Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples. Use correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid repetition. Link ideas with a short connector.

例: Yes. Schools in Vietnam have several rules. For example, students must wear uniforms and follow rules about hairstyles and appearance. These policies aim to keep discipline and a sense of equality among pupils.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion and support it with two contrasting points using linking words (however, on the other hand). Use specific effects of rules and correct word choices (e.g., 'disciplined' vs 'discipline', 'motivate').

例: I think it is a double-edged sword. On the one hand, strict rules can improve discipline and focus, which helps students learn. However, on the other hand, too many rules may lower motivation and make students feel unhappy.

提案: Be specific about the teacher and why they were dedicated. Use correct pronouns and vocabulary; avoid unclear phrases. Provide one or two concrete examples of what made them dedicated (extra help, enthusiasm).

例: Yes. I had a very dedicated teacher called Mrs. Nguyen who taught IT. She spent extra time helping students after class and created practical projects that made lessons memorable, which showed her commitment.

提案: State your preference clearly (more or fewer) and give two clear reasons linked with connectors (because, therefore). Avoid unclear words and fragmented phrases; use simple, accurate sentences.

例: I prefer fewer rules, because students need flexibility to be creative and learn responsibility. Too many strict rules can stifle motivation and make learning less enjoyable.

提案: Give a concise response: say yes/no then describe one specific effect of the strictness on you (pressure, improved results). Use correct tense and avoid repetition.

例: Yes. My secondary school teacher was very strict and enforced many rules. As a result I often felt pressured and anxious, although my grades improved because I studied more carefully.

提案: Give a direct opinion (yes/no/maybe) and explain with two clear reasons using linking words. Clarify vocabulary (rule-free vs flexible) and avoid unrelated or unclear terms.

例: I would prefer not to work in a completely rule-free school. While some flexibility is good, reasonable rules are necessary to maintain order and ensure teaching is effective; without any rules it would be hard to manage noisy classes.

× Yes, nowadays in specific country like Vietnam, Vietnam their school and the curriculum requires many rules and other policies about student like wearing the uniform, there's a height and the remark in school.

✓ Yes, nowadays in a specific country like Vietnam, schools and the curriculum require many rules and other policies for students, such as wearing uniforms, height requirements, and school remarks.

Issues: incorrect or missing articles ('a specific country'), incorrect noun plurality and subject-verb agreement ('schools... require'), incorrect preposition use ('policies for students' not 'about student'), incorrect use of examples ('such as' instead of 'like'), and awkward phrasing ('there's a height and the remark' corrected to 'height requirements, and school remarks'). Suggestion: use correct articles, match plural nouns with plural verbs, use 'for' with 'policies' when indicating recipients, and list examples clearly with 'such as'.

× Uh, in my opinion, I think it's a double edged sword because sometimes the strict rules are more disciplined where it can make sure and be more disappointed and dissatisfied with the curriculum.

✓ In my opinion, it is a double-edged sword because sometimes strict rules increase discipline, but they can also cause students to feel disappointed and dissatisfied with the curriculum.

Problems: awkward structure and unclear clauses ('more disciplined where it can make sure' is ungrammatical). Also incorrect comparative use ('more disciplined' used incorrectly). Suggestion: split into two clear clauses connected by 'but' and use verbs that convey intended meaning ('increase discipline', 'cause students to feel').

× Moreover, sometimes it can help to children motivating the abilities and determine.

✓ Moreover, sometimes it can help children develop motivation and determination.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'help to children' should be 'help children'; incorrect noun/verb forms ('motivating the abilities and determine' should be 'develop motivation and determination'). Suggestion: use correct collocations ('help children do something', 'develop motivation and determination').

× Yes, I have an IT is one of the most, uh, unforgettable periods of me when I got touched by my Earth T-shirt.

✓ Yes, I had an IT teacher who gave me one of the most unforgettable experiences when I was moved by my 'Earth' T-shirt.

Problems: incorrect pronoun and possessive use ('of me' should be 'for me' or rephrased), unclear reference 'I have an IT is...' and 'got touched' is awkward. Suggestion: clarify the subject ('I had an IT teacher'), use appropriate verb tense ('had', 'was moved'), and correct prepositions.

× Mrs. Nice is very strict and, uh, his own voice, uh, applies many disciplined and, uh, rules.

✓ Mrs. Nice was very strict; she had a firm voice and enforced many discipline rules.

Problems: wrong gender pronoun 'his' for Mrs. Nice; incorrect noun forms ('applies many disciplined and rules'). Suggestion: use correct pronoun for the teacher ('she'), use collocations like 'had a firm voice' and 'enforced rules' or 'many disciplinary rules'.

× Uh embarrassed. I think nowadays curriculum status and customize the bruise depend on the demands of student.

✓ I'm a bit embarrassed. I think the curriculum and its customization depend on students' needs.

Problems: fragmented sentence 'Uh embarrassed', missing articles ('the curriculum'), incorrect words ('customize the bruise' meaningless), incorrect plural possessive 'demand of student' should be 'students' needs'. Suggestion: use complete sentences, correct vocabulary, and plural possessives for general statements about students.

× Also the drop development of the societies to uh if push efficiencies in the study.

✓ Also, the pace of social development can affect efficiency in studies.

Problems: unclear and incorrect phrasing ('drop development of the societies', 'if push efficiencies'). Suggestion: replace with clear noun phrases like 'pace of social development' and use verbs 'affect' or 'influence' with 'efficiency in studies'.

× Yes, I have every undergo a very strict and many rules teaching of my my teacher in secondary school and sometimes it's make me very under pressure and always feels uh, conf.

✓ Yes, I underwent very strict, rule-heavy teaching from my teacher in secondary school, and sometimes it made me feel very pressured and confused.

Problems: incorrect auxiliary and tense ('have every undergo' wrong), duplicated word 'my my', incorrect agreement ('it's make me' should be 'it made me'), and unclear ending 'conf' likely 'confused'. Suggestion: use past tense for past experiences, correct word order, and full words.

× Oh, sometime I think a ruse is the compulsory factor in school because if you are a teacher in a Rotary school, it's sometime make you very disappointed and can do anything to teach agricultural student be more quiet if they are very loud enough and.

✓ Sometimes I think rules are a necessary part of school because if you are a teacher in a rowdy school, it can be very frustrating and you may need to do anything to make noisy students quieter.

Problems: incorrect words ('ruse' should be 'rules'), inconsistent singular/plural, wrong modal and phrasing ('it's sometime make you' should be 'it can make you' or 'it can be'), and incorrect noun phrases ('agricultural student' is likely wrong in context). Suggestion: use correct vocabulary, proper modal verbs ('can', 'may'), and clearer phrasing such as 'make students quieter'.