.

Subject 'reading on a screen' is singular, so verb should be 'gives'. 'a satisfaction' is unnatural; use 'satisfaction'. Clarify 'see close' to 'zoom in' or 'read closely'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number and use natural collocations.

× Actually it depends on situation.

✓ Actually, it depends on the situation.

Missing article 'the' before 'situation' and missing comma after 'Actually'. Use 'the situation' for a specific context. Suggestion: include articles with 'situation' when referring to a specific context.

× For example, when I have some e-mail or something important from my teacher so I read carefully.

✓ For example, when I receive an important email from my teacher, I read it carefully.

Use 'receive' instead of 'have', 'email' without a hyphen is standard, and include object 'it'. Remove unnecessary 'so'. Suggestion: use clear verb 'receive' and include commas.

× In contrast when my friend message text me so I can not read carefully because I don't know she's like what telling to me.

✓ In contrast, when my friend messages or texts me, I cannot read carefully because I don't understand what she is trying to tell me.

Need third person singular 'messages', 'texts', and correct negative form 'cannot'. Original has incorrect word order 'she's like what telling to me' — should be 'what she is trying to tell me'. Suggestion: use proper verb forms and standard clause order.

× Uh, it also it depends on situation, but uh, when something is more important, so I want to detail reading, but uh, when something is not so I prefer scanning.

✓ It also depends on the situation, but when something is more important, I want to do detailed reading; when it is not, I prefer scanning.

Remove redundant 'it'. Add article 'the' before 'situation'. Use 'detailed reading' or 'read in detail' rather than 'detail reading'. Fix clause connectors and avoid 'so' between clauses. Suggestion: practice concise clauses and correct noun forms.

× For example, when I have project, so I prefer detailed reading.

✓ For example, when I have a project, I prefer detailed reading.

Add article 'a' before 'project' and remove unnecessary 'so'. Ensure subject-verb completeness. Suggestion: include articles and omit filler conjunctions.

× So like in project what concepts are?

✓ For example, in a project I want to understand what the main concepts are.

Original is a fragment and inverted word order typical of question; reframe as statement to fit context. Add article 'a' and complete clause 'I want to understand' plus subject 'the main concepts'. Suggestion: form full sentences rather than short fragments when explaining reasons.