Rules— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and provides a specific example, which is good. However, the sentence structure is a bit awkward and some grammar errors affect clarity. Try to use simpler, clearer sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are many rules at my school. For instance, when I was in high school, all girls were required to keep their hair short because the school believed that long hair could distract them from studying.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but the sentence is too long and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to break your answer into shorter sentences and use linking words like 'although' or 'however' to improve coherence. Also, be careful with subject-verb agreement and article usage.

例: I don't think more rules always benefit students. Although some rules help discipline behavior, too many rules can limit creativity and imagination, which are important for growth.

提案: Your answer provides relevant information but has several grammar and word choice errors that affect clarity. Avoid repeating 'teacher' and 'teaching' too often. Also, use linking words to connect ideas and correct phrases like 'managing the clause' (should be 'classroom'). Try to make your answer more concise and natural.

例: Yes, I had an excellent physics teacher in high school. Although he didn't focus much on classroom management, he concentrated on explaining physics concepts clearly, which made his lessons very instructive.

× For example, when I was in high school they required all girls to cut short hair because they believe in maintaining long hair will waste the time for them to focus on study.

✓ For example, when I was in high school they required all girls to cut short hair because they believed that maintaining long hair would waste their time to focus on study.

The verbs 'believe' and 'will' need to agree with the past tense context 'when I was in high school'. Therefore, 'believe' should be 'believed' and 'will' should be 'would' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I don't think it is true that the more rules the better for students growth because even if sometimes some rules can help discipline students behaviors and manners, but too much rules or too much disciplines could restrain their creativity and imagination which is not good for their growth.

✓ I don't think it is true that the more rules, the better for students' growth because even if sometimes some rules can help discipline students' behaviors and manners, too many rules or too much discipline could restrain their creativity and imagination, which is not good for their growth.

The phrase 'students growth' should be possessive 'students' growth'. 'Students behaviors' should be 'students' behaviors'. 'Too much rules' is incorrect; 'rules' is countable, so 'too many rules' is correct. 'Too much disciplines' is incorrect; 'discipline' is uncountable, so 'too much discipline' is correct. Also, the conjunction 'but' after 'because' is redundant and should be removed.

× He was also a leading teacher, but he didn't pay too much attention on managing the clause.

✓ He was also a leading teacher, but he didn't pay too much attention to managing the class.

The correct preposition after 'pay attention' is 'to', not 'on'. Also, 'clause' is likely a typo and should be 'class' in this context.

× He focused purely on the teach on teaching physics.

✓ He focused purely on teaching physics.

The phrase 'the teach on teaching' is incorrect. The correct form is 'focused on teaching'. The word 'teach' should be replaced with the gerund 'teaching', and the extra 'on' removed.