Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и нечеткие выражения, такие как "Uniform Address Code" вместо "Uniform Dress Code" и "do their homework and time". Рекомендуется использовать более точные и естественные выражения, а также структурировать ответ с четким введением и поддерживающими деталями, избегая излишней длины.

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must wear the school uniform every day. They are also required to complete their homework on time and respect their teachers and classmates.

提案: В ответе много повторений и нечетких выражений, например, "more roles" вместо "more rules" и "breaking goods". Следует использовать более точные слова и избегать излишней повторяемости. Также стоит структурировать ответ с использованием связующих слов для логичности.

例: Yes, I believe students benefit from having more rules because rules help maintain discipline. When students know the consequences of breaking rules, they are more likely to behave responsibly and focus on their studies.

提案: Ответ содержит несколько грамматических ошибок и неясных выражений, например, "I'll have a teacher" вместо "I have a teacher" и "Isles" вместо "IELTS". Рекомендуется использовать правильные формы глаголов и точные термины, а также структурировать ответ более логично.

例: Yes, I have a teacher who does his job very well. He is my English teacher and has been teaching for nearly 25 years. He helps me prepare for the IELTS exam by explaining everything clearly and guiding me step by step.

× Yes, there are several rules at our schools for children.

✓ Yes, there are several rules at our school for children.

The word 'schools' is plural, but the context suggests referring to a single school. Using the singular 'school' is appropriate here to match the context.

× First of all, they must obey the Uniform Address Code.

✓ First of all, they must obey the Uniform Dress Code.

The phrase 'Uniform Address Code' is incorrect; the correct term is 'Uniform Dress Code' which refers to rules about clothing.

× This is the first one in the school and the second.

✓ This is the first rule in the school, and the second is that all children must be educated.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. It needs to be restructured to clearly state the first and second rules.

× All of our children must be educated.

✓ All of our children must attend school.

The phrase 'must be educated' is awkward here; 'must attend school' is clearer and more natural in this context.

× They must do their homework and time, which requires more patience.

✓ They must do their homework on time, which requires more patience.

The phrase 'and time' is incorrect; it should be 'on time' to indicate punctuality.

× Of course, students would benefit more from more roles, because when there are some rules at school, people would be afraid of them and they will not break rules, they will not break the disciplines, they will be afraid of breaking goods because in the future, if they break rules, they will have some punishments.

✓ Of course, students would benefit more from more rules, because when there are some rules at school, people would be afraid of them and they will not break rules, they will not break the discipline, they will be afraid of breaking rules because in the future, if they break rules, they will have some punishments.

The word 'roles' is incorrect; it should be 'rules'. Also, 'disciplines' should be singular 'discipline'. The phrase 'breaking goods' is incorrect and replaced with 'breaking rules'.

× I'll have a teacher who's very good at his job.

✓ I have a teacher who's very good at his job.

The phrase 'I'll have' (I will have) is incorrect here because the student is talking about a current teacher, so present tense 'I have' is appropriate.

× He's teaching me how to be ready for the Isles, and he's making me ready for the Isle. Speaking.

✓ He's teaching me how to be ready for the IELTS, and he's making me ready for the IELTS Speaking test.

'Isles' and 'Isle. Speaking' are incorrect. The correct term is 'IELTS' (International English Language Testing System), and 'IELTS Speaking' refers to the speaking part of the test.