Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use clearer sentence structure. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect word choices (e.g., “hold the tool,” “closest”).

例: Yes. We have several school rules, mainly about behaviour and appearance. For example, we must wear a uniform and behave respectfully in class, which helps students look professional and avoid distractions.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with one or two logical reasons using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Avoid absolute statements like “everything will go wrong.” Use specific consequences instead.

例: Yes, I do. More rules can help maintain discipline because they set clear expectations; for example, a dress code prevents distracting attire and promotes a focused learning environment.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence about one dedicated teacher, then give concrete examples of their dedication. Use correct collocations (e.g., “give helpful information,” “manage time well”) and avoid vague or repetitive phrases.

例: Yes. My English teacher was very dedicated: she always gave clear explanations, stayed after class to help struggling students, and planned lessons carefully to make sure everyone improved.

提案: State your preference clearly and support it with specific reasons using linking words like “because” and “for example.” Avoid filler words and incorrect phrasing such as “hot” or repeated hesitations.

例: I prefer fewer rules because too many are hard to remember and can confuse students; for example, conflicting rules may lead to accidental breaches and unnecessary punishment.

提案: Answer with one clear example of a strict teacher and explain the reason and effect of their strictness. Use correct grammar (e.g., “punctual,” “follow the rules”) and avoid vague, run-on sentences.

例: Yes. One of my teachers was very strict because she wanted us to be punctual and responsible; as a result, many students improved their timekeeping and study habits.

提案: Give a clear position and one or two specific reasons. Clarify the idea of a “rule-free” school—do you mean fewer rules or flexible rules? Use correct word forms (e.g., “career,” “an English teacher”) and concise structure.

例: Yes, I would. As a future English teacher, I think a school with fewer rigid rules could encourage creativity and student autonomy, provided basic expectations are still in place for safety and respect.

× Yes, there are, there are certain rules that we need to hold at school and we need to hold the tool because it helps us to stay and to be similar with other other students.

✓ Yes, there are certain rules that we need to follow at school, and we need to follow them because they help us to behave similarly to other students.

The sentence misuses 'hold' and 'hold the tool' where 'follow' and 'them' (referring to rules) are correct. 'There are' is fine but repetition is unnecessary. Also 'to be similar with other other students' should be 'to behave similarly to other students.' Suggestion: replace 'hold' with 'follow', use a pronoun 'them' to refer to rules, and use 'behave similarly to' for comparison. Grammar problem type ID: 3

× It relates, it's related to our behavior and the way how we look our closest especially uniforms.

✓ It relates to our behavior and how we look, especially our uniforms.

The phrase 'the way how we look our closest' is ungrammatical. Use 'how we look' or 'the way we look' and place 'especially our uniforms' after for clarity. Remove redundant 'relates' and 'it's related' and say 'It relates to'. Suggestion: use 'relates to' + noun and simplify 'how we look'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes I do. I think you need to follow this rules because they help us to maintain order and make students look professional.

✓ Yes, I do. I think you need to follow these rules because they help us to maintain order and make students look professional.

'This rules' is incorrect because 'rules' is plural; use the plural determiner 'these'. Suggestion: match demonstrative to noun number ('this' for singular, 'these' for plural). Grammar problem type ID: 27

× And if we won't follow those rules, everything will go wrong.

✓ And if we don't follow those rules, everything will go wrong.

In conditional sentences referring to a likely future condition, use 'if + present, will + base verb' not 'won't' in the if-clause. 'If we won't' is incorrect. Suggestion: use 'if we don't follow' for real future condition. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× Everyone will wear different kind of styles and it will look not functional.

✓ Everyone will wear different kinds of styles, and it will look impractical.

'Different kind of styles' should be 'different kinds of styles' or 'different styles' and 'not functional' is awkward; 'impractical' or 'inappropriate' fits better. Suggestion: use 'different styles' and choose a single adjective like 'impractical'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Yes, I have. And my schools, I'll say every teacher is well dedicated and that's the point that we love our teachers.

✓ Yes, I have. At my school, I would say every teacher is very dedicated, and that's why we love our teachers.

'My schools' is incorrect when referring to a single school; use 'my school'. 'Well dedicated' is nonstandard; use 'very dedicated'. 'That's the point that' should be 'that's why'. Suggestion: use singular 'school' if speaking about one school and use natural adverbs like 'very'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× They are really fair, helpful informations and maintains times really great and we support them and they are.

✓ They are really fair and very helpful; they organize time well, and we support them.

'Helpful informations' is wrong because 'information' is uncountable; say 'helpful' without plural. 'Maintains times really great' is ungrammatical; use 'organize time well' or 'manage time effectively'. The trailing 'and they are' is incomplete and should be removed. Suggestion: use uncountable 'information' correctly and rephrase verbs for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× I prefer to have fewer rules at school because if they will, plenty of them, it will be hard and, umm, hot and, uh, to remember them because we can forget about this rules and if we got wrong, uh, it'll, it'll have negative impact on us.

✓ I prefer to have fewer rules at school because if there are plenty of them, it will be hard to remember them; we can forget the rules, and if we break them it will have a negative impact on us.

'Fewer' is correct for countable 'rules' but sentence has many errors: 'if they will, plenty of them' should be 'if there are plenty of them'. 'Hot' is irrelevant. 'This rules' should be 'these rules' or 'the rules'. 'If we got wrong' should be 'if we break them' or 'if we get them wrong'. Suggestion: use 'there are' for existence and match demonstratives to noun number. Grammar problem type ID: 14

× Yes, I have. I had so many strict teachers.

✓ Yes, I have. I have had many strict teachers.

The question 'Have you ever had...' expects present perfect 'have had' to indicate experience up to now. 'I had' is simple past and could imply they no longer have them. Suggestion: use present perfect 'have had' for life experience. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I believe that they were straight to us because they wanted to show how the world goes and she tried to teach us to be punctual and the follow of the rules each will the the way how they behave to us will affect what person will.

✓ I believe that they were strict with us because they wanted to show how the world works. They tried to teach us to be punctual and to follow the rules, because the way people behave toward us will affect what kind of person we become.

Multiple issues: 'straight' should be 'strict'. Mixing 'they' and 'she' is inconsistent; keep pronouns consistent. 'How the world goes' should be 'how the world works'. 'The follow of the rules' should be 'to follow the rules'. The final clause is unclear; rephrase to 'the way people behave toward us will affect what kind of person we become.' Suggestion: maintain consistent pronouns and use standard collocations like 'strict with', 'how the world works', and 'follow the rules'. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Yes I would though my future carrier is to be a English an English teacher and I believe that's teaching in a rule free school will benefit me and them too because when it comes to rules you need to follow the same rules as children so it will be better.

✓ Yes, I would. My future career is to be an English teacher, and I believe teaching in a rule-free school would benefit both me and the students because, when it comes to rules, teachers should follow the same rules as children.

Errors: 'carrier' should be 'career'. 'a English' should be 'an English'. 'an English teacher' duplicate; simplify to 'an English teacher'. 'That's teaching in a rule free school will benefit' should be 'I believe teaching in a rule-free school would benefit'. Use hyphen in 'rule-free'. 'Them' is vague; use 'the students'. Also conditional form 'would' fits better. Suggestion: correct spelling, use articles correctly ('an' before vowel sound), use hyphens for compound adjectives, and make pronouns clear. Grammar problem type ID: 22