Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Begin with a clear topic sentence and avoid unrelated terms that may confuse the listener. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Replace vague phrases with clearer expressions and correct minor grammar (e.g., “one of my love languages” and “because”).

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends, especially after we haven't seen each other for a long time. It helps us catch up and I appreciate hearing encouraging words from them. Those conversations make me feel connected.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and then add specific examples. Use linking words (for example, or especially) and correct word order and articles. Avoid listing without clear structure.

例: We usually talk about our studies and personal lives. For example, we discuss assignments, future plans, and any new achievements. Sometimes we also share updates about family or hobbies.

提案: Give one clear reason in a single coherent sentence, then add one supporting detail with a linking word. Fix grammar and avoid repeating 'because'. Use vocabulary like 'overwhelming' or 'draining' correctly.

例: I prefer talking to one friend rather than a group because large groups make me feel overwhelmed. For instance, one-on-one conversations let me connect more deeply and relax while we chat.

提案: Answer directly, then give two concise supporting points linked with a conjunction. Avoid awkward phrasing and irrelevant details; keep examples specific and grammatical.

例: I prefer to communicate face-to-face because it lets me read emotions and enjoy the atmosphere. Also, we often meet over food, which makes conversations more relaxed and enjoyable.

提案: Provide a clear stance, then explain the reason with a linking word and one concrete example. Correct grammar (e.g., “there’s nothing wrong with it” and “it’s about growth and understanding both sides”). Keep it concise.

例: Yes, I sometimes argue with friends, and I think that's normal. Arguing can help us understand each other's views better; for example, a disagreement about study methods helped us find a better approach together.

× I prefer to chat with only one friend because too much people on the circle is makes me nervous as well as draining me.

✓ I prefer to chat with only one friend because too many people in the circle make me nervous and drain my energy.

'Too much' is used with uncountable nouns; 'people' is countable so use 'too many'. 'On the circle' is incorrect preposition; use 'in the circle'. Subject-verb agreement: plural subject 'too many people' requires plural verb 'make' not 'makes'. 'Draining me' is awkward; use 'drain my energy' or 'be draining'. Replace 'as well as' with 'and' for clarity.

× Yes, I like chatting with friends especially if we don't see each other for a long time since it is also one of my love language which is words of affirmation.

✓ Yes, I like chatting with friends, especially if we haven't seen each other for a long time, since it is also one of my love languages, which is words of affirmation.

Tense consistency: use present perfect 'haven't seen' for actions continuing up to now. 'Love language' should be plural 'love languages' when referring to one of several. Add commas for clarity and change 'which is' placement to clarify that 'words of affirmation' is the love language.

× Usually our conversation is focused on our academics, our life where we don't see each other, on what is our achievements.

✓ Usually our conversations focus on our academics, our lives when we don't see each other, and on our achievements.

Use plural 'conversations' to match general meaning. 'Focused on' can be simplified to 'focus on'. 'Our life where we don't see each other' is ungrammatical; use 'our lives when we don't see each other'. 'On what is our achievements' is incorrect word order; use 'on our achievements'.

× Because my socialization is focused on one person.

✓ My socializing is focused on one person.

Sentence fragment: remove leading 'Because' or combine with previous sentence. 'Socialization' is a noun but 'socializing' (gerund) fits better here. Also avoid starting sentences with 'Because' unless followed by a main clause.

× Because I am focused on vibing.

✓ I focus on vibing.

Avoid sentence fragment starting with 'Because'. Use a complete independent clause. 'I focus on vibing' is concise and grammatical.

× I prefer to communicate face to face because we feel the vibes as well as the emotions and my most likely is food because whenever I'm communicating with my friends is we always have our food to enjoy our conversation.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because we feel the vibes and emotions, and I often have food with me because whenever I'm with my friends we always have food to enjoy during our conversations.

Multiple issues: sequence and word choice. 'My most likely is food' is ungrammatical; use 'I often have food' or 'I am most likely to bring food'. 'Whenever I'm communicating with my friends is we always have our food' is incorrect structure; use 'whenever I'm with my friends, we always have food'. Use gerund or noun forms appropriately and add preposition 'during' for conversations.

× Yes sometimes and there's nothing wrong about it because I going with friends is not about ruining your friendship, it is all about growth on knowing your both sides on your perspectives for us to be more knowledgeable on one issue.

✓ Yes, sometimes, and there's nothing wrong with it because arguing with friends is not about ruining the friendship; it is about growth and understanding both sides so we can be more informed about an issue.

'Nothing wrong about' should be 'nothing wrong with'. 'I going with friends' is ungrammatical—intended meaning is 'arguing with friends'. 'Knowing your both sides on your perspectives' is awkward; use 'understanding both sides'. 'For us to be more knowledgeable on one issue' becomes 'so we can be more informed about an issue'. Punctuation adjusted for clarity.