Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific example with linking words. Avoid filler words like "umm" and grammatical errors (e.g., "when I have concerns" not "when I got the concern").

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because they help me solve problems. For example, when I have concerns about work, I discuss them with a close friend and she offers practical advice, which always makes me feel more confident.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence naming the common topics, then give one or two specific details. Remove hesitation and correct grammar ("my partner" or "relationships" instead of "my lover"). Use linking words like "usually" or "for instance".

例: I usually chat about work, my future plans, and relationships. For instance, we often talk about career choices and I ask for opinions about job offers, which helps me make better decisions.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating your preference and explain why with specific reasons. Correct grammar ("one person"), avoid fillers, and use linking phrases like "because" and "so" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer chatting with one person rather than a group because I feel more comfortable sharing personal matters. Because it’s private, I can explain my feelings in depth and receive focused emotional support.

提案: Give a clear preference ("face-to-face") and provide specific reasons with concise language. Avoid repetition and filler words; use linking words like "because" and "so". Correct phrasing: "deliver my emotions" and "explain the story in more detail."

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it helps me convey emotions better and allows for clearer explanations. For example, during difficult conversations I can use facial expressions and tone to make my meaning clearer.

提案: Begin with a direct answer and give a specific example of a typical disagreement. Use correct tense and phrasing ("we sometimes don't agree on plans") and explain how you handle the argument using linking words like "for example" and "usually."

例: Yes, sometimes we argue, especially when planning trips because we don’t always agree on the itinerary. For example, if I prefer a relaxed schedule but others want sightseeing, I try to discuss compromises so we can reach a plan that suits everyone.

× Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends umm for example when I got the concern about my work or relationship with others.

✓ Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends, for example when I have a concern about my work or my relationships with others.

The original uses past tense 'got' incorrectly for a general or current situation; present simple 'have' is appropriate. Also 'relationship' should be plural 'relationships' to match 'others'. Use commas to separate clauses and improve clarity.

× So I would like to chat with my friends because they give me advice.

✓ So I like to chat with my friends because they give me advice.

The modal 'would' suggests conditional or hypothetical situations; for habitual preference use present simple 'like'. The rest of the sentence is correct.

× Umm Are you sure it should be my friends about my work or my future or my lover?

✓ Umm, I usually talk with my friends about my work, my future, or my romantic relationships.

The original is unclear and has incorrect structure and phrasing ('Are you sure it should be my friends'). Rewrite to state the intended meaning clearly, using parallel nouns and natural phrase 'romantic relationships' instead of 'lover' for formality.

× Because it is a general topic which she chat with my friends and they always give me a good advice.

✓ Because it is a general topic that I chat about with my friends, and they always give me good advice.

Subject and verb mismatch: 'she chat' is incorrect. Use 'I chat' with first person. Also 'chat about' is the correct collocation and 'advice' is uncountable so drop 'a'. Combine clauses for clarity.

× Actually I prefer chat with only one people because umm uh, I don't wanna share my stories with many people, so I wanna just share with one people and get the emotional.

✓ Actually I prefer chatting with only one person because I don't want to share my stories with many people, so I want to share with just one person and get emotional support.

After 'prefer' use the -ing form 'chatting' or 'to chat'; 'people' is plural but refers to one so use 'person'; avoid informal 'wanna' in formal correction; 'get the emotional' is ungrammatical—use 'get emotional support' or 'receive emotional support'.

× Actually I prefer to communicate with first place because umm it help it help me deliver my emotion to others and more uh, I could explain more details the story.

✓ Actually I prefer to communicate face-to-face because it helps me convey my emotions to others, and I can explain the details of the story more clearly.

'First place' is incorrect phrase; 'face-to-face' fits the question. Subject-verb agreement: 'it help' should be 'it helps'. Use 'convey my emotions' and 'explain the details of the story' for natural phrasing and correct word order.

× Yes, sometimes I argue with my friend, especially planning the travel, we sometimes didn't match the decision.

✓ Yes, sometimes I argue with my friend, especially when planning trips; sometimes we don't agree on decisions.

Use present simple 'don't agree' for habitual actions rather than past 'didn't match'. 'Planning the travel' is awkward; use 'planning trips'. Also combine clauses with 'when' and a semicolon for clarity.

× So in the situation I would like to argue with my friends how to prepare our travel.

✓ So in that situation I discuss with my friends how to prepare for our trip.

'I would like to argue with my friends how to prepare our travel' is awkward and implies liking to argue. Use 'discuss' or 'have a discussion' to convey negotiating plans; 'prepare for our trip' is natural phrasing. 'In that situation' clarifies reference.