Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use plural agreement (students), and limit to 3–4 sentences. Add a linking word when listing rules and give one specific reason or example.

例: Yes. There are several important rules at my school. For example, students must wear a uniform and attend the morning flag ceremony. These rules are set by the principal to promote discipline and responsibility among students.

× Yes, there are so many rules for student in our school to follow.

✓ Yes, there are so many rules for students in our school to follow.

The noun 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with 'so many rules' and general reference to all pupils. Use plural nouns when speaking about people in general or more than one person.

× Firstly, students must wear school uniform.

✓ Firstly, students must wear school uniforms.

'School uniform' can be countable when referring to each student's attire; 'uniforms' is appropriate to imply each student has one. Alternatively 'wear the school uniform' is acceptable. Keep number consistent with 'students'.

× Second, student must attend flag ceremony in early morning.

✓ Second, students must attend the flag ceremony in the early morning.

Use plural 'students' to refer to all pupils. Also include the article 'the' before 'flag ceremony' and 'the early morning' for natural English. Articles and plurality must match the noun's use.

× This role is set by our school principal so that students must learn responsibility and proper ethics in our school.

✓ This rule was set by our school principal so that students would learn responsibility and proper ethics in our school.

'Role' is incorrect; 'rule' fits context. Use past tense 'was set' if referring to a past action. Also change 'must learn' to 'would learn' to express purpose. The original mixes passive present with modal 'must' incorrectly.

× Yes, I think student will benefit more from morals because roles is a kind of ethic that must follow.

✓ Yes, I think students will benefit more from morals because rules are a kind of ethics that must be followed.

Pluralize 'student' to 'students' and 'roles' to 'rules'. Use 'are' for plural agreement. 'Ethic' should be plural or 'ethical teaching'; also use passive infinitive 'must be followed'.

× If there's no rules in our school that must follow, it means students in our school is unresponsible.

✓ If there are no rules in our school to follow, it means students in our school are irresponsible.

Use 'there are' with plural 'rules'. 'That must follow' is awkward; 'to follow' is natural. 'Is unresponsible' has subject-verb disagreement and wrong adjective form; use 'are irresponsible'.

× Yes, I really had a dedicated teacher that always told us the rules and regulation that must follow in our school.

✓ Yes, I had a dedicated teacher who always told us the rules and regulations that we had to follow in our school.

Use 'had' for past; 'that' should be 'who' for people. 'Regulation' needs plural 'regulations'. 'That must follow' is passive/awkward; 'we had to follow' clarifies obligation in past.

× For example, his dad is teacher affair.

✓ For example, his father works in the teacher affairs office.

'His dad is teacher affair' is ungrammatical. Use 'father' and an appropriate verb like 'works in' and correct noun phrase 'teacher affairs office' to indicate his role/place.

× Teacher affair always told us the proper behavior, responsibility and rules that must follow in our classroom so that behavior make lesser run more smoothly.

✓ The teacher in charge of affairs always told us the proper behavior, responsibilities, and rules that we had to follow in our classroom so that things would run more smoothly.

Clarify 'Teacher affair' to 'The teacher in charge of affairs'. Make nouns plural and use 'we had to follow' for obligation in past. 'Behavior make lesser run more smoothly' is ungrammatical; use 'things would run more smoothly'.

× I prefer more rules in our school because if there's more rules in our school, it means student is responsible to what they're doing and knows what's good and right.

✓ I prefer more rules in our school because if there are more rules, it means students are responsible for what they're doing and know what's good and right.

Use 'there are' with plural 'rules'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' and verb agreement 'are' and 'know' to match. Use 'responsible for' rather than 'to'.

× Yes, I really had to stick teachers.

✓ Yes, I really had strict teachers.

'Had to stick teachers' is incorrect word order and word choice. 'Strict' is the adjective describing teachers. Use 'had strict teachers' to express past experience.

× One example is 1 morning when we're eating in our canteen.

✓ One example is one morning when we were eating in our canteen.

Use past continuous 'were eating' to match past narrative. Replace numeral '1' with 'one'. Avoid mixing present 'we're' with past context.

× She told us that we must put our trash in a proper disposal because that was the principle.

✓ She told us that we must put our trash in a proper disposal because that was the principle.

Sentence is mostly correct; however 'in a proper disposal' is awkward—better 'in a proper bin' or 'in a proper disposal bin.' The main pronoun usage is acceptable but noun choice should be improved.

× Set the rules.

✓ She was setting the rules.

'Set the rules' is a fragment lacking context and correct tense. In the narrative, use 'She was setting the rules' or 'She set the rules' depending on intended meaning. This completes the sentence structure.

× No, my answer is that's no.

✓ No, my answer is no.

'That's no' is awkward and redundant. Use 'my answer is no' or simply 'No.' Keep pronoun usage natural.

× I don't see myself working as a preschool as a teacher because nowadays students don't like ask teacher to teach them what is the proper behavior because students nowadays is very sensitive.

✓ I don't see myself working as a preschool teacher because nowadays students don't like to ask teachers to teach them what proper behavior is, because students nowadays are very sensitive.

Remove the extra 'as' after 'preschool'. Use 'preschool teacher' as noun. Add 'to' after 'like' before verb 'ask'. Make 'teachers' plural and reorder clause 'what proper behavior is' for correct indirect question form. 'Students nowadays is' should be 'students nowadays are' for subject-verb agreement.