Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct topic sentence that names at least one hobby, then briefly add one specific detail. Avoid one-word answers and add natural phrasing. Use up to 3–4 short sentences and a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy playing football and reading novels. For example, I usually play football with friends twice a week, which helps me stay fit.

提案: Correct tense and grammar, and make the response more natural by using a clear topic sentence plus specific examples. Use linking words (for example, and, also) and correct past tense verbs.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I read a lot of storybooks and watched cartoons. For example, I loved reading fairy tales and watching animated shows on weekends.

提案: Remove fillers (uh, yeah) and correct phrasing to sound natural. Start with a topic sentence, give a reason or brief detail, and use a linking word to expand (because, so). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I've played football since I was a child. I started playing at school and continued because I enjoy the teamwork and exercise.

提案: Answer directly and provide a brief explanation or contrast. Correct grammar (use full sentence: I don't) and add one or two specific details why your hobbies differ. Use a linking word like however or but.

例: No, I don't. My family prefers quieter activities like gardening and reading, but I like more active hobbies such as football and cycling.

× When I was child I have a few hobbies like I read books, I like to watch cartoons.

✓ When I was a child, I had a few hobbies, like reading books and watching cartoons.

This sentence has multiple issues: missing article before 'child' (use 'a child') and tense inconsistency (question asked in past; use past 'had' instead of 'have'). Also verbs listing hobbies should use gerunds after 'like' ('reading', 'watching') and coordinate items with 'and'. Add commas for clarity. Suggestion: add the article 'a', use past tense 'had', and use gerunds for activities.

× Uh, yeah, I have a hobby. I love to play football. Uh, it's my hobby since my childhood.

✓ Uh, yeah, I have a hobby. I love playing football. It's been my hobby since childhood.

The phrase 'since my childhood' requires a present perfect tense to show duration up to now: 'has been' or 'it's been'. Also 'love to play' is acceptable but 'love playing' is more natural. Omit 'my' before 'childhood' for common usage. Suggestion: use present perfect ('has been' / 'it's been') to express an action or state continuing from the past to present.

× Actually I don't have.

✓ Actually, I don't.

The original 'Actually I don't have.' is incomplete because 'have' is a transitive verb here and needs an object (have what?). The expected short answer to 'Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?' is 'I don't' or 'No, I don't.' Use 'I don't' to mean 'I don't have the same hobbies.' Add a comma after 'Actually' for clarity. Suggestion: use the short negative form 'I don't' or a full sentence 'No, I don't have the same hobbies.'