Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and grammatical errors, use linking words and give one specific example. Aim for 2–4 concise sentences. For example, say what you read, why you enjoy it, and mention a specific instance of reading with friends.

例: I enjoy reading books, especially novels and popular science. I find them useful because they expand my knowledge and improve my thinking. For example, last weekend my friends and I read a short novel together and discussed its themes over coffee.

提案: Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence, correct grammar and use linking words to add one specific detail or memory. Avoid vague phrases and keep it coherent and concise.

例: When I was a child I liked exploring the neighborhood with my friends. We would walk or cycle around every afternoon, talking about our day and playing games, which kept me active and made childhood very social.

提案: Give a clear statement that the hobby continued, use correct tense, reduce repetition, and provide a specific reason or example of how the hobby stayed with you. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I have continued reading since childhood. I still read novels, especially romance and literary fiction, because they move me emotionally and help me relax; for example, I read a romance novel every month and often discuss characters with friends.

提案: Answer directly and correct sentence structure and word choice. Mention a specific shared activity and give one clear example of a discussion or book you both enjoyed. Avoid unclear names or fragments.

例: Yes, my mother also loves reading, so we often read the same books and meet on weekends to discuss them. For instance, we both recently read a popular novel by John Bowen and spent an afternoon talking about its characters and themes.

× My hobby I like the most is reading books.

✓ The hobby I like the most is reading books.

The original sentence uses an incorrect word order by placing 'My hobby' before the relative clause. Remove the redundant possessive 'My' and use 'The hobby I like the most' to create a natural English noun phrase. Suggestion: Use the structure 'The hobby I like the most is...' or 'My favorite hobby is...'.

× I usually read novel or science book.

✓ I usually read novels or science books.

Countable nouns require plural forms when speaking generally. 'Novel' and 'science book' should be plural to indicate general reading habits. Suggestion: Use plural forms for general statements: 'novels' and 'science books'.

× I think it's very, umm, useful. And, uh, happily.

✓ I think it's very useful and makes me happy.

'Happily' is an adverb and does not correctly describe the feeling caused by reading. Use the adjective 'happy' or a clause 'makes me happy' to express emotion. Also combine short fragments into one coherent sentence. Suggestion: Replace 'happily' with 'happy' or 'it makes me happy'.

× And I also read with my friends at the weekend.

✓ I also read with my friends on the weekend.

American English commonly uses 'on the weekend' while British English uses 'at the weekend'. Choose one variety; here 'on the weekend' is corrected. If British English is intended, 'at the weekend' is also acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'on the weekend' (American) or keep 'at the weekend' (British) consistently.

× When I was a child, my hobbies is circling around my neighborhood with my friends and we can talk together about our days and it's very exciting.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was walking around my neighborhood with my friends; we could talk about our days, and it was very exciting.

Multiple issues: 'hobbies is' is incorrect subject-verb agreement ('hobbies' with 'is'). Also 'circling around' is awkward; 'walking around' is natural. Use past tense 'was' and 'could' to match 'when I was a child'. 'It's very exciting' should be past 'it was very exciting.' Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent past tense for past events.

× It also help me improve the physical health and we can discussing about many topic.

✓ It also helped improve my physical health, and we could discuss many topics.

Pronoun and verb errors: 'help' should be past 'helped' to match past tense. 'Improve the physical health' is awkward—use 'improve my physical health.' 'We can discussing' mixes modal + gerund incorrectly; use 'we could discuss.' 'Many topic' needs plural 'topics.' Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and match plural forms; use 'helped' and 'discuss many topics.'

× Yes, the hobby I have until now is I think it's my reading books I can read.

✓ Yes, the hobby I have now is reading books.

The original sentence is wordy and ungrammatical: 'the hobby I have until now is I think it's my reading books I can read' mixes tenses and redundant clauses. Simplify to 'the hobby I have now is reading books.' Suggestion: Use concise structure: 'The hobby I have now is...' or 'I've had since childhood: reading books.'

× I usually reading novels, book or romantic.

✓ I usually read novels, books, or romances.

'I usually reading' is incorrect; after 'usually' use the base verb 'read.' 'Book or romantic' are incorrect noun/adjective choices—use 'books' and 'romances' (or 'romantic novels'). Suggestion: Use 'I usually read novels, books, or romantic novels.'

× I feel so touching or memorizing.

✓ I feel very moved or deeply absorbed.

'Touching' and 'memorizing' are not natural to describe the reader's feelings. Use 'moved' for emotional response and 'absorbed' or 'engrossed' for strong interest. 'Memorizing' is incorrect in this context (it means causing someone to memorize). Suggestion: Use idiomatic adjectives: 'moved,' 'touched,' 'engrossed,' or phrases like 'it moves me' or 'it stays in my memory.'

× Also it's very relaxing with my friends.

✓ Also, it's very relaxing to read with my friends.

The original lacks clarity: 'relaxing with my friends' could mean being relaxed together, but here the activity 'to read with my friends' should be specified. Use the infinitive phrase 'to read with my friends' or 'reading with my friends is very relaxing.' Suggestion: Specify the activity: 'Reading with my friends is very relaxing.'

× Yes, my mother also adores reading books and we also reach together at the weekend and we can discuss many topic we have read ever it's very.

✓ Yes, my mother also adores reading books. We also read together on the weekend, and we can discuss many topics we have read; it's great.

Multiple issues: 'reach together' is incorrect — should be 'read together.' 'Topic' needs plural 'topics.' 'We have read ever it's very' is ungrammatical; replace with 'we have read' and a concluding comment like 'it's great.' Ensure verbs match subjects: 'my mother adores' is correct but sentence needed splitting for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'read together on the weekend' and 'discuss many topics we have read.' Keep sentences concise and use proper verb forms.

× we also reach together at the weekend

✓ we also read together on the weekend

'reach together' is a wrong verb; 'read together' is intended. Also use 'on the weekend' (American) or 'at the weekend' (British) consistently. Suggestion: Replace 'reach' with 'read' and choose the appropriate preposition for 'weekend.'

× and we can discuss many topic we have read ever it's very.

✓ and we can discuss many topics we have read; it's very enjoyable.

'Topic' should be plural 'topics.' 'Ever it's very' is ungrammatical; use 'it's very enjoyable' or 'it's great.' Suggestion: Use complete clauses and plural nouns: 'discuss many topics we have read' and finish with a clear adjective like 'enjoyable.'