Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly stating the rules and their purpose. Avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students are not allowed to use social media or play games during class time because it distracts us from learning.

提案: Your answer has some repetition and awkward phrasing. To improve, state your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons using linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe more rules can help students become more disciplined because they will avoid breaking rules to prevent punishments. This can create a better learning environment.

提案: Your answer has inconsistencies and grammatical mistakes, such as switching pronouns and unclear expressions. Try to keep your answer consistent, use correct pronouns, and provide specific examples with linking words to explain why the teacher is good.

例: Yes, I have a math teacher who teaches very well. Although I didn't like mathematics before, she made the lessons interesting by explaining topics like triangles clearly, which helped me enjoy the subject more.

× Of course there are rules for us at my school teachers, they restrict us from playing social media or games because we usually just glued to games. Yes.

✓ Of course there are rules for us at my school. Teachers restrict us from using social media or playing games because we are usually just glued to games.

The original sentence incorrectly combines pronouns and lacks proper sentence separation, causing confusion. 'My school teachers' should be separated into two sentences for clarity. Also, 'playing social media' is incorrect; it should be 'using social media'. The phrase 'we usually just glued to games' lacks a verb and should be 'we are usually just glued to games'. To improve, separate ideas clearly and use correct pronouns and verb forms.

× Of course there are benefits. Firstly, I think students, they will be more disciplined because they won't break the rules, because they can afford punishments.

✓ Of course there are benefits. Firstly, I think students will be more disciplined because they won't break the rules, as they can be punished.

The original sentence redundantly uses 'students, they' which is unnecessary. Also, 'because they can afford punishments' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that students can be punished if they break rules. The modal verb 'can' should be used to indicate possibility of punishment, not 'afford'. To improve, remove redundant pronouns and use correct modal verb expressions.

× Yes, I have a math teacher. He teaches us really well that time. I am not really fond of mathematics, but she made me get interest to mathematics, for example triangles or other things because her lessons are really interesting.

✓ Yes, I have a math teacher. He taught us really well at that time. I am not really fond of mathematics, but she made me interested in mathematics, for example triangles or other topics, because her lessons are really interesting.

The sentence has inconsistent pronouns referring to the teacher ('He' and 'she'). Also, 'He teaches us really well that time' mixes present tense with a past time reference; it should be past tense 'He taught us really well at that time'. 'Made me get interest to mathematics' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'made me interested in mathematics'. To improve, maintain consistent pronouns, use correct tense, and correct verb and preposition usage.