Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer the question first, then give one or two relevant details. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use clear linking (e.g., "because" or "for example") when explaining. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me stay connected. For example, I often discuss our daily experiences and plans, and I like sharing personal stories. I’m outgoing (an "E" in MBTI), so I prefer lively conversations.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific examples using linking words (e.g., "for example", "such as"). Avoid repeating words like "like" and reduce hesitations.

例: I usually talk about current events and sports with my friends. For example, we discuss major news stories and international competitions such as the World Cup or baseball tournaments.

提案: Answer directly and support with one clear reason. Eliminate repetition and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") to make the response coherent and concise.

例: I prefer talking one-on-one because conversations can be deeper and more personal. This way I can better understand the other person's thoughts and build a closer friendship.

提案: Good direct answer and reason. Make it slightly more formal and concise by using fewer colloquial expressions and varying vocabulary (e.g., "expressions" instead of repeating "faces").

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can see facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand emotions more accurately.

提案: Clarify frequency and reason in a concise way. Avoid contradictory phrases ("Not a lot" vs "don't ... occasionally") and repetitive ideas. Use linking words (e.g., "because", "so") and give one brief example if possible.

例: I rarely argue with my friends because we respect each other's opinions. For instance, when we disagree about plans, we calmly explain our views and try to compromise.

× It's kind of like personal test like testing your personality.

✓ It's kind of a personal test that tests your personality.

The original uses 'like' awkwardly and 'testing' as a gerund in a redundant structure. Replace the phrase with a relative clause 'that tests your personality' to make the sentence grammatical and clear. Also change 'personal test' to include the article 'a'. Suggestion: Use 'a personal test that tests...' or 'a personality test.'

× And I am such an E person.

✓ And I am an E person.

The error is the article before a vowel sound: 'such an E person' or simply 'an E person.' Use 'an' before the vowel sound of the letter 'E.' Suggestion: Say 'I am an E person' or 'I'm an extrovert (E).'

× I really love to speak with like talk, chat with my friends, like share about my life.

✓ I really love to talk and chat with my friends and share my life with them.

The original mixes verbs and prepositions awkwardly and uses 'share about' which is incorrect; 'share something with someone' is the correct pattern. Also remove filler 'like' and use parallel verbs 'talk and chat' and 'share my life with them.' Suggestion: Use 'share my life with them' or 'talk about my life.'

× I chat about a lot of things, but usually I chat about the news recently like what happened in the world, what competition we have like for for example like World Cup, like baseball competition or something.

✓ I chat about a lot of things, but usually I talk about recent news, like what happened in the world, or competitions such as the World Cup or baseball tournaments.

Problems include awkward adverb placement ('the news recently'), repetition and excessive filler 'like,' and incorrect noun forms. Use 'recent news' and parallel structures 'such as' or 'like' once, and correct 'baseball competition' to 'baseball tournaments.' Suggestion: Say 'I talk about recent news' and use 'such as' for examples.

× I would prefer to chat with a person, only one person you know, 'cause if I only talk with a person, I can chat with them really deeply and know each other really deeply.

✓ I prefer to chat with one person because if I talk with only one person, I can have a deeper conversation and get to know each other better.

'Would prefer' is acceptable but here simple 'prefer' is more natural. 'Only one person you know' is redundant. 'Chat with them really deeply and know each other really deeply' is repetitive and awkward; use 'have a deeper conversation' and 'get to know each other better.' Suggestion: Use 'I prefer to chat with one person' and 'get to know each other better.'

× So I would rather I would prefer that.

✓ So I would prefer that.

Redundant modal duplication: 'would rather' and 'would prefer' together is unnecessary. Use one form: 'I would prefer that' or 'I'd rather do that.' Suggestion: Use a single preference construction, e.g., 'I'd rather that.'

× I'll prefer to communicate face to face because I really wanna see their faces, their emotion, facial expression, and I wanna understand what they feel like from their faces.

✓ I prefer to communicate face to face because I really want to see their faces, emotions and facial expressions, and I want to understand how they feel from their expressions.

'I'll prefer' is incorrect for habitual preference—use present 'I prefer.' 'Wanna' is informal; use 'want to.' 'Their emotion, facial expression' should be pluralized and combined. 'What they feel like from their faces' is awkward; use 'how they feel from their expressions.' Suggestion: Use 'I prefer' for general preferences and 'want to' in formal contexts.

× Not a lot. I don't argue with my friends occasionally 'cause I know what they want to say, I know what they think about.

✓ Not a lot. I don't argue with my friends often because I know what they want to say and what they think about.

'I don't argue ... occasionally' is contradictory: 'occasionally' means sometimes, but 'I don't' negates frequency. Use 'often' or remove negation. Also use 'because' instead of ''cause' in formal register and unify clauses with 'and.' Suggestion: Say 'I don't argue with my friends often' or 'I rarely argue with my friends.'

× I want to respect what they think the way they think.

✓ I want to respect the way they think.

The original repeats 'think' unnecessarily and has awkward word order. 'Respect the way they think' is concise and correct. Suggestion: Use 'respect the way they think'.

× So I don't really like say something bad about my friends.

✓ So I don't really like to say anything bad about my friends.

Verb pattern: after 'like' use the infinitive 'to say' or use gerund 'saying.' Also 'something bad' should be 'anything bad' in negative sentences. Suggestion: Use 'I don't really like to say anything bad' or 'I don't really like saying anything bad.'

× And my friends do the same thing as well.

✓ And my friends do the same.

'Do the same thing as well' is redundant. 'Do the same' is sufficient. Also 'as well' duplicates 'and.' Suggestion: Use 'My friends do the same.'