Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then briefly list 2–3 main hobbies using parallel structure. Avoid repetition of the word "playing" and unnecessary phrases like "in ground."

例: Yes, I have several hobbies. I enjoy cricket, badminton and video games. I usually play cricket and badminton with friends at the local ground, and I play video games at home to relax.

提案: Use past tense consistently and be specific about the activity. Clarify unclear phrases (e.g., "223 horse" is confusing). Keep answer to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "also" correctly.

例: Yes, I loved playing cricket as a child. I used to go to the local ground every day and play matches with my friends, which I really enjoyed. It was my favorite pastime.

提案: Speak more fluently and avoid hesitation. Give a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail about continuity (how long and why). Use past and present tense correctly: "have had" or "have loved since childhood."

例: Yes, I have had a hobby since childhood — cricket. I have loved playing cricket since I was young because it kept me active and allowed me to bond with friends.

提案: Make the answer clearer and more natural. State directly whether your family shares your hobbies, then give one brief reason and an example. Avoid awkward phrases like "did not feel my hobbies."

例: No, my family doesn't share my hobbies. They prefer focusing on studies rather than sports, so they often encouraged me to study instead of going out to play cricket with friends.

× Yes, I have many hobbies, just like playing video games or playing cricket in ground or playing badminton or playing football.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, such as playing video games, playing cricket on the ground, playing badminton, and playing football.

The original sentence has plural/wording issues and incorrect preposition. Use 'such as' to list examples. Use the plural 'hobbies' is correct, but 'in ground' is wrong preposition; use 'on the ground' or simply 'at the ground'. Also separate items with commas and include 'and' before the last item for clarity.

× Yes I have a hobby to play play cricket in child.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby of playing cricket as a child.

The sentence mixes present tense with a past-time expression. Use past tense 'had' and correct verb form 'playing'. 'in child' is incorrect; use 'as a child'. Also remove duplicate 'play'.

× I also go to the ground daily and play 223 horse in the ground with my friends and I really enjoy it.

✓ I also went to the ground daily and played a game called '223 Horse' there with my friends, and I really enjoyed it.

Talking about childhood hobbies requires past tense: change 'go' and 'play' to 'went' and 'played', and 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed'. Clarify the game name and use 'there' or 'on the ground' rather than repeating 'in the ground'.

× It's my favorite hobby.

✓ It was my favorite hobby.

This sentence refers to a childhood hobby, so use past tense 'was' instead of present 'is' to match the time frame.

× And yes, I have a, a hobby that I my favorite hobby is cricket, which I love since, uh, childhood. I want, uh, but I don't know. I.

✓ Yes, my favorite hobby is cricket, which I have loved since childhood.

The original is fragmented and repetitive. Combine ideas into a single clear sentence, use present perfect 'have loved since' to indicate a hobby continuing from childhood to present. Remove filler words and incomplete clauses.

× No, my family members, uh, did not have any hobby that I love.

✓ No, my family members did not share the hobby that I love.

The original uses awkward phrasing 'have any hobby that I love'. Use 'share the hobby' to show other people also enjoy it. Maintain past or present consistently depending on context; here 'did not share' or 'do not share' both acceptable; use 'did not share' if referring to past.

× My family members did not feel my hobbies.

✓ My family members did not approve of my hobbies.

'Feel my hobbies' is incorrect. Likely intended meaning is they did not approve or did not like them; use 'approve of' or 'like'. Also keep past tense 'did not approve' if referring to past attitudes.

× They only say to me that I would study and did not go to play my hobby.

✓ They only told me to study and not to play my hobbies.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect modal phrasing. Use 'told me to study' and 'not to play my hobbies' for reported speech. 'Would study' is inappropriate here; 'told me to study' is clearer.