Hobby— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (no extra articles/plural errors), and use linking words to list hobbies. Give one or two specific details (how long you’ve studied piano, what you enjoy about ice skating). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I have two main hobbies. I take piano lessons once a week and have been learning for two years, which I enjoy because it helps me relax. I also go ice skating every Friday at a nearby rink, mainly for exercise and to meet friends.

提案: Answer directly and provide a clear, concise explanation. Use past tense consistently and give a specific detail about the hobby (events you did or how often you trained). Avoid vague phrases like “I made a professional sport.”

例: Yes, I did. As a child I trained in track and field, mainly sprinting and long jump, and I practiced three times a week at my school. I even competed in local meets, which helped me stay disciplined and fit.

提案: Be brief and clear. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Explain why you no longer continue the childhood hobby and mention what you do now instead. Use linking words like “because” or “so” appropriately.

例: No, I don’t. I stopped pursuing track and field as a hobby because I trained professionally as a child. Now I still exercise, but I focus on recreational activities like piano and ice skating instead.

提案: Answer directly and organize your response. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Explain briefly how your situation differs from your family’s and give one specific example (e.g., family works long hours, so they don’t have time for hobbies).

例: No, my family members don’t share my hobbies. They work long hours and rarely have free time, whereas I am currently free and can take piano lessons and go ice skating on Fridays.

× Yes I have a hobbies, I get piano course lesson and also I go every Friday to make a ice skating sport.

✓ Yes, I have a hobby. I take piano lessons and I go ice skating every Friday.

The sentence has multiple article and noun-number errors: 'a hobbies' should be 'a hobby' (singular) or 'hobbies' (no 'a'); 'piano course lesson' is awkward—use 'piano lessons' or 'a piano course'; 'make a ice skating sport' is incorrect collocation and article use—say 'go ice skating'. Suggestion: choose correct singular/plural nouns and common collocations (take lessons, go ice skating).

× So they're my about two hobbies and I love them.

✓ So those are my two hobbies and I love them.

'They're my about two hobbies' mixes contraction and incorrect word order. Use 'those are' to refer to previously mentioned items, and 'about' should be omitted or placed before number ('about two hobbies'). Suggestion: use clear demonstrative 'those' and correct placement of 'about' if approximate number is intended.

× Yeah, I had a hobby when I was a child. It was track and field. I made a professional sport, so my hobby was track and field.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child. It was track and field. I did it professionally, so my hobby was track and field.

'I made a professional sport' is incorrect verb choice and tense. Use 'did it professionally' or 'was a professional athlete' to indicate professional involvement in the past. Suggestion: use 'did' or 'was' with 'professionally' to describe past professional activity.

× No, unfortunately. Unfortunately no because when I was child I make it professional sport. Now I made also sport but it's a as a home base so there is no hobby what I do since my childhood.

✓ No, unfortunately. When I was a child I did it professionally. Now I still do sports at home, so I don't have a hobby that I have kept since childhood.

Multiple tense and grammar errors: 'when I was child' needs article 'a child'; 'I make it professional sport' should be past 'I did it professionally'; 'Now I made also sport' wrong tense—use 'I still do sports'; 'it's a as a home base' is unclear—use 'at home'; 'there is no hobby what I do since my childhood' should be 'I don't have a hobby that I have kept since childhood.' Suggestion: use correct past tense for past actions and present simple for current routines; use relative clause 'that I have kept' for continuity.

× No, I don't have a hobby, say my family member member because members because they're work works a lot, They are work a lot and me, I don't have a work now, so I have more time to get some hobby and they're just working.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because they work a lot. They are working, and I don't have a job now, so I have more time to take up hobbies while they are busy.

Pronoun and noun errors: 'say my family member member' is unclear; use 'the same hobbies as my family members'. 'They're work works a lot' wrong verb form—use 'they work a lot' or 'they are working a lot'. 'Me, I don't have a work' should be 'I don't have a job'. 'Get some hobby' is unnatural—use 'take up hobbies'. Suggestion: use proper plural 'family members', correct verb forms, and natural collocations like 'take up a hobby' or 'take up hobbies'.