Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use correct subject-verb agreement and articles, and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes. There are several rules at my university. For example, because it is a women’s university, male visitors are not allowed on campus to protect students’ privacy and security.

提案: Organize your answer: state your opinion, give two clear reasons with linking words, and correct awkward phrases. Avoid fillers like 'uh' and use appropriate expressions for effects.

例: No, I don't think more rules would help. Strict regulations can reduce students’ confidence and limit their freedom, which may negatively affect their motivation and creativity.

提案: Combine sentences smoothly and fix tense/grammar. Use a topic sentence, then give two specific examples of how the teacher was dedicated using linking words.

例: Yes. My high school art teacher was very dedicated. She regularly gave detailed feedback after class and stayed late to help us improve our projects, so I really admired her commitment.

提案: Remove fillers, use correct grammar (e.g. 'prefer fewer rules'), and expand slightly with a supporting detail or example to make your point stronger.

例: I prefer fewer rules at school. Fewer restrictions help students feel more confident and give them the freedom to explore ideas, which can encourage learning and creativity.

提案: Make the answer concise and correct collocations (e.g. 'heavy workload', 'miss deadlines'). Give one clear consequence and an emotion or opinion to support it.

例: Yes. My Korean teacher was very strict and gave us a heavy workload, so we often missed deadlines. It was stressful and made learning less enjoyable.

提案: Correct vocabulary and grammar ('rule-free', 'improve students’ creativity'), avoid fillers, and give one concrete reason with an example of how freedom benefits learning.

例: Yes, I would. In a rule-free school, students might have more opportunities to experiment and take intellectual risks; for example, they could design their own projects, which would boost creativity and independent learning.

× Yes, we have a lot of rules in my school.

✓ Yes, we have a lot of rules at my school.

Use of preposition with 'school' is incorrect here. 'At my school' is the correct collocation to indicate location or institution. Use 'in' for enclosed spaces or sometimes 'in school' meaning attending school, but 'at my school' is natural for rules of the school.

× For example I'm in women's university now so any man cannot allow to enter our campus because of school security and privacy for student.

✓ For example, I'm at a women's university now, so men are not allowed to enter our campus because of school security and student privacy.

Multiple issues: preposition and article ('at a women's university'), plural/general noun ('men' instead of 'any man'), passive construction for permission ('are not allowed' instead of 'cannot allow to enter'), and plural 'student privacy'. Correction uses passive voice to express a rule and fixes number and article.

× I don't think students would benefit more from more rules.

✓ I don't think students would benefit from more rules.

Redundant comparative 'more more' is unnecessary. 'Would benefit from more rules' already conveys the idea; including an extra 'more' after 'benefit' is incorrect. Keep tense/modal 'would' as it indicates hypothetical.

× With strict rules, students feel less confidence and uh, not permitted freedom so that they lose their self-confidence and negative effect.

✓ With strict rules, students feel less confident and have less freedom, so they lose self-confidence and experience negative effects.

Use adjective 'confident' not noun 'confidence' after 'feel'. 'Not permitted freedom' is ungrammatical; use 'have less freedom'. 'Negative effect' should be plural 'negative effects' or 'a negative effect'; also verb needed: 'experience negative effects'.

× Yes, I had once she was my art teacher in my high school.

✓ Yes, I did; she was my art teacher in high school.

Unnatural auxiliary 'had once' and punctuation needed. Use 'I did' to answer positively, then 'she was my art teacher in high school.' Past simple 'was' is correct.

× She gave us some feedback after class and help us to improve our art project.

✓ She gave us some feedback after class and helped us to improve our art projects.

Verb tense agreement: parallel past tense required ('gave' and 'helped'). 'Help us to improve' should be 'helped us improve' or 'helped us to improve'. 'Art project' should be plural 'art projects' if referring to multiple students, or keep singular if one project; plural is safer.

× It was a very helpful for us.

✓ It was very helpful for us.

'Helpful' is an adjective; do not use the indefinite article 'a' before an adjective alone. Remove 'a'.

× So I really look up to her.

✓ So I really looked up to her.

Context refers to past teacher; maintain past tense 'looked up to'. 'Look up to' is correct phrasal verb meaning admire.

× Umm, I prefer to fewer rules at school because with very strict rules, students feel less confident and it limits their freedom.

✓ Umm, I prefer fewer rules at school because with very strict rules, students feel less confident and their freedom is limited.

'Prefer to fewer' is incorrect; correct structure is 'prefer fewer rules' (no 'to'). Also 'it limits their freedom' is vague; rephrase to passive 'their freedom is limited' or keep 'it limits'.

× Yes I had once, he was my Korean teacher and he always gave us so many assignments and workloads so we couldn't finish our assignment due to deadline.

✓ Yes, I did; he was my Korean teacher and he always gave us so many assignments and so much work that we couldn't finish our assignments before the deadline.

Use 'I did' for affirmative response. 'Workloads' is awkward; use 'so much work'. 'Assignment' should be plural 'assignments'. 'Due to deadline' is incorrect preposition and article; use 'before the deadline.'

× Yes, I would like to work as a teacher in the roof free school because uh it can improve students creativity and accept freedom so that they can learn more thing than strict rules.

✓ Yes, I would like to work as a teacher in a rule-free school because it can improve students' creativity and allow freedom so that they can learn more than with strict rules.

Multiple errors: 'roof free' should be 'rule-free'. 'In a rule-free school' needs indefinite article. 'Students creativity' requires possessive 'students'' or 'students' creativity'. 'Accept freedom' is ungrammatical—use 'allow freedom'. 'Learn more thing' should be 'learn more' and compare with 'than with strict rules'.