Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., “I love connecting with them”), and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me stay connected. For example, they often tell me about college events or trips, so I don’t miss important plans.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then specific categories with linking words. Use correct pronouns and tense, and avoid vague fillers like “uh” or “around there.”

例: We usually talk about our health, work or studies, and current events. For instance, I often ask how someone is feeling and whether they have any news at work.

提案: Give a clear preference and explain why with one or two concise reasons. Remove hesitations and unclear phrases (e.g., “in crypto”). Use linking words like “however” or “because.”

例: I prefer both depending on the situation. However, I talk one-on-one with close friends because conversations are more personal, while group chats are good for planning events.

提案: Answer directly with a clear choice and give specific reasons. Correct grammar and replace unclear terms (e.g., “MP2”) with “in person.” Use linking words such as “because” or “so.”

例: It depends on distance: I prefer face-to-face communication with nearby friends because it feels more personal, but I use social media to stay in touch with friends who live far away.

提案: Respond succinctly with a topic sentence, then give a specific example and a linking word to explain the reason for arguments. Avoid repetition and hesitations; use correct tense and pronouns.

例: Sometimes we do argue because we have different opinions. For example, we might disagree about where to go on a trip, and we discuss until we find a compromise.

× I like chatting with my friends because I love connect with them and they update me every single thing happens in college, university, they go for you know before picnic and any kind of place.

✓ I like chatting with my friends because I love connecting with them, and they update me about everything that happens at college or university, such as when they go on a picnic or to other places.

The verb 'connect' should be in the -ing form after 'love' when expressing enjoyment ('love connecting'). Also 'update me every single thing happens' is ungrammatical: use 'update me about everything that happens'. Prepositions: use 'at college or university' and 'on a picnic'. Use commas and conjunctions to join clauses clearly.

× they update me every single thing happens in college, university, they go for you know before picnic and any kind of place.

✓ They update me about everything that happens at college or university, for example when they go on a picnic or to other places.

Use 'update someone about' not 'update someone every single thing'. Use 'happens at college' (not 'in college' in this context) and 'go on a picnic' rather than 'go for before picnic'. Use 'to other places' for general destinations.

× And it's, uh, around what's happening and around there.

✓ I usually talk about what's happening around them or around me.

The original is vague and redundant. Use the present simple 'I usually talk' to describe habitual action and 'what's happening around them' to make the meaning clear.

× So I'll just try to update and tell them that update me about anything happens with you.

✓ So I just try to update them and ask them to update me about anything that happens to them.

'Try to update and tell them that update me' is ungrammatical. Use parallel verbs and correct clause 'ask them to update me' and relative clause 'anything that happens to them'. Also use present simple 'I just try' for habits instead of future 'I'll' here.

× OK, I prefer both, but if there is, you're a very, very, very umm, dearest friend, so you talk with them personally, but if there's a family group and there's a lot of uh, your friends so, umm, we can, I, I can talk with them in crypto.

✓ I prefer both. If you are a very close friend, I talk to you personally. If there is a family group or many friends, I can talk with them in a group chat.

'If there is, you're...' mixes structures. Use 'If you are' not 'if there is' for a person. 'Dearest' is awkward in this context; 'very close friend' is natural. 'Talk with them in crypto' is unclear; likely 'in a group chat'. Use separate sentences for clarity.

× Like there's my a lot of friends that who stayed far away from me.

✓ I have a lot of friends who live far away from me.

Replace 'there's my a lot of friends' with 'I have a lot of friends'. Use 'who live' for present habitual state instead of 'stayed'. Remove extra relative pronoun 'that who' (use 'who' only).

× So I talk with them social media and there's a lot of friends who stay with my nearly so I can talk with MP2.

✓ So I talk with them on social media, and I have many friends who live near me, so I can talk with them in person.

Use 'talk with them on social media' (add preposition 'on'). 'There's a lot of friends who stay with my nearly' is incorrect: use 'I have many friends who live near me'. 'Talk with MP2' is unclear; likely 'in person'.

× Sometime yes, we argue like it's depends on situation that sometime, uh, we, we, we don't agree in the same situation.

✓ Sometimes yes, we argue; it depends on the situation. Sometimes we just don't agree on the same thing.

Use 'Sometimes' (plural) and place commas and semicolons properly. 'Depends on situation' needs article 'the situation'. Use 'don't agree on the same thing' to express disagreement.

× So we argue like that. I am right and he said, no, I'm right. So I'm we argue like this.

✓ So we argue like that: I say 'I am right' and he says 'No, I am right', and we end up arguing.

Pronoun and verb forms must agree: use 'I say'/'he says' for present habitual. Remove 'I'm we' which is incorrect. Provide clearer reporting of the dialogue with correct verb forms.