Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。具体的なルールを明確に述べ、文法を正しく使い、5文以内で簡潔に答える練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, there are several rules at my school. For example, students must not be late in the morning, and we have to clean our classrooms ourselves. These rules teach us responsibility and discipline.

提案: 内容が曖昧で、文法や語彙の誤りが目立ちます。より具体的に、なぜルールが役立つのかを説明し、論理的に話を展開する練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I believe more rules can help students develop good habits. For example, following rules teaches us discipline, which is important for living in society later.

提案: 回答が非常に不明瞭で、話の流れが乱れています。質問に直接答え、具体的な情報を簡潔に述べる練習をし、不要な言葉を減らしましょう。

例: Yes, I had a great teacher in high school named Mr. Olga. He not only taught Japanese well but also gave us useful strategies to succeed in exams.

× students must not be right for crosses in the morning

✓ students must not be late for classes in the morning

The phrase 'must not be right for crosses' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'must not be late for classes.' The modal verb 'must not' is used correctly to express prohibition, but the phrase following it is incorrect. Correcting the phrase clarifies the rule and maintains proper modal verb usage.

× these rules have told me the important things

✓ these rules have taught me important things

The verb 'told' is incorrectly used with 'rules' as the subject and 'me' as the object. Rules cannot 'tell' someone; instead, they can 'teach' or 'show' important things. Also, 'the important things' is better as 'important things' here. The correction uses 'have taught' to correctly express the intended meaning.

× I think it will bring some students positive aspects

✓ I think it will bring some positive aspects to students

The original sentence misplaces the object and the phrase 'some students positive aspects' is awkward. The modal verb 'will' is used correctly to indicate future possibility. The correction rearranges the sentence to 'bring some positive aspects to students' for clarity and natural expression.

× students can run the moral rules which regards to every society afterwards

✓ students can follow the moral rules which regard every society afterwards

The verb 'run' is incorrectly used; 'follow' is appropriate for rules. Also, 'regards to' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'regard' without 'to.' The plural subject 'rules' requires the verb 'regard' without 's.' The correction fixes these prepositional and verb usage errors.

× I had a good teacher and at high school, uh, the teacher's name is Mr. Olga, who has told her Japanese and he has not only here not only users and treating the subject, but also, uh, told us the strategy to succeed in them

✓ I had a good teacher in high school. His name was Mr. Olga, who taught us Japanese. He not only taught the subject well but also told us strategies to succeed in it.

The original sentence has multiple issues: inconsistent tense usage, incorrect pronouns ('her' instead of 'his'), and unclear phrasing ('not only here not only users and treating the subject'). The correction uses past tense consistently, corrects pronouns, and clarifies the meaning by restructuring the sentence for coherence and grammatical correctness.