Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence naming your main hobbies, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases (e.g., “many heart rates,” “playing switch”). Pronunciation and vocabulary choice need attention: use correct nouns (e.g., Nintendo Switch) and verbs (e.g., play, read, exercise).

例: I have a few hobbies. First, I enjoy playing badminton and I play at a local club twice a week. I also like reading comic novels, especially light comedies, because they help me relax. Additionally, I sometimes exercise with friends at the gym, which keeps me fit.

提案: Answer directly and finish sentences clearly. Use a topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did”). Use linking words to list activities and give specific details (how often, who with, where). Correct grammar and sentence completion are important.

例: Yes, I did. As a child, I often hung out with my friends and we usually played basketball at the local court every weekend. I also enjoyed dancing with my friends in after-school clubs, which helped me become more confident on stage.

提案: Provide a clear, structured response: name the hobby you have had since childhood, then give specific supporting information (when you started, how often you practise, achievements). Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g., “it's 21 is dancing,” “long badminton player”).

例: Yes, I have. I have loved dancing since I was a child and started taking classes at age seven. I continued dancing through high school and performed in several school shows. I also played badminton competitively in elementary school, but dancing remained my main hobby.

提案: Answer clearly with a direct statement, then give one or two specific details comparing you and family (who, when, level of involvement). Avoid incomplete sentences and vague endings. Use linking words like “because” or “so” to show cause or continuity.

例: Yes, we share similar hobbies. My older sisters and I played badminton together in elementary school, and we even joined the school’s semi‑competitive team. Because of that shared interest, we practised regularly and encouraged each other to improve.

× Yes I do, I have many heart rates.

✓ Yes, I do. I have many hobbies.

The student used 'heart rates' incorrectly; context asks about hobbies. This is a word choice error that manifests as a noun error resembling a singular/plural issue. Replace with the plural noun 'hobbies' to match the question and meaning. Also add appropriate punctuation and capitalization.

× Umm first I realized playing badminton and also I like to read comedies and playing playing switch.

✓ First, I started playing badminton. I also like to read comic books and play Nintendo Switch.

The original mixes tenses and gerunds incorrectly and repeats 'playing'. 'Realized' is incorrect for starting an activity; use 'started' (past) or simple present 'I play badminton' depending on intended meaning. Use consistent parallel structure: 'like to read' and 'play'. Clarify 'comedies' to 'comic books' or 'comedy books' depending on intended meaning; here 'comic books' is plausible. Remove duplicate word and fix punctuation.

× Sometimes I like to do exercise with my friends and that's it.

✓ Sometimes I like to exercise with my friends, and that's it.

'Do exercise' is awkward; use the verb 'exercise' (present tense) without 'do'. Add a comma for clarity. The tense 'like to exercise' correctly expresses habitual activity.

× When I was a child, I liked to hang out with my friends we usually went to basketball court to play it and I also like to dance with my friends we.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to hang out with my friends. We usually went to the basketball court to play, and I also liked to dance with them.

Run-on sentence with mixed tenses and missing articles. Use past tense 'liked' and 'went' for childhood activities. Add the definite article 'the' before 'basketball court'. Replace 'play it' with 'play' and change 'I also like' to past 'I also liked' to maintain tense consistency. Replace final 'we' with 'them' to refer to friends correctly.

× Yes I have one, uh no sorry it's 21 is dancing.

✓ Yes I have one. Sorry, it's dancing that I've done since I was 21.

Confusing structure and wrong pronoun/number '21 is dancing'. Clarify meaning: if they mean they have danced since age 21, rephrase to 'I've been dancing since I was 21' or 'It's dancing; I started at 21.' Ensure subject and verb agree and use a clear time expression.

× I was a dancer when I was in high school and I was a long badminton player when I was in elementary school.

✓ I was a dancer in high school, and I played badminton for a long time when I was in elementary school.

Awkward phrase 'a long badminton player' is incorrect. Use 'played badminton for a long time' to indicate duration. Maintain past tense for completed activities. Use commas for clarity.

× Just two hobbies are my favorites. I really into this too.

✓ Those two hobbies are my favorites. I'm really into them too.

'Just two hobbies are my favorites' is grammatically odd; 'Those two hobbies are my favorites' is natural. 'I really into this' lacks the verb 'am' and uses 'this' instead of plural 'them'. Add the verb and correct pronoun.

× Yes, my older sisters also played badminton when we were in elementary school.

✓ Yes, my older sisters also played badminton when they were in elementary school.

If the sisters are older, saying 'we were in elementary school' is inconsistent; either include the speaker if they were together or use 'they' if the sisters were in elementary school earlier. Choose based on intended meaning. Keep past tense 'played.'

× We were badminton players in the semi school team and.

✓ We were on the junior school badminton team.

'Semi school team' is unclear. Likely meant 'school team' or 'junior school team'. Use 'on the ... team' for idiomatic English and remove the trailing 'and'.

× From then on, we started.

✓ From then on, we continued playing.

'We started' is incomplete and unclear without an object; specify what was started or continued. If referring to continuing the hobby, 'we continued playing' or 'we kept practicing' is clearer.