Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, um), and give 1–2 brief supporting details with linking words. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., relax, unwind) and correct grammar (e.g., "it depends on my mood").

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I often change them depending on my mood; recently I have been relaxing on the sofa to unwind after work, watching short videos or reading when I feel like it.

提案: Answer directly and fix tense and grammar errors. Use linking words to explain reasons and be specific about activities. Replace vague phrases with clearer ones (e.g., "limited access to technology").

例: Yes. When I was a child, we had limited access to technology, so on weekends I enjoyed playing computer games at home, especially simple puzzle and platform games.

提案: Begin with a clear statement that you still have the hobby. Use correct tense and clearer expressions (e.g., "imagining things that don't exist"). Add a specific detail about what you draw and why it appeals to you, using a linking word.

例: Yes, I have continued drawing since childhood. I enjoy sketching imaginary scenes and characters because it lets me be creative and escape into a world of my own; for example, I often draw fantasy landscapes and creatures.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer. Correct grammar (e.g., "one year older"). Use linking words to explain how your relationship influences shared hobbies and give a specific example of games or activities you play together.

例: Yes, I share hobbies with my brother. He is one year older and we are very close, so we often play video games together; for instance, we enjoy cooperative adventure games on weekends because they are fun and help us bond.

× Yes I do and uh, I sometimes change my hobby just uh, depends on my mood and uh, recently I like to just lie on the sofa and uh, don't think anything.

✓ Yes, I do. I sometimes change my hobbies depending on my mood, and recently I like to lie on the sofa and not think about anything.

Errors: 'change my hobby' should be plural 'change my hobbies' when speaking generally (Singular and plural issue). 'depends on my mood' is a clause needing a subject and verb form 'depending on my mood' or 'it depends on my mood' (Sentence structure/present tense issue). 'don't think anything' is incorrect collocation; use 'not think about anything'. Suggestion: use gerund phrase 'depending on' for reason and 'not think about anything' for negation with verb 'think'.

× Yes, actually, because when I was a child we don't have a any technical services, so I would like to play the computer in my house at the weekend.

✓ Yes, actually, because when I was a child we didn't have any technical services, so I liked to play on the computer at home on weekends.

Errors: 'we don't have' should be past tense 'we didn't have' to match 'when I was a child' (Past tense issue). 'a any' is redundant article + determiner (Article errors). 'play the computer' is incorrect verb-preposition collocation; use 'play on the computer' (Incorrect use of prepositions). 'in my house at the weekend' is more natural as 'at home on weekends' or 'at home at the weekend'; tense and habitual past suggests 'liked'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently and use correct prepositions and articles.

× Yes, I think drawing is my continuing habit because I really love to draw on the paper and enjoy the time when I was image something that didn't really exist.

✓ Yes, I think drawing is a continuing hobby because I really love to draw on paper and enjoy imagining things that don't really exist.

Errors: 'my continuing habit' is awkward; use 'a continuing hobby' or 'a long-standing hobby' (Incorrect use of adjectives/nouns). 'draw on the paper' should be 'draw on paper' (Article errors). 'enjoy the time when I was image something' mixes tenses and wrong verb form; use 'enjoy imagining things' (Verb + -ing form). 'that didn't really exist' conflicts with present enjoyment; use present 'that don't really exist' to match 'I enjoy'. Suggestion: use 'imagining' and keep tense consistent.

× Yes, because I have a brother and he was just older than me, one years old and we are very close like friend so we usually play like video games and umm computer together and it is very fun.

✓ Yes, because I have a brother who is one year older than me and we are very close, like friends, so we usually play video games and use the computer together and it's very fun.

Errors: 'he was just older than me, one years old' mixes tense and number; use present 'who is one year older than me' and correct singular 'year' (Singular and plural issue, Present tense issue). 'like friend' should be plural 'like friends' (Incorrect use of nouns/adjectives). 'play like video games and umm computer' is awkward; use 'play video games and use the computer' (Incorrect use of verbs/prepositions). Suggestion: keep tense consistent, correct singular/plural, and use clear verbs for activities.