Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give 1–2 specific rules as supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid irrelevant words and repeated phrases. Use plural/singular correctly and correct verb forms.

例: Yes. There are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to shorten their skirts, and they must go straight home after classes. These rules are meant to keep students safe and maintain a proper appearance.

提案: Provide a clear opinion with logical reasoning and specific examples. Use linking words (because, however, but) correctly and avoid unclear or incorrect words. Keep sentences simple and grammatical.

例: No, I don't think more rules would help. Strict rules can encourage discipline, but too many rules may make students feel restricted and less motivated. For instance, excessive rules about appearance or free time can reduce creativity and independence.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason or one brief example. Fix grammatical errors (I haven't, I don't like discipline). Avoid contradictory language. Use one or two supporting sentences to explain what 'dedicated' means.

例: No, I haven't had a very dedicated teacher. I prefer a relaxed classroom and I find strict disciplinary teachers difficult to learn from. A dedicated teacher, in my view, would be someone who explains things clearly and supports students' interests.

提案: Give a direct preference (more or fewer) and support it with clear reasons and a brief example. Use correct vocabulary (rules, students obey) and logical linking words. Keep responses concise and coherent.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school. Too many rules can make students feel controlled and less willing to follow them. For example, if there are strict bans on small things like hairstyles, students may ignore other important rules.

提案: Answer clearly with correct tense and specific details: when, how the teacher was strict, and how you reacted. Use linking words to organize your points. Correct grammar (met, didn't like, rule-breakers) and avoid unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I had a very strict teacher when I was 11. He did not tolerate rule-breakers and enforced classroom rules strictly, for example by giving detentions for lateness. I found it hard to speak freely in his class, so I tried to be more careful with my behavior.

提案: State your preference clearly and give a specific reason and a short example of how you would teach in such a school. Use correct phrasing (yes/no, because) and avoid repetition. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would. I prefer a school with fewer strict rules because I value freedom and creativity; as a teacher I would encourage student choice in projects and create a relaxed environment that still has clear expectations.

× Oh, you are definitely Our sports school has many loots.

✓ Oh, our sports school definitely has many rules.

The sentence mixes second-person 'you' incorrectly and uses 'Our' with wrong capitalization; 'loots' is incorrect word choice for 'rules'. Use 'our' (lowercase) and place 'definitely' before the verb phrase. Replace 'loots' with 'rules'. Suggestion: Use consistent subject pronoun and correct vocabulary.

× For example, student can't cut their score skirt short and they can't go to the somewhere during their way to home.

✓ For example, students can't wear skirts that are too short and they can't go somewhere on their way home.

Plural 'students' is required (quantifier/number). 'score skirt' is incorrect word choice; 'skirts that are too short' is correct. 'go to the somewhere' is ungrammatical; use 'go somewhere'. Use 'on their way home' for idiomatic preposition use. Suggestions: pluralize nouns to match general statements and use standard collocations.

× It is very disgusting for me and but I have to.

✓ It is very upsetting to me, but I have to follow them.

'Disgusting' describes something that causes revulsion; 'upsetting' better captures annoyance. The conjunctions 'and but' are contradictory; use 'but'. The sentence lacks an object for 'have to'; add 'follow them'. Suggestion: choose adjectives that match the intended emotion and complete the clause after 'have to' with the verb.

× No, I don't think so, because roof is the way.

✓ No, I don't think so, because rules are the way to maintain order.

'roof is the way' is unintelligible; likely 'rules are the way' was intended. Use plural 'rules' and complete the idea with purpose 'to maintain order'. Suggestion: express the reason clearly and match subject number and meaning.

× The hard way to dismay students to the discipline, but too much low might lead their base.

✓ A strict approach can discourage students from discipline, but too many rules might be counterproductive.

Original has wrong word choices: 'hard way to dismay students to the discipline' is awkward; use 'strict approach can discourage students from discipline'. 'Too much low might lead their base' is meaningless; 'too many rules might be counterproductive' conveys the idea. Suggestion: use accurate collocations and pluralization for countable nouns ('rules').

× No, I haven't because I'm don't like allowed so I always like it so because I don't like discipline so it is not good for me.

✓ No, I haven't, because I don't like being restricted; I don't like discipline, so it wouldn't suit me.

Mixes 'I'm don't like allowed' which is incorrect pronoun/auxiliary sequence. Use 'I don't like being restricted' to express passive experience. Simplify and combine ideas: 'I don't like discipline' and consequence. Suggestion: avoid conflicting auxiliaries and use appropriate gerund/passive structures.

× No, I don't think so because and too much lure is might lead the students bites and they can't obey them because it is better to excessive and young don't like.

✓ No, I don't think so, because too many strict rules might lead students to rebel and they won't obey them; excessive rules are disliked by young people.

'Too much lure' is incorrect; use 'too many strict rules' (quantifier and adjective). 'Might lead the students bites' intends 'lead students to rebel'. Fix verb forms and pronoun references. Suggestion: use correct quantifiers for countable nouns and clear verbs for outcomes.

× I meet him when I was 11.

✓ I met him when I was 11.

The action happened in the past, so the simple past 'met' is required instead of present 'meet'. Suggestion: use past tense for completed past events.

× He was very strict on the domain of the law and he don't like Rule breaker, unlike me.

✓ He was very strict about rules and he didn't like rule breakers, unlike me.

'Strict on the domain of the law' is an awkward translation; use 'strict about rules'. Subject-verb agreement 'he don't like' is incorrect; past tense 'he didn't like' matches 'was'. 'Rule breaker' should be plural 'rule breakers'. Suggestion: match tense and pluralization and use natural collocations.

× So I was not good at talking with him and he is. He was two, yeah.

✓ So I wasn't good at talking to him, and he was very strict.

Original is fragmented and unclear: 'and he is. He was two' makes no sense. Replace with coherent description: 'I wasn't good at talking to him, and he was very strict.' Suggestion: combine related ideas into one clear sentence and maintain consistent tense.

× No, I don't think so because and too much lure is might lead the students bites and they can't obey them because it is better to excessive and young don't like.

✓ No, I don't think so, because too many strict rules might lead students to rebel and they won't obey them; excessive rules are disliked by young people.

This repeats earlier but focuses on tense: use 'might lead' and 'won't obey' for modal and future consequence; ensure verbs are correctly formed. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use correct auxiliary/modal constructions.

× Yeah, definitely, because as I said, I don't like over in Kalu, so I always wish to to live in free school and it is my dream because I want to be, I can be free.

✓ Yes, definitely, because as I said, I don't like strict rules, so I always wish to live in a free school; it's my dream because I want to be free.

Multiple issues: 'over in Kalu' is unclear—interpreted as 'strict rules'. Remove duplicate 'to'. Use 'a free school' (article) and simplify 'I want to be, I can be free' to 'I want to be free'. Suggestion: remove redundant words, use correct articles, and express desires succinctly.